If I were..

If I were a bird perched on the highest branch. I would breathe in the air around me. I would fly further than the eye could see, the world below me a distant memory.

I would feel the wind between my toes, gliding me through the heartache in an instant. The warmth embracing feeling of freedom would warm me like a blanket.

I would grab these few moments and enjoy every second, before the world below becomes every closer, realising that I am dreaming and that reality is only a few feet away.

I would value these moments before waking to a world of the fear, pain and the unknown but remember that life is not with the birds in the clouds above, and it is what you do make of it down here that counts.


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Leanne1783 6 years ago from Bradford, United Kingdom Author

I would appreciate any comments this is my first hub!!


HostelHopper 5 years ago

Lovely poem! I can certainly relate to it.


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karengibsonroc 5 years ago from Los Angeles

Thanks for sharing..beauty speaks through your presence and gift!!


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sligobay 5 years ago from east of the equator

Hi Leanne: This is a lovely bit of prose but I thought it would have a more lofty ending. I'm following. Thanks for the follow.


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Leanne1783 5 years ago from Bradford, United Kingdom Author

I found it difficult to put the feelings into words, but this is one of my first poems, I am sure I can improve in time. Thank you again for your comments.


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sligobay 5 years ago from east of the equator

Leanne: You have the soul of a poet and will learn all of the skills of t5he craft in time only if you study and practice. Structure should be one of your considerations. Here is the great poem that I read on this page.

If I were a bird perched

on the highest branch.

I would breathe

in the air around me.

I would fly further

than the eye could see,

the world below me

a distant memory.

I would feel the wind

between my toes,

gliding me

through the heartache

in an instant.

The warmth

embracing

feeling of freedom

would warm me

like a blanket.

I would grab

these few moments

and enjoy every second,

before

the world below

becomes every closer,

realising that

I am dreaming

and that reality

is only a few feet away.

I would

value these moments

before waking

to a world of

the fear,

pain

and the unknown

but remember

that life is not

with the birds

in the clouds above,

and it is

what you

do make of it

down here

that counts.


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Mimi721wis 5 years ago

Nice slingobay


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Leanne1783 5 years ago from Bradford, United Kingdom Author

Thank you, I will take your comments into consideration when writing more poems. I appreciate your advice.


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sligobay 5 years ago from east of the equator

You are very welcome and I will appreciate your honest comments and advice or criticisms when you read my poetry. Do not be reluctant to share your thoughts in comments. It's another way of learning. Others teach me every day. I remain open-minded and teachable. Keep up the good writing.


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Ebower 5 years ago from Georgia

What an imaginative poem! It's cool to be a bird, but we have so many more feelings and aspirations then birds do. I voted this up and beautiful.


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Leanne1783 5 years ago from Bradford, United Kingdom Author

Thanks for your comments Ebower! I agree we have more apirations but imagine having the ability to fly wherever you wanted! Thanks for stopping by!

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