Hopelessly Deadlocked


The morning sun once sharp as blades,

outside the courtroom window

weakens and fades,

giving way to the afternoon shades,

as the drama would coat,

six hours brought only a note

from the jury foreman,

hopelessly deadlocked,

the judge’s eyes cocked,

raw doubt stuck in their throats,

and the truth floats,

as the angry voice

of the lead detective shouted out

vulgar words of his choice,

what’s the legal system for?

The lead detective swallowed hard,

and retreated into the corridor,

as he paced back and forth

on the courthouse’s marble floor,

in a smoldering rage,

like an animal in a cage,

he gave them all they needed,

page for page,

an eyewitness, fingerprints,

a jailhouse confession,

but what he got back

was a false impression,

a compromise here

should never meet,

guilty, he goes to prison,

and in there he’ll feel the heat,

not guilty,

he goes back out on the street,

a serial killer has needs,

he’ll go back to doing his

dirty little deeds.

© 2012 Frank Atanacio

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carolinemd21 4 years ago from Close to Heaven

Wow great poem Frank. If you put all your poetry together it would make a great thriller. :)


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thank you Carolinemd21 for stopping by


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Just Ask Susan 4 years ago from Ontario, Canada

Did someone get to the jury Frank to make sure that it was a deadlock :)

Voting up and sharing.


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tillsontitan 4 years ago from New York

Powerful! In so few words you've conveyed so much action and feeling. I voted this up, awesome, and interesting. Of course the only problem is now we want to know how the jury voted ;)


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Deborah Brooks 4 years ago from Brownsville,TX

Good morning sweet sweet freind.. what a suspenceful exciting and trueful poem.. only Michelle's dad could do.. I think Michelle is bored...

Sharing

debbie


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

Thank you so much Justasksusan for visiting my deadlocked.. and Tilsontitan thank you to for your wonderful comment.. and Our Ms Brooks.. what????being a reporter isn't amusing enough for Michelle.. crack that creative whip and put her to work!!! LOL bless you guys


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Deborah Brooks 4 years ago from Brownsville,TX

Michelle does need to get to work doesnt she? I wonder what next.. ? Lol

Have a great day Frank


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

yes she does LOL


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Eiddwen 4 years ago from Wales

Brilliant Frank and I am sharing this one onto my FB page

http://www.facebook.com/#!/EveryoneHasADream

I have changed direction with this page and am now going to post the work of writers who have inspired me most. Therefore yours is a must and I will post others by you as I go along .

Thanks again for this gem and here's to so many more to share.

Eddy.


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LaThing 4 years ago from From a World Within, USA

Wow Frank! Another great courtroom scene with such vivid emotions, it's absolutely mind-blowing! I am really impressed by you ability to write such poems..... Voting up and immensely awesome! :)


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

Eddy that is just so sweet bless you as always and LaThing I just think you too are good for my ego... thanks for stopping by bless you too..:)


Valleypoet 4 years ago

Frank...you have left us in suspense again, leaving us crying out for more!...maybe you feel you have given us too many tragic endings, and you are now letting your readers decide?....another good read my friend:-))


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

Valleypoet.. yeah I wasn't thinking that but it sounds good so Im going to say of course that's what I had in mind... thanks for the laugh and the stop over...bless you bro


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writer20 4 years ago from Southern Nevada

Frank, you are an amazing writer of great poems. This is another one for your next book.

Voted up and totally amazing, Joyce


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Faith Reaper 4 years ago from southern USA

Hello Frank,

What an action-packed and dramatic poem to say the least! Excellent write as always, dear one. Waiting until next time on edge. God bless.

In His Love, Faith Reaper


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Rosemay50 4 years ago from Hawkes Bay - NewZealand

Now this is one where I want to know the end, the suspense is killing me.


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dghbrh 4 years ago from ...... a place beyond now and beyond here !!!

Hey Frank its outstanding ....you really do some thrilling work here. I think its really something to put so much with so little words and that too through a poetry. All votes up and I am sharing it too.

Thanks for sharing this one.


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ImKarn23 4 years ago

Sigh...doesn't it seem that these days the legal system is more of a crapshoot than anything else? You've captured that beautifully here, Frank! That detective's got heart!


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

Joyce and Faith thank you so much for stopping by my deadlock bless you guys :)


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

dghbrh and Rosemay thanks for visiting my deadlock and thanks for the comments bless you guys...) Frank


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thelyricwriter 4 years ago from West Virginia

Frank, now this one is a classic. Up, awesome, and interesting. Frank, when you can see what your reading, that is a special writer. I have no issues seeing with you writings, shows the level of talent you have Frank. Another awesome job.


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

Imkarn and thelyricwriter thank you for visiting and making a comment for my deadlock ... and thelyricwriter seeing is believing right? LOL bless you both..


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Ruchira 4 years ago from United States

As usual you hit the nail at the right spot. However, I do hope that justice prevails and may the innocent be spared...Amen.


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thanks Ruch for your visit and comment..bless you


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Gypsy Rose Lee 4 years ago from Riga, Latvia

Voted up. Just great. I call this a chiller thriller. Who needs a serial killer on the streets.


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thans gypsy rose lee


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epigramman 4 years ago

...what's that old line , Frank, in Dragnet, where he says -"there's a thousand untold stories in this city and Frank has told each and everyone of them" ....well I never miss an opportunity to tell you and the hub world that you are one of my favorite writer/poets here - and if you want to read a real dark funny one then check out my latest in a little shameless self promotion here called Rising to the occasion.

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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

Epi thanks for stopping by my friend and Ill check out your latest entry ...Frank


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mckbirdbks 4 years ago from Emerald Wells, Just off the crossroads,Texas

dead unlocked - you are the master of this genre. It's completely arresting.


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thanks so much mckbird...


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Vinaya Ghimire 4 years ago from Nepal

Frank,I can feel the anticipation of the man in the witness box.


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thanks VG ..:)


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Aisha Jilani 4 years ago from Lahore

deep words .... keep it up


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thank you Aisha :)


lovedoctor926 4 years ago

I like your introduction. This is really good. Your poems always tell a story. Good work Frank.

"The morning sun once sharp as blades,

outside the courtroom window

weakens and fades,

giving way to the afternoon shades."


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Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton Author

thank you Marlene :)

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