I, Fraternity: A Novel in Progress: Chapter1

Eta Iota Mu Fraternity House

Chapter One

Author's Note: The following excerpt for my novel is entirely fictional. Any like occurrence to similar or actual events in purely coincidental as the people, places and objects in this story were manufactured solely by the imagination of the author of this work. Now that I got that out of the way, I want to say a little bit about this novel that I have been working on. I am dedicating this novel to my proud brothers of my beloved fraternity, because without their Light and Guidance, this novel would have never come to be. It is my belief that Brotherhood is earned and is not a privilege. Many view Fraternities in negative light, due to its less than serious portrayal as viewed by the mass media. It is my hope that this novel will shed some light on such an unknown subject as Greek Lettered societies in college as they have, I believe, to be viewed negatively and have gotten notoriety as a ridiculous frivolity or distraction within the collegiate ranks. I hope that I can change the view of at least one person and so with that, accomplish my goal.


I am one of many, I thought while sitting upright in meditative silence. Though I try, I cannot hear what is going on around me and cannot see because my eyes are completely covered by a blue bandana. There are no smells that I recognize and as far as my ability to feel, there is an occasional draft coming almost directly behind me every so often during the entire course of the night. Someone was going out and coming back in now and again. And what is this night anyway? Is this the end or the beginning? I wasn’t sure. The wooden chair I was sitting on creaked as I shifted a bit as I attempted to gather my thoughts. I crossed my arms and thought about this some more. This is what is must be like when you die, I thought. Or when you are about to be born…


“It’s the same shit!” Brother Ian said while somewhere behind the wall of the room I was in. In the past few weeks, his voice has been the most recognizable.

“Keep it down, huh? Of all nights, this isn’t the time,” Brother Jacob said to him. “Look, you just have to deal with it for now, okay?” There was a pause. “So, are you ready? Good, then let’s get this over with.”

I listened on. Their footsteps followed them away from where I was sitting. First they were loud and then grew faint, finally fading away into another unknown room. After a time I stretched, taking in a deep breath. My many thoughts led me to solace, to Anna. I envisioned her in her dorm, sitting down in front of her mirror while putting on eyeliner. She wore a sheik robe of like colors of her sorority, of green and white. She smelled wonderful, like a flower garden in spring after a sun shower. I came to her secretly with the intention of getting in a quick nap and much needed rest before meeting up with my pledge brothers. She shrugs back her hair to work on her other eye, the eyeliner in hand and then focuses her eyes on me, in the reflection of the mirror. I am smiling at her. She smiles back then shakes her head at me. Without her, I would not have gotten this far into the program. Over the past few weeks, she has fed me whenever I forgot to eat, washed my clothes when I couldn’t spare the time and shared her bed with me. I didn’t know why. Her generosity was a complete mystery to me.

“Am I keeping you up?” She asked me, going back to applying mascara to her lashes.

“Yes, you are,” I said to her, still smiling. My arms were crossed underneath my head like a pillow. “But I’m not complaining…I like the fact that you do.”

“Yeah, you like looking at me, don’t you?” She continued smiling while swapping glances between herself and me. I chose my words carefully.

“What do you think?” I said with bold sarcasm. She was now putting on lipstick-pencil thing, coloring inside the lines of her naturally-swollen lips.

“Why don’t you take a nap? You look so tired.” I was tired, but seeing her excited me. I felt myself fill with energy just being around her. I knew that I should take full advantage of her kindness and get some rest. But there was this fear...It was a combination of two things—getting somehow caught by one of my brothers in the act of sleeping when I wasn’t supposed to and missing out on the opportunity of spending my waking hours with Anna which, were few and far between. Every minute counts. Pledging my fraternity made me aware of the precious time I do have during the course of my everyday. Spending time with her was something magical and special, I guess you could say. Much the same could be said about how she and I met one day while walking towards Elmira Hall on my way to History with Professor Virgil. I felt a sudden attraction when seeing her for the first time and every time there after. Her chestnut hair was long with streaks of blonde, splashing over the shoulders and hood of her green and white sorority jacket. She had an olive complexion in which I bet was smooth to touch and her eyes were green, much like that of her jacket that looked straight ahead. I damn near collided with a stray pedestrian while checking her out on the crowded concourse. I knew that I had to meet her, had to at least get her name and soon. In my head, I made a conscious effort to scribble down the time and day in which I saw her so I would continue seeing her albeit on a schedule. On the second and third time spotting her, I smiled at her and she smiled back. After a little time, a little luck, and some testicular fortitude, I forced myself to walk up to her. I looked straight into those Mediterranean eyes. Break the ice, do it now I thought.

