Nine years old and coming out of the closet ......

His chin rests upon his knees pulled
safely to his chest
As he shivers in silence and listens in
to his very best

He's worried about his mother her cries
in time with the blows
The sounds of his mother hitting the floor
he can't see it..... but he knows

He reaches to hold onto something
anything there in the dark
His glove ....a bat the one he
found there in the park.

He remembers well in the darkness he's
been in there before
Yet his legs find the strength ...he rises
and opens the closet door

Walking slowly towards the door
and the noise he approaches the kitchen sink
And see's his fathers hands around her
throat .... and even before he can think

Just like his father showed him time
and time again
He puts his shoulder into the swing
and connects in the end

And this is how a nine year old comes
out of the closet
Not exactly what you thought is it?
And yet he didn't chose it


















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Ericdierker 3 years ago from Spring Valley, CA. U.S.A.

Amen!


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ahorseback 3 years ago Author

A vision came to me in a dream actually !........Thanks Eric.....:-}


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Becky Katz 3 years ago from Hereford, AZ

Beautiful, and beautifully done. He had to protect his mother.


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wayne barrett 3 years ago from Clearwater Florida

Thumbs up. Very interesting.


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LaThing 3 years ago from From a World Within, USA

Wow, incredible portrayal of an emotional scene! Beautifully done, Ed.... Voting up and awesome.


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ahorseback 3 years ago Author

Becky , I saw a vision of a boy in a closet ,shaking , afraid and it just took off !.......Thank you !....Ed


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Gypsy48 3 years ago

Excellent poem. Voted up and awesome.


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ahorseback 3 years ago Author

Gypsy 48 , Thank you for sharing !.......:-}


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fpherj48 3 years ago from Beautiful Upstate New York

Ed.....I really didn't know what to expect..but your surprise ending is great! The child is a hero for his Mom......sweet.


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Stina Caxe 3 years ago from Virginia

This made me cry. I relate to it... and I worry for my kids because of that. It is definitely an amazing piece of writing.


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ahorseback 3 years ago Author

Wayne thank you kind sir .....:-}


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ahorseback 3 years ago Author

LaThing , Hello my dear ! Thank you for being kind !


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ahorseback 3 years ago Author

Gypsy , Thank you so much .......Ed


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ahorseback 3 years ago Author

As all boys should be !.Thank you Fpherj , Thank you , A memory from my past and an outcome that may have been like this , if not for chance !......Ed


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ahorseback 3 years ago Author

Stina Oh NO ! No crying ....please ?...........Thank you for being here ....Ed


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Rosemay50 3 years ago from Hawkes Bay - NewZealand

A powerful piece


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teaches12345 3 years ago

Abuse is such a horrible thing, sadly, our children are exposed to way too much of it. Very powerful words.


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ahorseback 3 years ago Author

Hi Rosemay , Thank you dear !..........:-}


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ahorseback 3 years ago Author

Hi teaches , how are you ? Thank you for sharing !


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ImKarn23 3 years ago

Wayyyy too close to home, cowboy..


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sgbrown 3 years ago from Southern Oklahoma

This is so good! It is truly a shame that there are so many people who can relate to this. I'm sorry you had this vision, but it did make a wonderful piece.


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Made 3 years ago from Finland

It's so sad to know that this is the reality to many children.


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ahorseback 3 years ago Author

Hi Leslie , I had that feeling perhaps , And yet from the closet they have to come ! I hope the reality of this isn't yours though , or anyone here ! I've seen this though too closely as many have and yet I would put myself there in a minute , to be the last............hugs , girly girl !


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ahorseback 3 years ago Author

sgbrown , Thank you , yes its the worst shame on mankind ! ......Ed


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ahorseback 3 years ago Author

Made I agree , and it goes way too far into our society ! Thank you for sharing this !.....:-}


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Gypsy Rose Lee 3 years ago from Riga, Latvia

Wow powerful poem. Perhaps if children really had such courage they could stop such awful abuse in time before things go too far and tragedy strikes.


Sunnie Day 3 years ago

Such a sad reality for many children. Just on the news last night a woman was killed by her boyfriend as children watched. It brought tears to my eyes thinking of the trauma the children will have to live with. I wonder how long the abuse had went on and could it have been stopped way before it got to that point. Was it poor choices? Did she have signs he would break, becoming violent. So many unanswered questions. Thank you my friend for once more sounding the alarm when it comes to abuse. No baby should have to endure.

Sunnie


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B. Leekley 3 years ago from Kalamazoo, Michigan, USA

Up and Interesting. A heavy story powerfully told. Shared with followers.


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LadyFiddler 3 years ago from Somewhere in the West

Very lovely :) i remember once hitting my dad in his head with a big toy basket LOL for something like that ha ha ha. I was proud when the basket connected his skull.


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DDE 3 years ago from Dubrovnik, Croatia

It is sad for those who have to go through such horrific moments. A weel described poem, about a nine year old.


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Queen of Cups 3 years ago from a place somewhere in my paradise Etheas.

Indeed not what I thought but a beautiful poem...

It goes to show, and I know, that even children have their moments to shine even in the darkest moments of their lives.

The perspective is sad but tends to be true; growing up in situations of abuse myself, well, I can see this poem quite vividly in my mind.

I give you two thumbs up for this!


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ahorseback 3 years ago Author

Or if man had such courage as to never allow this to happen again , to the child or the woman , or if woman could see where trying hold a marriage together by changing a fool doesn't work !.....It has to stop Gypsy . Does anyone ever understand what the child in hiding is experiencing !.....Thanks Gypsy !....Ed


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ahorseback 3 years ago Author

Hi Sunnie ! thank you , You are so right dear , Do we all just turn our heads away figuritivly and literally ? .......Ed


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ahorseback 3 years ago Author

B Leekley Thank you so much kind sir !


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ahorseback 3 years ago Author

Lady fiddler , hey ! Wackum Fiddler , a new nick name !....lol seriously I hope you didn't experience that too much !.....Ed


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ahorseback 3 years ago Author

DDE, Thank you my raven haired friend !...........Ed


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ahorseback 3 years ago Author

Well Meetdoctor Thank you , I appreciate that !........Ed


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ahorseback 3 years ago Author

Queen of cups , Thank you and Im sorry , no one should grow up in this situation !


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Queen of Cups 3 years ago from a place somewhere in my paradise Etheas.

Oh no worries! You're very quite welcome!


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ahorseback 3 years ago Author

Queen of cups , Yeaaa !.........:-]


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KoffeeKlatch Gals 3 years ago from Sunny Florida

Very well done. I can see that little boy and feel his emotions. Up and awesome.


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ahorseback 3 years ago Author

Koffee Klatch my dear , it happens way too much !.........:-}


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wildove5 3 years ago from Cumberland, R.I.

Incredibly written and terribly sad! voted up!


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ahorseback 3 years ago Author

wildlove , Thank you and yes , there is too too much of this , .....:-]

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