I Challenged Myself To Write This Poem

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Hello everyone, my name is Sue

Thought I’d write a poem

To introduce myself to you

In 1957, I was born in Montreal

That’s in Quebec, Canada, y'all

Argyle Street, is in Verdun

It was my first home

It’s where it all begun

I was Margaret and Norman’s very first child

We were happy, for a very short while

One night, while I was asleep in my bed

I heard a big bang, and sat up and said

What was that noise, to which my father replied

It’s alright Susan, go back to bed, and close your eyes

What I found out, a few years later

Was my mother had fallen down the stairs

Tripped over some boots, and down she went

That was the noise, I had heard from my bed

Into the hospital she did go

For months she was there

Little did anyone know

She would not ever come out

Cancer was in the marrow of her bones

Cancer took my mother when I was only three

Thank God for my grandparents along with my dad

His sister Jenny, and other family I had

They all helped in everyway they could

To help raise me, for the good

All my years of growing up the thing I feared the most

Was losing my father

Some people understand, and others don’t bother

My dad remarried, when I was ten

To an old flame, he had way back when

She and I tried to exist

Neither one of us wanting to enlist

Stepmother up and left

Off to California

Went Way out west

Dad had to follow her and go

Even though I begged him

Saying no, no, no

So off we went, moving to the Golden State

Beside myself, oh how I wept

That I had to leave, all my mates

When I look back now after years have passed

I am thankful, that I had that chance… it was a blast

After three years, we moved farther north

Crossing over the Golden Gate

To Seattle Washington, the Evergreen State

From Sunny California, to all the rain

Had to get used to the change

My parents sure did like to move

Not sure what they were trying to prove

Yes it was hard on me

But once I grew up, I was free

Washington State with the mountains, and trees

To me was a beauty, and totally serene

Hiking on weekends, I would go

To Snoqualmie Falls…the most beautiful of all

After graduating from Juanita High School

It was off to work, and joining a car pool

Farmers Life Insurance, where I worked four years

Telex operator, data entry clerk

Working my way up to a Licensing clerk

Always wanted to return to, the land where I was born

And I sadly left the U.S.A.

But knew, I could come return some day

So fortunate to have lived, in both countries

I feel I am blessed, with many buddies

A poem written with 500 words

To some, this may sound absurd

It was a challenge for me to write

I leave you now take care and good-night

This was a challenge to me, to see if I could write a 500 word poem.

© 2011 Susan Zutautas

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Just Ask Susan 5 years ago from Ontario, Canada Author

Frank, Thanks, Glad you liked it.

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Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

First my heart goes out to your mom in prayers of course.. and the poem clever, smart and a good share

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Just Ask Susan 5 years ago from Ontario, Canada Author

sankari, It was challenging. Thank you. Nice to meet you.

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sankari.nayagam 5 years ago

that was a good challenge. turning your life into a poem was a good thought. nice one!

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Just Ask Susan 5 years ago from Ontario, Canada Author

Sharyn, It was actually easy to do, once I got rolling. Hope that you will do one too :)

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Sharyn's Slant 5 years ago from Northeast Ohio USA


I loved learning so much about you through this challenge to yourself. Great job, got me thinking . . .


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Just Ask Susan 5 years ago from Ontario, Canada Author

Sky, Thank you.

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Sky9106 5 years ago from A beautiful place on earth.

Great Just Ask. It is nice when one can see life as real as it is, that you seem always poised to do , it's nice how you combine joy and sorrow , after all the live off each other.


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Just Ask Susan 5 years ago from Ontario, Canada Author

Linda, Nice to see you, hope that you're well. Thank you for reading and commenting.

Golfgal, LOL, yes I suppose.

Golfgal 5 years ago

I love the little red caboose, wow, we are dating ourselves.

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Minnetonka Twin 5 years ago from Minnesota

Susan-I'm very impressed with your 500 word poem. Thanks for sharing so much of yourself with us. I feel I know you better from reading this historical poem.

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Just Ask Susan 5 years ago from Ontario, Canada Author

Tom, Thank you.

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Tom Pickering 5 years ago

Very nice poem and an enjoyable read.

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Just Ask Susan 5 years ago from Ontario, Canada Author

RH, I know you can, I know you can....remember that little caboose? "Just do it"! :)

Thank you.

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Sueswan 5 years ago

Beautiful. I am sorry that you loss your mom at such a young age.

My mom's first name is Margaret but everybody calls her Betty which is her middle name.

Voted up, up and away!

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RealHousewife 5 years ago from St. Louis, MO

I was just telling you I couldn't do it - but I knew you could!

You not only met the challenge of writing the 500 word poem but look at at the chLlenges you faced in the poem. It's all amazing to me and thanks for giving me the courage to try something that is very new to me! Maybe I can......I have learned so mu h watching you work. You rock!

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Just Ask Susan 5 years ago from Ontario, Canada Author

b. Malin, I've written many poems just shorter ones. Glad you enjoyed this and thank you.

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b. Malin 5 years ago

i'm not sure if this was you first attempt at writing Poetry, but it was a Wonderful Read, Susan. I truly enjoyed your Life story in 500 words that was a Glory!

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Just Ask Susan 5 years ago from Ontario, Canada Author

Golfgal & MM, Thank you for reading and for your comments.

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Movie Master 5 years ago from United Kingdom

I'm sorry to hear you lost your mother when you were so young.

500 words is very challenging, well done!

Thank you for sharing your story, my best wishes MM

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Golfgal 5 years ago from McKinney, Texas

Hey Susan, Good for you to meet your expectations with 500 words of soul searching genre. Our challenges in life certainly define us, don't they. Bless you.