“Hi,” I said to her.

“Hi,” she replied. “Are you pledging Etas?” It was comical. I looked down to see right above my heart my pledge pin as if it were an insect that had chanced landed on me. I didn’t have to break the ice after all. She broke it for me. God bless her. I smiled.

“Yeah, you can tell huh?”

“Are you kidding? You guys stick out a sore thumb.” She was right. We wore white dress shirts with ties, backpacks worn with both shoulder straps and blue jeans. It took a sorority sister to tell me that I was a walking billboard for the brothers of Eta Iota Mu. “So, how’s it going so far?”

“It’s fun.” She laughed. I made her laugh.

“Do you know what you are getting yourself into?” I had to think about this one. I shook my head.

“No, I don’t. I have no clue.” And I didn’t. It was a totally new experience for me, an unknown. Still, she smiled. There was a lot going on behind that smile. My eyes trailed to her jacket in which the Jessica was stitched upon it, right above her heart. I assumed that that was in fact her name. “So, your name’s Jessica?” She shook her head.

“No, everyone that doesn’t know me thinks that. This jacket was passed down to me from my big sister in my sorority. Before her, it belonged to my big-big, Jessica. When you cross, you’ll get a jacket too from you big brother…By the way, my real name is Anna.” I was told to not offer my hand to a woman upon meeting her by the Brothers but instead, to wait for it to be offered to me. I did and she did—offer her hand to me—which I of course accepted.


“Jason,” I said to her. “My name is Jason.” We shook hands and made eye contact.

“I know,” she replied, “I’ve known you and not just from here.” She had me. I was speechless, searching her face through the aisles of my memory. Where would I know her from? I thought. “Think back. Imagine me…Heavier and shorter. Not to mention I had a bit of an acne problem.” Shit, she could be anyone. Seriously, didn’t we all have acne back in high school? I shook my head.

“Sorry, I’m coming up empty.”

“Do you remember Anna Johnson?” I did. It took a moment. I went to school with her growing up back home, from kindergarten all the way up to twelfth grade. A real quiet type, very shy, didn’t talk to anyone really. I use to make her laugh to cheer her up because she always seemed so sad.

“Yes.”

“Well, she and I were really good friends. We still are.” Wow, so I’m looking for a pair of Annas and couldn’t get one-half of them to appear. I was more stumped than I was before. She really could be anyone from my past. I take it she wasn’t exactly popular, else I would know her. I played varsity football so I was automatically in the high school limelight, regardless if I chose to be or not.

“I’m sorry, I don’t remember.”

“It’s okay. I’ve changed a lot—that’s what people tell me—as if I became a different person overnight.” I thought about this. I’ve got a girl, who was, back in the day, overweight, with acne, and short. I played with this idea and wondered if she was joking with me, although her face said otherwise: I was once a victim. “You know, your locker was seven lockers down from my locker…Once, you asked me for a pen because you lost yours. You were on your way to history class. Other than that, you never looked at me once.” Do you want me to say I’m sorry? I mean…Shit, had I known you were going to turn into a bombshell I would have asked you for more than a friggin’ PEN! I would have asked you for

“My number…” I gave her a suspicious look, my eyes widening.

“WHAT?” I damn near fell to the floor.

“My locker number was 1733 and yours was 1726 right?”

“I think so. But how in the world do you remember that? Who remembers something like that?” My God, what we have here is a nerd trapped inside a supermodel’s body. She might be a swan now but always had the brains of Isaac Newton. She was like Wonder Woman or something. I was sure of it. She giggled.

“I don’t know…I’m embarrassing myself right now. I usually am not this open to people. So on that note, I have to get to class.” Without realizing it at that moment, I just had a conversation with a perfect 10 for the first time in my life and she’s a dork. Wait just a goddamn minute,”I almost said out loud.

“Will I see you again?” I said. She was already three steps away from our conversation. She then reached into her purse and got out a pen. She bit down on the tip and uncapped it and then began scribbling something onto a piece of paper which she handed to me.

“Here’s my number. Call me sometime when you’re not so busy…” She then did something that made my heart sing: She winked at me. Maybe I’m just plain nuts, but how many girls in the world wink? I played it cool. Fuckin’ stay cool, all right? I thought, fighting to control myself.

