If Words Were Drops of Blood

If Words Were Drops of Blood



If words were drops of blood and crimson drops were thoughts of mine,

Then crimson thoughts would jostle each before it to achieve its goal:

In each paltry line my life blood parallel describe each one,

And measure out its journey in a sanguine line;

The veins that emanate from this my heart

To fashion thus a verse to touch your soul

In verse in which, poorly disguised, you’d read my heart.

I’d pour each liquid bearing vessel

Into auricle and ventricle; neither preferring,

Into that capacious reliquary.

And then offering to you with both hands to prove,

And if needs be… tear open the pulsing organ there

To display to you, wherein you sit;

Surrounded by my thoughts; my fears; my love.

You are my raison d'être... my solace… my despair.

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Randy Behavior 5 years ago from Near the Ocean

....upon reading I made a pathetic little whiney sound, but I don't know how to spell it. Needless to say emotion was translated.


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Twilight Lawns 5 years ago from Norbury-sur-Mer, Surrey, England. U.K. Author

I'm laughing! Thanks, Randy, I take it thast's a "Yes"?


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Randy Behavior 5 years ago from Near the Ocean

"Yes"


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AngRose 5 years ago

I love the last line...so many don't realize that the very one that is their reason to live and their solace is also their deepest source of pain.


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Twilight Lawns 5 years ago from Norbury-sur-Mer, Surrey, England. U.K. Author

You really do understand what I am scribbling about, don't you, Angie?

I've been thinking about yoy (you and all of you) since I received that e-mail, and hope you are happier.

Big hugs,

Ian


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acaetnna 5 years ago from Guildford

Love and pain are inseparable. Great words as always.


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LaurieDawn 5 years ago

I had to come out of hiding for this one I must admit. I have been in my own place of despair and yet solace. Wonderful words Ian and so very true. We hide in those places that we also find the safest. And often our words are drops of blood upon the pages, for they are "us".

*hugs*

Laurie


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Twilight Lawns 5 years ago from Norbury-sur-Mer, Surrey, England. U.K. Author

Dear acaetnna, thank you for your visit. I approve of your comment, but I hope that in your world, love and pain are not inseparable. Your optimism and romantic heart are always an inspiration to me. Thanks for the comment. Please continue coming back.

Ian


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Twilight Lawns 5 years ago from Norbury-sur-Mer, Surrey, England. U.K. Author

Laurie, your words have hurt me. I want to hear that you are happy and that you have just been away for no real reason. But you tell me that you have been in despair, and it might sound silly, but when I have grown to know someone, and then hear that she is in need of solace, it makes me unhappy.

Welcome back, I have missed you and wondered what had happened.

But reassuring hug for you too, my friend

Ian


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kallini2010 5 years ago from Toronto, Canada

Beautiful, yet painful... I thought why does it have to hurt so much? Aren't we addicted to the sweet pain to the point that it becomes self-afflicted? What if your "solace, yet despair" won't accept neither your words, nor heart?

Or maybe it applies only to me "always in love and always heart-broken", where "my raison d'etre" is myself. A stone thrown into the water always manages to land in the center of the ripples, LOL.


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Twilight Lawns 5 years ago from Norbury-sur-Mer, Surrey, England. U.K. Author

Oh I love that: "A stone thrown into the water always manages to land in the center of the ripples,"

That is amazing. I have just published another hub; if you want a little bit of silliness in your life.

I'm going to watch a movie, and feel sorry for myself. 'Four Lions'. I've seen it before, but it really is excellent.


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AngRose 5 years ago

Yes Ian you just seem to make sense to me. And I am working on the being happier part. You help. Thank you.


Doug Turner Jr. 5 years ago

How could I resist this title and picture?

Very vivid and also surprisingly literary; you display your vocabulary chops without seeming forceful or pretentious. Nice touch.

I read a comment from you recently -- somewhere in the jungles of hubland -- that a friend of yours insists that a poem must be four lines per stanza, four or five stanzas, and rhyming in order to be worth a damn. While I don't necessarily agree with this (I enjoy my story poems), I figured the theory does have merit and wanted to focus on that a bit. My vet poem, which you kindly read and commented on, followed this formula.

Thanks for doing what you do.


