A Poem of Love - With Humor

Find the feeling that sends you reeling.
Find the feeling that sends you reeling. | Source

I thought I’d write of love returned until I tried and then I learned
It’s not an easy thing to do when all the writing’s done by you.

As you read on it will appear that other poets need not fear
Each word I write becomes a blight to all my efforts here.

I thought it would be oh so easy to write of love but now I’m queasy

Trying hard to make it breezy and not turn out to be too cheezy.

To find the feeling that sends you reeling when the poem’s so appealing

That as you read you feel a healing that hopefully won’t send you squealing.

The others write with lofty phrases and tender words that oft amazes
Anyone who reads or gazes on the poems that bring such praises.

Of longing glances and lovers chances taken in their new romances
While I attempt to make advances in my simplest expanses.

To bring to fore without much chore a poem you will not abhor.

...to find the words...
...to find the words... | Source

So where do words begin to tell of stories that we all know well

Of lovers who have found the spell that loving always will compel.

Is it upon a sunny day in smiles we see along the way
Or is it in the night time’s fey that keeps the lover from his stray

Does the moon play into this bringing loves’ sweet, tender bliss
Or am I writing far from this and falling into an abyss.

The kiss, the kiss it must be this, that is what I am missing
Perhaps if I can find it now this poem won’t leave you hissing.

Is there a way to make it lyrical without it being too empirical
And find that it is so satirical my poem has now become a miracle.

Holding hands while love commands two hearts to beat as one
Is that the way to find the sway and polish up this lame foray into what I have done.

Ocean waters on the shore
Ocean waters on the shore | Source

The deepest hearts always give more their love appearing like a roar
Of ocean waters on the shore bringing them that love to score.

The feelings, hearts and emotions evoking all their true devotions

Putting happiness in motions that preserve their loving notions

I think that I might be beginning to find the words that may be winning
A smile that could just have you grinning at this love poem that I ‘ve been spinning.

I think I have found the foundation to expound this new creation
Into something in relation to a poem of acclamation.

No matter where the love shall start it all takes place within the heart
And poems and people play a part in giving love its course to chart.

Our feelings always must be free to give away for all to see
To know that we are meant to be together for eternity.

The joy and sorrow all belong to love’s ever unending song
For each to keep the other strong as time and seasons move along.

This poem’s design is not a sign of how a poem is meant to shine
But only does it so define the words I did ere entwine.

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Comments 29 comments

JinnyMarte 5 years ago

Well written. Your words have much rhythm to them. Almost like a song...


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tillsontitan 5 years ago from New York Author

Thank you Jinny, I guess it's all those nursery rhymes when I was a kid.


JinnyMarte 5 years ago

hahaha I believe it is much more than that! I also believe that you either have it or you don't. And you definitely have it. The pics are beautiful too! I encourage you to keep cultivating this talent. In my experience I can guarantee that it proves to be time worthy and it heals hearts.


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TKs view 5 years ago from The Middle Path

I really enjoyed this hub, tillsontitan.

Your poem just goes to show

how little one does know,

if they think the tale of love

can only be lofty and held above.

To try anything with a heart so pure

You'll find love, of this I'm sure

for love emerges in all our acts,

and that girl, is just the facts.

This truly brightened my evening.


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Rosemay50 5 years ago from Hawkes Bay - NewZealand

This has lovely rhythm and flow.

Those nursery rhymes have served you well.

I did enjoy reading this


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Moms-Secret 5 years ago from Central Florida

This was awesome. It was whimsical and fun. You gave my mind a break from its constant spiral and for this I can't thank you enough.

I felt transported into wonderland for just a moment.


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tillsontitan 5 years ago from New York Author

I do enjoy this type of poetry Jinny and if you're right I may be on to something :)

TKs glad you liked my poem and your answer in a poem was great! Thanks.

Rosemay glad you enjoyed my poem.

Moms - really glad I could give your mind a break. I do enjoy the lighter side.

When I re-read this comment before posting it looks like a really do "enjoy" :)


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Vinaya Ghimire 5 years ago from Nepal

There is uniformity in the composition and soothing rhythm. I loved your poem, loved your pictures.


mikeq107 5 years ago

Love is MMMMM Let me ponder from the words that you wrote on yonder hub from above...ahh Love is the realtiy of what you have wriiten...ok even i,m confused at this point not by your poem but by my response LOL

I think you nailed it tilly with your sincere honest heart...after all that is what love is...fresh words newly sprouted, full of life, excitment all things possible ,no holes barred, crazy nuts confused ...hearting beating in the red line, sences through the roof...touch amazing...glances hot to trot...sleepless nights, tender touch...lassou the moon..capture the sun and all because of what dear Tillsontitan has gone and done!!!!!

Ok that was fun...just let it flow...first things coming to my Irish noggin...no appoligizes here..for this is who i,m LOL

Have a great week my dear friend you gave me a big smile with you well versed hub!!!