“I will,” I said. I didn’t even have to ask her for her number. She offered it to me…I went over to talk to her and she totally dominated the conversation, giving me no chance to screw it up. I looked down at Anna’s scribbled number upon a torn piece of paper. To me, it may very well have been a treasure map for Cortez’ Gold. My heart was racing and my hands were trembling. I watched her walk away admiring her every step, especially the way in which it made her long mane bounce up and down as if on springs. When she turned around to see if I was watching her, she waved at me and I waved back. She was smiling and so was I. And that was how Anna and I first met for the first time in memory.

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blondepoet 7 years ago from australia

Oh I am impressed, a lovely story, I bet it gets real juicy soon. Will stay tuned, am having trouble with aliens in my house at the moment aghhhhh. (hugs)


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dohn121 7 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

Why are you so funny??? Thanks BP!


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blondepoet 7 years ago from australia

LMAO I have no idea dohnny, then again I was probed by aliens so..errr....could be a connection. xox


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dohn121 7 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

Those aliens sure got good taste :)


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blondepoet 7 years ago from australia

Hey honey bun you mentioned a project......???


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dohn121 7 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

Yup. Just write a 55-Word Story and send it to me via email: dohn121@yahool.com. I'll then post it on my hub...I was also thinking about another project idea if you want to take that on instead? Just let me know, hot stuff and I'll email it to you!


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redrose65 7 years ago from Morenci, Mi

keep up the good work...it was very good.


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dohn121 7 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

Thank you for the comment, redrose65. I almost gave up on this novel! I've still have more material to post so check back soon!


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fierycj 7 years ago from The Fiery Heart of Africa

I like the part where Anna winks at him. It always kills me when a chick winks at me. No friggin' kidding. Love the story, boss.


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dohn121 7 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

Thank you, Fiery. This book is actually based on a very important time in my life (I won't say how much, he he). It's my belief that this book needs to get published. Before I began writing this, I searched for books/novels on fraternities and found it to be practically non-existent! That was when I made up my mind to write one as I believe there is a definite market for this particular novel.

About Anna and her winking at my character? I can attest that it's a weakness of mine! I don't know why that is either!


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Carla Soho 7 years ago

This is a very interesting story!


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dohn121 7 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

Thanks, Carla! I almost gave up on this Novel until I gained a readership while at Hubpages! It's great to get feedback! Stay tuned for more!


cosette 7 years ago

that's excellent. can't wait to read more...


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dohn121 7 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

Thanks, cosette! I'm still working on this novel. As of late, I've noticed that more and more people are reading it (all four chapters). I'm going to create more new hubs in the coming days for it...Just as long as more people read it!


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Patty Inglish, MS 7 years ago from North America

The only book I've sen about fraternities was called "The Real Animal House" and it seemed quite wild with legal involvements, etc. Anyway, I think you novel is going to be very good. Thumbs up!


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dohn121 7 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

Once after finishing college, I thought to look into reading a book on fraternities, whether factual or fictional. To my surprise, I found that there were none. It is to that revelation that I owe this idea, of writing a novel on the experience, as not many people who are not a part of this discreet society are aware of exactly what really goes on. I believe that if there is a market for it, then my novel will certainly be a good candidate. Thank you again Patty.


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zadrobi 7 years ago from Carbondale, IL

Ooooh, what a tease, dohn! I better see another post for I, Fraternity soon or I might become an unruly fan.


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dohn121 7 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

I got 5 more chapters so far, zadrobi...You didn't read all of them already, did you??? If so, I'd really like to hear want you think. Thanks for reading this hub, by the way. I appreciate it.


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zadrobi 7 years ago from Carbondale, IL

Haha yes, yes I did-- I meant to post this on the last chapter. I'll be sending you something when I get home from work tonight.


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dohn121 7 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

That's great to hear, zadrobi. It's tough even for me to just sit down and read a novel or novel excerpts on-line...Most of us are just lazy, I guess. I look forward to hearing from you again.


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Waren E 7 years ago from HAS LEFT THE BUILDING............

Oi I made some typos in the first comment here I thought I would have gotten to edit it after posting,I'm not if the comment is even going to show up so sorry,oh well..LOL

In case it does not show up, I must commend you on a fine story

dohn121,I really enjoyed it,I'm now moving on to chapter 2!


