Into the Lake


into the lake


recycle the lake


into the lake


empty the lake


into the lake


lost in the lake


into the lake


revenge of the lake


Rambunctious kids jumping—


Pumps under pumping—


Spread eagle sliding—


Swallow fish and algae—


Jumping board to belly—


Confused in the yelling—


Frantic mother jumping—


Face is blue and drowning—





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PDXKaraokeGuy, also known as Justin W. Price, is the managing editor at eFiction horror. Husband to Andrea, father to two dogs. writer.poet.baseball fan. tattooed. He is am amateur theologian with a rabid sweet tooth. He resides in a suburb of Portland, Oregon.He has a poetry book available for Amazon Kindle, and also maintains a blog, FirstBlog. His work has been featured in the Crisis Chronicles, efiction Magazine, The Hellroaring Review, the Bellwether Review, eFiction Humor, and the Rusty Nail. Please visit his profile page for more information. Thanks!

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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

Thanks Audrey. Thee cadence of this poem was actually inspired by Native American Fire Dancing


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AudreyHowitt 4 years ago from California

Very cool write!!!


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

James, thank you. I'm glad you enjoyed this!


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James A Watkins 4 years ago from Chicago

Fascinating. I enjoyed your pithy poem. Thank you for sharing your creative gifts with us.


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

thanks lyricwriter. I really started writing this poem with a mantra in mind. The story ended up taking shape. It's funny what happens when you put a pen to paper.


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thelyricwriter 4 years ago from West Virginia

PDX, votes up pal. Love this style. You are very creative and it flows great and level. Good stuff.


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

Jackie, I hadn't heard that story. this certainly wasn't meant to be that dark! Thanks for reading and commenting!


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Jackie Lynnley 4 years ago from The Beautiful South

Wow so strange to read this when I just read about the little two year old at the bottom of the pool 1/2 hour drowned and now he seems to be better than before the drowning according to his mom.


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

Thank you, Martie. I do like condensed stories :-)


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MartieCoetser 4 years ago from South Africa

Interesting presentation - an entire story condensed.


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PDXKaraokeGuy 5 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

business and master, thank u very much. I appreciate your comments!


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Movie Master 5 years ago from United Kingdom

Very clever... like it and voting up.


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tobusiness 5 years ago from Bedfordshire, U.K

Once again, well done, we take so many things for granted, use it abuse it, then surprise, surprise it bites back, love it.


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PDXKaraokeGuy 5 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

epi, once again. thanks for your kind words and support. Not sure I could handle beatlemania, thought I wouldn't mind their paychecks...


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epigramman 5 years ago

..oh my man I do love this one - then again I love everything you say, write or do - so let's put this on Facebook and with a direct link back here start a new Beatlemania for you and then you'll have to jump into that lake - but these words here in this piece are clever, poignant and so very profound

lake erie time 12:54am listening to Hank Williams Sr.


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b. Malin 5 years ago

I guess I was hoping for a Happy Ending...But it sure was a clever play on words. Voted UP!


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cherylone 5 years ago from Connecticut

profound poem and very sad and tragic.......Makes you think.


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PDXKaraokeGuy 5 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

Thank you all for commenting. I had fun with this poem. It's fun to try new things. As usual, I appreciate all your reads and comments!


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Rosemay50 5 years ago from Hawkes Bay - NewZealand

Yes man polutes the thing he enjoys, what we put into something is what we get out of it. revenge...

Very clever


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Gypsy Rose Lee 5 years ago from Riga, Latvia

Great poem. Reminds me of why I swim only in pools and only with a large inflatable tire. lol


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Just History 5 years ago from England

I did like this! Though not sure about the lake's revenge!!


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Eiddwen 5 years ago from Wales

Very clever indeed and has to have an up up and away.

Take care and enjoy your day.

Eddy.


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PDXKaraokeGuy 5 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

Alexander, thank you very much for reading and commenting. I like your analysis and the way this poem made you think. Cheers and have a nice weekend!


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Alexander Pease 5 years ago from Maine

A very dark and intriguing ending. It makes me think about how everything that is done will come back to us.


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always exploring 5 years ago from Southern Illinois

Wow, A day at the beach turns deadly..


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PDXKaraokeGuy 5 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

racin, thank you for reading and commenting

breakfast, thank you for your votes

Sue, you too. Thanks for commenting!

Der, thanks for your interpretation. I wanted to writing a rhyming mantra poem. Never done it before


Derdriu 5 years ago

PDXKaraokeGuy: What an entrancing, hypnotizing, mesmerizing poetic warning of the tragic thoughtlessness of people in the context of wounded wildlife!

Thank you for sharing, voted up, etc.,

Derdriu


Sueswan 5 years ago

Hi PDX

A fun happy day turned into a tragedy.

Voted up and awesome.

Have a good weekend.


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breakfastpop 5 years ago

Loved this! Up interesting and awesome...


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raciniwa 5 years ago from Naga City, Cebu

it's kinda mind boggling for me...are these riddles? but yeah, i agree that lake has lots of benefits for us...

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