If I could only write the way she loves me - love poem



I normally work on a poem for months, so if this poem changes over time . . .

I try not to write love poems as 'just love' but link it with another tangent subject.




IF ONLY I COULD WRITE

THE WAY

SHE LOVES ME



If I could only write the way she loves me,

A breath of whispered promises across your cheek.

If only I could write the way I feel when I can’t speak

And drown you in the thoughts of what could be.


If only I could only pour her love in to the way I write,

With finger tips across your open heart,

If only I could make the words I want you all to hear

Make strings of pearls that glitter up the light.


If only I could write her promise, spoken, never broken,

Always there and new for every eye that sees

In gently stroking words that read the way the scented summer breeze

and our glances never need be thought, less spoken.


What, I wonder, would I say if I could write the way she loves me

Some clever anecdote, or ancient way?

Or some warm wisdom, just to get you through the day;

But then, if I could really, really, write the way she loves me

There would be nothing left for anyone to say.








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Lecie 6 years ago

great poem


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Shadesbreath 6 years ago from California

The last line is awesome. Way to finish with a punch.


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samboiam 6 years ago from Texas

Great poem. I could feel the love.


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alternate poet 6 years ago Author

Lecie, Shadesbreath and Samboiam - thanks for visiting and nice comments.


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TheGlassSpider 6 years ago from On The Web

This is beautiful. Great rhythm, beautiful sentiment, excellent structure, and you stuck the landing. I am impressed.


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alternate poet 6 years ago Author

Thank you Glass Spider :)


ralwus 6 years ago

maybe you try too hard. just tell her outright once, once is enough for any woman regardless what they say. They really want raw meat, just like we do. I don't know a thing about love or poetry, but this one ain't bad.


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alternate poet 6 years ago Author

Thanks Ralwus - your hard bitten view is appreciated - like you attitude in teh forumd too btw. From the forums I hear that you have survived a few - if so we share that in common, however I have found a good teacher and am relearning how to do relationships all over again.


ralwus 6 years ago

I shall be around. Welcome btw and enjoy your time here. Keep writing.


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northweststarr 6 years ago from Washington State

Raw meat, where? >Bringing out my inner lioness< but seriously, I totally enjoyed your poem and hope to see more! Very lyrical.


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alternate poet 6 years ago Author

Thanx northweststarr - I think Ralwus is really a grizzly !


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pinkhawk 6 years ago from Pearl of the Orient

...this is wonderful, how sweet! ^.^ (I like the poem esp. the last two lines, and of course the picture!)...thank you for sharing! :)


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alternate poet 6 years ago Author

Thanks for your kind comment Pinkhawk :)


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lorlie6 6 years ago from Bishop, Ca

Keep writing, please!!! This is a breathtaking poem, alternate!


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alternate poet 6 years ago Author

wow thanks lorlie !


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MFB III 6 years ago from United States

What good are

pen and paper words...

long and short,

black on white,

print or script,

They cannot hope

to explain how

I feel about her.

I express myself best

in the silence of a kiss,

laughter whispers in my eyes

and love is warm

upon my fingertips.

Let me only hope

she takes her place

in my heart and together

we shall find

what says it best.

Great poem~~~~~Welcome to the hub pages~~~MFB III


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alternate poet 6 years ago Author

Cheers MFB!!! poetic response :D


kimberlyslyrics 6 years ago

xoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxo

kicks ass

*jealous she is of his talent but so curious from a statement she was told, realizes she should have been blonde, so confused*

nicely done my friend

kimberly


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alternate poet 6 years ago Author

Hi Kimberley, Kicks ass is the best compliment a poem can get, thanks :D


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I*n*v*i*c*t*u*s 6 years ago

Wonderful poem. So beautifully expressed and lovely rhythm!


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alternate poet 6 years ago Author

Thank you I*n*v*i*c*t*u*s


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myownworld 6 years ago from uk

Lovely poem... 'strings of pearls that glitter up the light'...loved this image!


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alternate poet 6 years ago Author

thanx myownworld, the pearls are for you :)


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aware 6 years ago from West Palm Beach Florida.

i came , i read all 3 . and now for the comment. ....... lets see 4 . hold the she. nicks the her.


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Pandoras Box 6 years ago from A Seemingly Chaotic World

Hey good stuff there Poet! I saw your post in the hubages knowledge exchange forum. We will figure it all out! Maybe. LOL I hate this technical stuff. Was glad to see your post as it gave me a good excuse to take a break.

Good poetry, love the thoughts expressed, and you did it very well!


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alternate poet 6 years ago Author

Thanks aware - No. 4 on the way as ordered!


poetlorraine 6 years ago

i likes it, really i do wonderful, inspiring, i love it..... brilliant.


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alternate poet 6 years ago Author

thanks poetlorraine, I have just been across to your stuff - like it too !