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dohn121 7 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

Thank you again waren! I'm heading over there too! I'm really excited to hear what you think of it so far.


Useful Knowledge 7 years ago

I finally finished chapter one. I am going to read Chapter 2 now. So far, I love it.


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dohn121 7 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

Thanks, UK. I'm glad that you liked it. After reading the others chapter (!) let me know if I should pursue the rest of the novel, as I value your opinion.


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dusanotes 7 years ago from Windermere, FL

dohn121, I read Shalini Kagle often and read some of your comments and told myself I must come over and visit dohn121. I really admire your sensitivity with fiction, and the fact you write like you speak - or I should say, like your characters speak. Boy, I'm so impressed with your writing. You are really some kind of masterful, poetic writer. I'll keep hubbing and may even add chapters of a current novel I am writing. It's called Dragon Hunter and it has to do with an amateur sleuth named Rip Rhymer, of all things (from a name in my past, a baseball player I admired as a boy). Good luck to you. I am your newest fan.

Don White alias dusanotes


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dohn121 7 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

Thank you so much, Don. I really do appreciate the feedback. Although I really do like the characters in this novel and the events that will eventually take place, I just have the time to finish this novel just yet, as I readying my first completed novel for submission to an agent. I wish you good luck with your novel and hope that you give it some serious treatment. I like the premise of you novel so far. Thank you for fanning me, by the way! I look forward to future comments from you and wish the best in all of your endeavors. Regards.


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prettydarkhorse 7 years ago from US

Hi DOHN< why did I not read this before, your characters are like alive and is there a series to this one? I dont like to miss it, you are truly a good writer,

although the truth is one time I wink at a man and guess what,was in trouble because he wont leave me alone after that hahaha,

have a good day DOHN< Maita


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dohn121 7 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

You you, Maita. I've been putting this novel on hold. It's been a while since I stop writing this one...I might have to go back to the drawing board and fix a few things (I kind of ran into a wall). Mind you, there's still much more that I haven't posted, only because no one reads them as they are too long for internet readers. Thanks for the compliment. I might go back to writing this one again, but for right now, I have other obligations. Please keep reading and let me know what you think :)


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dusanotes 6 years ago from Windermere, FL

Dohn, an interesting story. I'm impressed. A lot of exposition, but it ties nicely into your dialog. First person is a good way to go with something like going back in time and meeting someone you don't at first recognize. There's a lot of thinking, because if you blurt out things to that kind of a girl you could easily ruin things with her. Good job, Don White


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dohn121 6 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

Thank you for the great comment Don and thank you for reading. There still much that I want to establish with this story, but am not sure of the exact "direction" it will go (I can't make up my mind just yet).

I'm not necessarily "done" with this novel as I'd like to come back and work on it later on and eventually finish it. I appreciate that you took your time to read this and hope that you'll continue! Thanks as always Don.

Dohn


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Run Down Battery 6 years ago from UK

OK you got me hooked. I'm waiting for another line with the equisite beauty of ' She was already three steps away from our conversation.' Delicious!!


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dohn121 6 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

Ha! Thanks, RDB! I'm glad to hear it and am equally glad you're enjoying it. Thanks so much.


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SweetiePie 6 years ago from Southern California, USA

When I first started attending college we had an opportunity to meet all the prospective groups on campus. No from the sorority tables approached me to join, and I was actually okay with that. Later on there was a girl who invited to join a sorority that was more inclusive, and more community service based. I sort of regret turning her down because it might have been an interesting experience, but I guess everything happens for a reason. I went on to be part of two academic honor societies, which never did the level of community service they were supposed to. My senior year of college I was a conversation partner with the international students, where I spent several hours a week speaking with them and helping them with their conversation skills. I never joined a sorority, but I was involved in a few organizations along the way. I think your book will definitely have a market as many people are interested in the Greek life.


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dohn121 6 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

Thanks, SweetiePie. It sounds like you were recruited to join a service sorority like Alpha Pi Omega. There was one on my campus as well. I had a lot of fun with mine--maybe too much fun as my grades did suffer. Looking back, I have a love/hate relationship with my decision to join my fraternity. I guess that I just wish I did things a bit differently. Maybe I joined too early and should've waited until I was more disciplined. However, I do believe that everything does happen for a reason and your situation is no different.