Mike :0)xoxoxo


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Nell Rose 5 years ago from England

Hi, this was so clever! lol! I loved it, especially the line, I think I have found the foundation to expound this new creation Into something in relation to a poem of acclamation! thanks for the smile! rated up cheers nell


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molometer 5 years ago

I liked it. Well written and engaging.

It is very clever I feel; as it shows the difficulty expressed in rhyme how to speak of love poetic.

The last four lines I feel sum up an aspect of love about being strong for each other.

voted up


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tillsontitan 5 years ago from New York Author

Thanks Vinaya, so glad you liked it.

Mike oh Mike....what have I done to make you run to feelings tried and true? No apologies are needed when two friends share words well heeded and the thought that I have seeded that great smile so unimpeded!

Nell, you're more than welcome. So glad I could make you smile!

Molometer, thanks for reading my poem and your kind words. The vote up is appreciated!


mikeq107 5 years ago

Love your response...you know I spent most of my life in a depressed state..never knowing who I was or what the heck i was doing ...just walking along blindy following the madding crowd...like so many other por souls today..but I guess 7 8 years back..through some pain and suffering Imet and fell in love iwth the real me..and I must say I,m not a bad chap :0)

Point is ..yes there is awalys apoint..i,m not afraid anymore to speak the truth in the light of the moment and live in it as I write it be it a cmment to a good friend like yourself or to correct the person who is trying to tear me down through seffishness and so ..think you get the poit LOL...in Short I,m trully living in the moment...because life is precious and moving swiftly by like a raging torrent...but I,m in a high powered boat gearing it down to my pace so that I can smell it, breathe it , enjoy it while i,m living it....so write on my Dear and live every second!!!!

Ok That was cool ..love it !!!!

Later Mike :0)

ps ...not on drugs anti `s etc..just healty food and attiude..LOL


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tillsontitan 5 years ago from New York Author

Is Cynags the sailor of your boat ;) Seriously, I do appreciate your honesty and feeling you can be honest with me. It takes a big man to admit faults in his past!

I appreciate the praise, and whenever/if ever you feel it necessary, the criticism and am so very happy you gearing it down!


mikeq107 5 years ago

Yes, Cyncags ( Cynthia ) is my sailor. We met and married almost 4 years ago now...boy time flys!!!!We plan to move to Maui in 2012....the place reminds me of Ireland only a lot warmer....love the mixed culture and year round 85 weather and now that we Well mostly moi are veggie and fish eaters its in huge abundance over there...any who back of to bed for this sleepy leprachuan...have a great weekend!!!!!Thank you My Friend

Morning Mike :0)))))))))


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ChrisIndellicati 4 years ago from New York, NY

Thank you for writing this it really was worth reading voted up and awesome!


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tillsontitan 4 years ago from New York Author

Thanks ChrisIndellicati, glad you enjoyed it so much.


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cleaner3 4 years ago from Pueblo, Colorado

this is so cool. I love your style of poetry.

Michael


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tillsontitan 4 years ago from New York Author

I believe it's the old fashioned way. I've tried haiku but it just doesn't seem like I'm getting it. So glad you enjoy!


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cleaner3 4 years ago from Pueblo, Colorado

This could be two or three realy good poems instead of one great one? it is really good after rereading it I l

Michaelike it even more.


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tillsontitan 4 years ago from New York Author

Love is what keeps us going, both in life or in poetry. New love, lost love, forever love...all make for good writing.


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cleaner3 4 years ago from Pueblo, Colorado

How many conversations are we going to keep Mary?

I'm game if you are.?


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tillsontitan 4 years ago from New York Author

I think we need to concentrate on our story....looks like it might turn out to be a good one!


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Jason Marovich 4 years ago from United States

I love wordplay and this is done expertly here. No need to be apologetic to your reader when you're writing to your love, because we want the words, they are beautiful.


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tillsontitan 4 years ago from New York Author

Thanks Jason. I guess I might have gotten carried away with the wordplay.


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Jason Marovich 4 years ago from United States

You leave me at a disadvantage. I didn't mean my comment as derogatory, but of course, you know that wordplay runs its course quickly, and none of us yearn for want of content. Personally, I wouldn't change a thing, only because you have more skill than I at blending rhymes with prose.


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tillsontitan 4 years ago from New York Author

I didn't take your comment as derogatory Jason, but thank you for coming back with such praise.


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rajan jolly 3 years ago from From Mumbai, presently in Jalandhar,INDIA.

Lovely and enjoyable poem, Mary!

This poem is sublime nay divine

How I wish my poem could rise above a whine

Get praised as this without a hiss

A poem I can share without a care

For all to read without a fuss, without a rush

To be in bliss without a kiss.


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tillsontitan 3 years ago from New York Author

Well my friend, it seems you have written a poem to rise above a whine! Your comment is lovely.

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