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Twilight Lawns 5 years ago from Norbury-sur-Mer, Surrey, England. U.K. Author

Fabulous comment, Sir. Thank you. I also enjoy story poems, and love it when I can get my teeth into them. OK, so I might go on and on, but poems, like good jokes, frequently have a "punch line" and to force that too soon, would be a mistake.

My incredibly beautiful poem, 'Cuddles' addresses this matter.

My chum, by the way, seems to have little understanding of the differences between poetry and "verse".

Hallmark, may you ever reign!


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Nellieanna 5 years ago from TEXAS

Words seem superfluous to express how authentic and beautiful this is, Ian. I hope you just know.


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Twilight Lawns 5 years ago from Norbury-sur-Mer, Surrey, England. U.K. Author

From the mistress of beauty, that is wonderful praise. I am glad you like it. You know how absolutely I am bowled over by your use of language. Thank you Nellie dear.

(That sounds like a sentimental Victorian music hall love song).

Ladies and Gentlemen, with your permission and by your persuasion: One last chorus of 'Thank you, Nellie Dear'


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Nellieanna 5 years ago from TEXAS

I can't quite decide whether I'm born too soon, too late or just right. Perhaps it proves that life actually is a continuum, as I suspected! In any case, whether in 1890, 2011 or 2090, such a lovely song would be and IS, not only en vogue, but touching and appreciated by "Nellie Dear"! Hugs a bunch! (Move over, Sigmund Romberg!)


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MFB III 5 years ago from United States

I once signed a love poem to a girl in blood, to show how much of me she had earned the rights to, with her ravishing beauty. No limits would prevail me from penning my longings for her. The blood is long dried, the poem most likely in a landfill, and she is but a memory, but oh, the passion of those moments when even my lifeblood begged to come up for air. ~~~LOL~~~MFB III


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Twilight Lawns 5 years ago from Norbury-sur-Mer, Surrey, England. U.K. Author

I hope the poem wasn't one of those interminable ones that go on for stanza after stanza... you'd need a transfusion if you kept up that relationship.

Thanks for dropping by and reading.


Sunnie Day 5 years ago

Good Morning Ian,

This was "Heart" felt..deep feelings and thoughts. A love that is (ones reason for living) "raison d’etre"

I loved it Ian.

Hugs!

Sunnie


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Twilight Lawns 5 years ago from Norbury-sur-Mer, Surrey, England. U.K. Author

I believe that too, Sunnie, but not everyone is lucky enough to find true, everlasting love.

Thanks for your comment, and dropping by to read my scribblings... you must have read most of them by now. Thank you.


Sunnie Day 5 years ago

Ian,

I use to believe in the fairy tale romance of love but soon realized it takes two people working very hard at it most of the times..never perfect for sure..I think I have read all of them. I am working on it....so I need some more to read..(hint hint) or I may have to re-read and comment so I can talk with you..how's that? lol

Have a great day!

Sunnie


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Twilight Lawns 5 years ago from Norbury-sur-Mer, Surrey, England. U.K. Author

I'm having a bad day, Sunnie. Don't ask why, just read my next hub.

x


Sunnie Day 5 years ago

ok i hope you are okay..email me if you need a friend..i will be there!

Hugs


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Twilight Lawns 5 years ago from Norbury-sur-Mer, Surrey, England. U.K. Author

Thank you,

Hugs


Sunnie Day 5 years ago

Emailed you anyway..lol


writeronline 5 years ago

So many have commented so eloquently, and thus appropriately fittingly, on this, that I fear I risk shattering the heartfelt rhythm and flow of the responses, when I say simply, that I think it's bloody marvellous.

Off now to read more of your work, (but hopefully avoid desecrating any more of it with inadequate praise..)

:)


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Pearldiver 4 years ago from Tomorrow - In Words & NZ Time.

Oh Ian, I have always been in awe of your works, so perfectly categorized and found under Inspirational Poetry. Nice work my friend and worthy of wider audience I believe.. up and shared.. take care... PD


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Twilight Lawns 4 years ago from Norbury-sur-Mer, Surrey, England. U.K. Author

Thank you for those very kind comments, PD. It is enough that you write such wonderful words, but a SHARED on the top, is just that extra cherry.

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