Miss Take 6 years ago

wow this is good.... keep it up


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alternate poet 6 years ago Author

thanks Miss Take, or should that be Miss Creant :D


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Astra Nomik 6 years ago from Edge of Reality and Known Space

This is so beautiful and full of lovely images. Love is the best excuse anyone could have (or use) to write poetry. Wonderful!


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alternate poet 6 years ago Author

astra nomik - thanks, I love to write them.


Kishorilal 6 years ago

Nice, very nice.

- Kishorilal


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habee 6 years ago from Georgia

Wow! Love your imagery! And the pic beneath is in perfect juxtaposition to the verse. Impressive!


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alternate poet 6 years ago Author

Thanks Habee, your comments very welcome.


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Sunshiney31 6 years ago

Beautiful as are your other works of art. Really I'm not kissing a$$. I love the way you write so pure and intense.Thanks for sharing your talent.


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alternate poet 6 years ago Author

Thanks Sunshiney31 - kissing is ok :D


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Awful Poet 6 years ago from The Large Magellanic Cloud (LMC) (m-M)_0 = 18.41, or 48 kpc (~157,000

Most Exhilarating

Very Well Done.


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Freya Cesare 6 years ago from Borneo Island, Indonesia

Wow! it is worthy for every single day you had spent to created it. Well done. ^_^


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alternate poet 6 years ago Author

Thanks AP, nice of you to drop by Freya Cesare.


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Pollyannalana 6 years ago from US

I have never had talent to write poetry, and only lately have I tried,inspired by songs I love, but I can see you have the talent....oh, and a sense of humor.


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Micky Dee 6 years ago

Extraordinary! Thank you for such beauty! My goodness!


poetlorraine 6 years ago

is this for your future wife... and did she like it...


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alternate poet 6 years ago Author

Hi Polyannalana - funny you should say that :D

Micky Dee - thanks for cycling by

Poetlorraine yes and yes :)


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SummerSteward 6 years ago from Duluth MN

I like you do the same with love poems, make them more than simply romantic love.... for whatever reason. This though is very good. Quite enjoyed it. Glad to be a fan!


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Jluvies 6 years ago from lost in my thoughts

welp, your pretty much amazing.


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valeriebelew 6 years ago from Metro Atlanta, GA, USA

Yes, that was smooth and flowed well. It was also easy for me to understand. I am not that deep, and poetry leaves me baffled. I enjoyed the simplicity of this one, and the ease with which I could relate to the thought. Liked it.


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Joshua Kell 6 years ago from Arizona

I loved your poem. I can't write love songs or poetry myself (corporeal love anyway). I don't think I have ever been truly in love. Every relationship I have been in, including my five year marriage, has been a complete sham. I am starting to believe that it is an illusion. I am happy you have found it (whatever that may be, I have no clue, obviously). Thank you.


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Nady 6 years ago from Toronto

ahhh amazing.You had me at "write the way she loves me". bookmarked it.

thank you


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Ben Evans 6 years ago

Sometimes we can only write what we feel instead of saying it. I know that is the same way with me. I appear to most people as a stoich but I am very emotional and it comes through in my prose.

Good poetry. I enjoy reading what you write.


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Joy56 6 years ago

a work of art no less.....................


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Nikkij504gurl 6 years ago from Louisiana

love this one. haha nice pic at the end too. beautiful poem.


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Pratonix 6 years ago from Asia

What a smooth ending to a great poem!

"But then, if I could really, really, write the way she loves me/

There would be nothing left for anyone to say."


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SognoPiccolo 6 years ago from Wilmington, Ohio

this was so beautiful. If only words existed that were the perfect descriptive words.....


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couturepopcafe 6 years ago

MFB III and alternate poet - where have you guys been all my life? "If I could live upon your tattered brow..."


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acaetnna 6 years ago from Guildford

Wonderful, alternate poet your words are beautiful. I am so very pleased that you introduced me to your work. I shall certainly be back to read some more. Thank you.


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sligobay 6 years ago from east of the equator

Hey AP- I love the lady with the lemon on her nose. Oh yeah, the poem is real good too.


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alternate poet 6 years ago Author

Thanks everyone for nice comments, Sligo bay - the lady with the lemon is the love of the poem and my life :)


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smackins1974 5 years ago from UK

This is definitely my favourite of your poems, hopefully there will be more to come when life has you less busy with other things.

Thanks again for recommending Hubpages to me only problem now is my lack of sleep thinking about all the things I could write Hubs about!!!!

(Your Favourite Niece in Law)

Sarah x


jami l. pereira 5 years ago

Amazingly beautiful and , a bit sad . This was a wonderful tribute to an innocent love , deep and breath taking , thank you for writing such a picturesque story in rhyme . And she is Beautiful ! Lemon and all! I know you are so proud of her ! :)

Regards ,

Jami

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