I really do believe that this book does have a market just like you said. One of the things that a publishing house (perhaps more so than anything else) determines when making the decision to sign a new writer is whether or not the writer in question is "marketable." Believe it or not, the writing doesn't even have to be that good! Crazy, huh?

Thanks so much for commenting. I really do hope that I can get this novel finished and then published soon.


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SweetiePie 6 years ago from Southern California, USA

Some people tell me they think Stephanie Meyer is not a good writer, but I actually think it is because she gears her writing for a younger audience, and thus uses smaller words so they can comprehend the text. Nevertheless, her books are extremely popular, and now have been made into movies. For some reason I think a novel about Greek life would have the potential of inspiring a movie, if you know what I mean. Also, I think you are a talented writer, so at least you know you will be putting your best efforts into this book.


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dohn121 6 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

That really is a great critique of her, SweetiePie. I heard the very same thing. Thanks so much for the comment! I've looked into books that pertain to Greek Life and found only fictional pieces to use it as a backdrop rather than a forefront to a plot. I really do hope that this will take off. I have a bit a few more chapters that I can create into hubs. I've just put off doing so! Thanks again, SweetiePie!


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apricot 6 years ago from Italy

You got me interested here - not only for the story (which flowed along like a fine wine) but also for the Fraternity thing. I have to admit that I don't know the first thing about Fraternities - I'm not even sure there are any over here. The fact that, as you say, they get a bad press makes me think they must be worth getting interested in! I'm getting very curious about this book...


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dohn121 6 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

Thank you so much! It's so good to hear from you apricot! Will you be reading the remainder of this series? I hope you do and hope that you also follow my Revenge, Inc. series as well! Let me know if you think I should continue on writing it, as I'm on a bit of a hiatus with it.


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apricot 6 years ago from Italy

You don't mean to tell me you've stopped writing it?! I certainly shall be reading the rest!! But when I read your stories I like to print them out - there's nothing like sitting on the sofa with a good story and cup of cocoa! (The glare of the computer just isn't the same, you see..) I can't help thinking you should be sending them off to the publishers though...A hiatus is not a bad thing though (I admit I had to run and look that word up, tee hee!) - just as long as you go back to it. Right I'm going to get the printer plugged in and the cocoa on the go...


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dohn121 6 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

*Frowns* Yes, for now. I will come back to this--I promise. Just or now, I'm working on editing my first novel, am writing Revenge, Inc. right here at HubPages, and am trying to save up enough Google Adsense money so I can fly to Italy to visit you :D In the meantime, I can post at least 5 more installments to this novel as they're already written. Hopefully I can generate enough fanfare to keep it afloat!

I love how you print out the story and read it at the in the comfort of a sofa. That makes :) just as you always manage to make me :)

Thanks apricot! Lemme know what you think and don't take a hiatus from doing so ;)

Dohn


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Bartisimus 6 years ago from Malta

I think you should use the real names of those fraternity brothers. I think it would kind of honor them in a way. So far I like the story.


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dohn121 6 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

Geez, Bart. It's been a long time...I'm so glad you found me here and to hear such a great vote of confidence means a helluva lot. I'll definitely take that into consideration. I haven't written this book in a while but what to go back and finish. I hope all's well with you. You got a cute kid there by the way! Congrats to you, Brother.


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kowality 6 years ago from Everywhere

Dohn..you might have to move up to Vancouver BC and get in the film industry. Awesome...I mean Awesome story telling!


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dohn121 6 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

Ha! I think that this would make for a very entertaining if not enlightening movie! That's certainly a thought my friend and a thought offer to turn down :) Thank you very much.


Storm 6 years ago

Hey man,

How are you write this book without giving too much insight to ritual? I don't know how it is for your respective fraternity but it is huge to mine and our identity...


AllyLord 5 years ago

Hey, this is shit hot stuff mate! Lol. I'm actually a fresher in the UK, and am trying to write a novel about all the crazy pranks that go on in Uni; though it's possibly a bit more comic and surreal than yours. All the same, keep it up :D


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dohn121 5 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

Storm...I can understand your sentiments over my intentions when writing this. Much like you, it was beaten into my head that to reveal the secrets of my beloved fraternity. I thought I did a good job without betraying the fraternity I love, but that's my opinion.


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dohn121 5 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

Hi AllyLord. I would love to hear about your experiences. If you want, give me a link and I'll be sure to read and comment. Thanks for coming by and sharing your thoughts :D

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