How Dare You Look So Beautiful?

Many of my poems have been written as song lyrics: some still awaiting music. This is one of them.


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How dare you look so beautiful

Then turn and walk away

How dare you smile and wish me well

While I beg you to stay


How dare you look so happy

While my heart breaks in two

How can you leave me all alone

While I'm still loving you


How dare you lie to me again

What purpose does it serve

To say you'll always love me

You've got alot of nerve


How dare you say it's for the best

And tell me life goes on

How can a man without a heart

Look forward to the dawn


How dare you say someday I'll find

The one who's right for me

And tell me to remember

There are more fish in the sea


How dare you speak of fishing

The metaphor is odd

I must say for the HALIBUT

"I feel like I've been SCROD"





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equebee 6 years ago from Lincoln

An excellent poem with deep feelings and very true to life. Many people who have had romantic break ups will understand this superb hub.


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carolina muscle 6 years ago from Charlotte, North Carolina

Nicely said... and heartbreakingly true to life!


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Christopher Price 6 years ago from Vermont, USA Author

Thanks equebee.

Although I wrote the first draft of this poem quite some time ago, every time I read it I still relive the stunned stabbing pain in my chest where my heart beat just seconds before.

CP


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Christopher Price 6 years ago from Vermont, USA Author

Thanks Chris.

Seems to me that, while "Breaking up is hard to do", sometimes it can just be so unexpected that you're left shocked and breathless by the impact...like getting sucker punched by Jesus!

CP


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Robwrite 6 years ago from Bay Ridge Brooklyn NY

Very nice mix of desire and anger. I hope it gets put to music. Well done.


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Christopher Price 6 years ago from Vermont, USA Author

Thanks very much Rob.

Although I sing like a baritone canary I find it difficult to compose original melodies.

Perhaps a fellow hubber will stumble upon my work and Nashville will rock to our rhythms.

CP


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saddlerider1 6 years ago

This could be a good tearjerker for sure. Just needs a little spit and polish and the right chords and picks could turn this out on a CD. I've been sucker punched more than I care to mention over the years.

Those hurtin songs always had me visiting my local bar to drink my sadness away. But it only helps for awhile and your hurtin all over again in the morning. I liked this one Chris, nice job .


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Christopher Price 6 years ago from Vermont, USA Author

Ken,

When I penned the first draft of this poem I wasn't so much visiting the bars as living there. I was a bartender and "cooler" for 8 years.

Bars are like a Swap Shop, where you trade tonight's heartache for tomorrow's headache.

"Hair of the dog" can lessen the headache. The heart's a whole different matter.

Thanks,

CP


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50 Caliber 6 years ago from Arizona

Great job, definitely could be a winner set to music, 50


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Christopher Price 6 years ago from Vermont, USA Author

Hey 50, thanks.

I think lots of people can relate.

"Brokenhearted or not...you hurt me, now I'm pissed."

Now there's a title of song waiting to be written!

CP


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Nellieanna 6 years ago from TEXAS

Am I the only female who came to the pity party? Seriously, though - it's a healthy one; anger is one way of expressing frustration and disappointment, and is always an acceptable one in the male world - and oh, so attuned to Nashville. And then, after the preliminaries, like my dear Dad always said, "If tears don't help, try sweat!"

I love the use of scrod as a verb, though it's a mixed message because that's one delicious entre! You're so lucky to live where they've heard of it! Uncommonly good!

Chris - what a wonderfully multi-talented person you are. The poetry is charming and disarming and the self-portrait is wonderful! More, more!!


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Christopher Price 6 years ago from Vermont, USA Author

My dear Nellieanna,

Were I a gladiator your cries of "More, more" could solve the population explosion!

Apparently, 'til now you have been the only lady bold enough to peer behind the curtain. Welcome.

Your praise has granted one of my fondest wishes...to gain the approval of one whose opinion I can truly respect.

May this be the beginning of a beautiful friendship.

Thank you.

CP


ralwus 6 years ago

Let's hear it for scrod! lol


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Christopher Price 6 years ago from Vermont, USA Author

Excuse me while I flounder.

I was a feeling a little crappie.

Cheers.


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brightforyou 6 years ago from Florida

Nice work. Well done!


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Christopher Price 6 years ago from Vermont, USA Author

Thanks brightforyou,

Welcome. Feel free to browse.

CP


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Eiddwen 6 years ago from Wales

Brilliant way with words. I really enjoyed reading this and can't wait to read some more. Take care.


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Christopher Price 6 years ago from Vermont, USA Author

Eiddwen,

Thank you very much.

I'll keep writing as long as you keep reading.

Peace.