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Just Ask Susan 5 years ago from Ontario, Canada Author







Thank you everyone!

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Sunshine625 5 years ago from Orlando, FL

Outstanding!!! I enjoyed every word of this poem :))

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ktrapp 5 years ago from Illinois

Sue, It's interesting how simple your poem began, but how it gave me goosebumps when you heard the big bang. I'm am so sorry about the loss of your mother. It does seem that you have been lucky to live in two cultures and have all of those wonderful experiences. I think you rose to the poetry challenge :)

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prasetio30 5 years ago from malang-indonesia

You have done a great job here. 500 words is a really challenging. Thanks for share your live story. I am so sad to hear about your mother and I believe that she's the best for you. Very well written and perfect. Rated up!


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jfay2011 5 years ago

I really love it. Very sad that you had to lose your mother so young. I lost mine to cancer ten years ago. I wish there was a cure.

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Daffy Duck 5 years ago from Cornelius, Oregon

It really takes courage to tell personal things about your past to people you haven't even met except on line. I couldn't do it. You're more courageous than I. :)

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Frannie Dee 5 years ago from Chicago Northwest Suburb

This must have been very therapeudic to write, not only for the writing excercise but also for the journey back through your life. Good job on both!

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Just Ask Susan 5 years ago from Ontario, Canada Author

Hi Ken, Lately I've been thinking about Montreal quite a bit and think it's almost time to go back for a visit.

I was around in 68. The Verdun Maple Leafs..very cool!

So glad that you enjoyed this.

Ruby, Thank you.

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Just Ask Susan 5 years ago from Ontario, Canada Author

Wayne, Thanks for your comments. I've been writing poetry all my life but never a poem this long before.

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always exploring 5 years ago from Southern Illinois

GREAT job Susan. It seems you had the best of two worlds, USA and Canada. Losing your Mother at a young age was traumatic i'm sure. Thank you for sharing your story in poetic verse. Well done!

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saddlerider1 5 years ago

I know Johnny Cash would be proud your folks who named you Sue and to think we may have been neighbors back then when you lived in la belle Province. Actually we were very close Verdun and The Point was a stone throw away, Verdun is where I played my junior hockey for the Verdun Maple Leafs way, way back..how about 65

Yikes..you probably were not born then:0)) I loved how you weaved your autobiography through a poem, nicely done, I thoroughly enjoyed this scribe. Hugs

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Wayne Brown 5 years ago from Texas

Love to see you trying your wings with poetry, Susan. I scoffed at it on my first try knowing that I could never be taken seriously as a poet. In time, I found that it helped me write better in other areas. In time, I also found that I had a lot to relate in verse. I hope you will find a similar journey with it as well. It seems you have the knack. Thanks for sharing a biography in verse. WB

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Just Ask Susan 5 years ago from Ontario, Canada Author

drbj, I've written many poems, just not one with 500 words before. Thanks.

Cardisa, Glad you liked it, and thanks so much.

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Just Ask Susan 5 years ago from Ontario, Canada Author

krazikat and RedElf, Thank you.

Rosemay, It was actually easier than I thought it would be.

Thank you.

Hi Pam, Thank you.

Julie, Thanks for reading and for the wonderful compliment.

Hyphenbird, I've read your poetry and wish I could write like you do. Thanks so much.

poshcoffeeco, Next...not really sure yet :)

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Just Ask Susan 5 years ago from Ontario, Canada Author

James, Thank you, glad you liked it.

rebecca, Yes I agree, inspiration is the key for me as well. Thanks for reading and for your comments.

Daniella, Thanks so much.

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Cardisa 5 years ago from Jamaica

A 500 word poem is a challenge to write and I am so proud of you. I loved it Susan, You had a somewhat dramatic life but you came out alright.

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drbj 5 years ago from south Florida

Are you certain you haven't written poetry before, Susan. This was a great poem for a first effort. And an autobiography at that. Brava.

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poshcoffeeco 5 years ago from Cambridgeshire

Nice work Susan. Challenge completed! What next I wonder?

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Hyphenbird 5 years ago from America-Broken But Still Beautiful

Using 500 words is not hard for me but I would never have thought to do a biography. Very creative and unique!

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julie51 5 years ago

Hi, Susan! Sorry to learn your mom died when u were just 3 years old. You have not experienced the most wonderful love - - Mother's love. I love to write poems, too . . but I guess I don't have much talent like you. You are good!

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Pamela99 5 years ago from United States

Considering the limits on the number of words you could use it, is amazing that you could tell your whole life story. I really liked it and am impressed with your hub. Rated awesome.

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Rosemay50 5 years ago from Hawkes Bay - NewZealand

A lovely interesting poem of your life. Sorry to read you lost your Mum ay such a young age.

Are you thinking of the contest... 500 words. Its not so dificult, one of my early ones on here has 430 words. So yes go for it Susan now that you've completed your challenge. well done

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RedElf 5 years ago from Canada

You certainly rose to the challenge, creating an interesting and moving story along the way!

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krazikat 5 years ago from Pacific Northwest

thats an awesome poem! Great way to share who you are.

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Daniella Lopez 5 years ago from Arkansas

Fabulous poem! I am terribly sorry about the passing of your mother. Thank you for sharing your life story. :) Voted up!

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rebeccamealey 5 years ago from Northeastern Georgia, USA

I enjoyed this. I love to write poetry, it is one of my favorite venues. I have done some in the past, lost it, and trying to get it back. Inspiration is the key.

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SubRon7 5 years ago from eastern North Dakota

Your life story in a poem. A good job, Susan. I read it and enjoyed it.

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