Hopeless and Alone

I’ve done it so many times in my head,

I stood over a countless of imaginary dead,

but this was real,

it had just the right feel,

and it was the perfect night,

I held her tight,

so she wouldn’t get free,

and that’s when I felt the thrill

of the kill rising in me,

I was in total command,

as I felt her neck shift in my hand,

she struggled as if she could accomplish

being free of my hold,

she gasped, and her body went cold,

I wanted to stop,

but the evil thoughts in my head would pop,

as it urged me on,

then I slowly set her on the street,

her blood slowly draining at my feet,

her spirit was an odd illusion,

caught up in the confusion,

then it would ripple suddenly in the wind,

she was a woman living on her own,


and she died hopeless and alone.

© 2011 Frank Atanacio

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Debby Bruck 5 years ago

Frank ~ Your writing is really frightening. Please take it easy. Blessings, Debby

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writer20 5 years ago from Southern Nevada

Great poem, It's good to see you after a while.voted ypu up and awesome.

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Xenonlit 5 years ago

This is chilling! Well done.

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Sky9106 5 years ago from A beautiful place on earth.

Beautiful That you can get into the characters , and put a scaring on a few , once an author is able to convey his point, his job was done correctly.

Some write to please and some write to tease.

Good Job.

Blessings ..

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Deborah Brooks 5 years ago from Brownsville,TX

This was scary, but it is very well done.. It brought chills up my spine.. down right scared me.. good job...

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Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton Author

thanks so much guys for reading....:) Frank

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