CP


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shibashake 6 years ago

Love it! The ending is brilliant - even though I don't very much like halibut or scrod :D


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Christopher Price 6 years ago from Vermont, USA Author

Thanks shiba,

Yeah, her leaving left a bitter taste in my mouth too.

Thanks for stopping by.

CP


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christopheranton 6 years ago from Gillingham Kent. United Kingdom

Oh dear. Christopher how many of us have been down that road? You've perfectly captured feelings I have felt all too often.


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Christopher Price 6 years ago from Vermont, USA Author

christopheranton,

When boarding the shuttle bus to the Heartbreak Hotel, once can be too often.

I think I had a multi-pass.

It sure is a long uphill walk back isn't it?

CP


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Petra Vlah 6 years ago from Los Angeles

I can see (and hear) this as a great country music song, perfect for Willy Nelson; it has all the elements from heartbroken sadness to the final twist of sarcasm without biterness.


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Christopher Price 6 years ago from Vermont, USA Author

Thank you so much Petra,

The shock, the pain, the anger was so overwhelming I can still feel it all when I reread these lyrics.

But pithy platitudes and ridiculous reassurances are absurdly asinine in such a situation.

"I just tore your heart out...wiped my hands on your shirt...I'm leaving...have a nice day!"

WTF?

Uh, did I just write the refrain!?!

CP


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Micky Dee 6 years ago

Okay* Bonk! It WAS beautiful It really paints "a" picture of your love for a wonderful woman (possibly who just walked out). Some of this I have actually felt for a long time! I just didn't expect this to be so funny! The funny was right there at the end! Great country song! Great entertainment for the whole family!


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Christopher Price 6 years ago from Vermont, USA Author

Micky, I didn't read your comment but I just want to say you've got a lot of nerve to be so critical and...

Oh...never mind!

What I meant was, you are a gentleman and a scholar and a fine judge of literary perfection...uh, yeah...that's it.

CP


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neeleshkulkarni 6 years ago from new delhi

i guess the first reaction is anger and frsutration at how the world can be so unfair.but then over time one realises that the world always was unfair and always shall so be.yet one cannot but be angry.well put but as long as this poem exists the pain will remain.you have beautifully captured it but also ensured its longevity.


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Christopher Price 6 years ago from Vermont, USA Author

neelesh,

For me the writing and sharing is cathartic and helps me to let go of the pain. The flippant twist of the final stanza injects a bit of humor and hopefully signals the decision to move on.

As far as ensuring the scenario's longevity, I would welcome the opportunity for it to live on through this poem; letting those who have experienced similar experiences to know they are not alone.

CP


amorea13 6 years ago

Christopher I loved this poem - great use of rhythm and rhyme and poignantly expressed too - thanks for this - and thanks for finding my words so I could find yours. Cheers.


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Christopher Price 6 years ago from Vermont, USA Author

amorea13,

Glad you liked it. I've read a couple of your hubs and am anxious for more.

CP


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screwevery1 5 years ago

hello Mr. Price...... i apreciated what you had said on my poem "found.... but still lost" ... means alot to have ppl write a lil comment and have some kind of connection to the world...

i read this poem to see your witing... the name of this one jumped out at me..... very nice .... well written

i had to look up the word SCROD though.... and im not sure if i completly get it.... there was a part of a definition that seemed to fit but im not sure...."split,boned and ready to cook"

any rate liked it lots and will read more at another time


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MartieCoetser 5 years ago from South Africa

I wrote a comment, then I saw Petra already said exactly what I’ve written. I also hate comments like “There are many fish in the sea... this bad experience will only strengthen you... don’t mourn, s/he is now with God... tears are good for you...” Irrelevant phrases in an effort to comfort!


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Christopher Price 5 years ago from Vermont, USA Author

screwevery1:

Thanks for visiting. "Scrod" is an ocean fish popular in the New England states, but I used the term as a play on words..."scrod" being a slang derivation of "screwed". From your hubpages name I can imagine you can relate!

The main theme of the poem is the meaningless platitudes, the trite phrases of faux-sympathy and the euphemisms that serve as insincere encouragement offered to console someone in the midst of pain and suffering.

When your lover tears your heart out and walks away unconcerned, being told it will only hurt for a minute has a rather hollow ring.

CP


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Christopher Price 5 years ago from Vermont, USA Author

Martie:

Your comments are always welcome. Thank you.

CP


Doug Turner Jr. 5 years ago

"How can a man without a heart/ look forward to the dawn." -- As poetic as it gets. I guess anyone who casts a line into the waters of love is going to pull up scrod once in a while! Great poem, CP.


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Christopher Price 5 years ago from Vermont, USA Author

Thanks Doug.

The problem was, I was the one caught "hook, line and sinker", unaware that she practiced "catch and release".

CP

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