Jenkins B-346

Detective Laura Kimber began her day right, her freshly shined shoes narrowly avoiding a piece of a dead man's face as he was pushed threw a screen door of a candle wax factory over on the East-side.

“You just missed that piece of flesh,” said Peter O'Brien as he tried holding the screen door open for her.

Kimber nodded.

“Jenkins found her?” he added.

“Jenkins found her? What's her number?”


“Was he touched, or was anything moved around him,” Kimber asked.

“Hey Jenkins,” O'Brien shouted. “Did anyone touch him or move anything around?”

Jenkins looked at O'Brien as if he just fell from another planet. Touch him? Hell, she didn't even want to look at him. Jenkins shook her head indicating no, then glanced over at the body. Kimber looked at the young female cop and understood and accepted her silent plea.

“Female cops,” whispered O'Brien. “We'll walk her through this, she'll be okay.”

Kimber didn't really care too much for O'Brien's comment. He once said that the academy was turning out policewomen for over three decades and as far as he was concerned, the verdict was still out. It was sexist, and she knew it, but she kept it to herself, because she respected O'Brien.

Many women had joined the department with a reasonable understanding of the job and had a willingness to perform; some were even good cops. But why did the majority quit so early, why didn't they just run the course?

“Come here and claim this crime scene,” O'Brien demanded. “Women cops, just get me. They make so many mistakes.”

“I need some time,” Jenkins replied.

“Come up here, take orders if you have to,” said O'Brien. “Remember, you're not a secretary with a gun. Or are you?”

“That's enough Pete!” Kimber snapped.

“I'm trying to toughen her up, make her a decent cop.”

“She's getting on.”

“We can't have dead weight on our team,” he said.

“Dead weight?”

“Women make too many mistakes,” he added.


“I mean you are the exception to the rule.”

“I am the exception?”

“You're one of the brightest.”


“You don't make mistakes,” he half whispered.

“Your first year on the force, O'Brien,” she started. “At the Rite Aid Pharmacy, a fifteen year old mental case took your gun from you after he wrestled you to the floor. He could have killed you and by-standers. And the time over at Bassick High School, you called in for back up hiding in your car while your partner was getting the shit kicked out of him by a bunch of pot- heads. Oh and don't forget the break in at Yankee Candle Factory on Wordin Avenue. Radio cars came storming up the street, they found you standing at the curb, pointing to the broken window like a security guard. What a bitch you were! Give us women a break. We come into a lewd, locker room environment and keep all the shit to ourselves because we know most of you guys are good detectives. We're not going to let ignorance take that away from you guys. So when you see a new female, or male cop having a rough go at it, help him up. Dust his ass off and work with them.”

“I think I just been schooled,” O'Brien added.

Kimber huffed and turned away

O'Brien felt a little uneasy. He knew Laura Kimber was one of the hardest working detectives on the squad, she was a consistently aggressive and an intelligent investigator. It was almost a year ago when O'Brien's partner was shot in the head during an ambush. The shooting had been drug related, and O'Brien was cornered at the back end of the unmarked police car. He closed his eyes waiting for the two drug lords to fire, but that didn't happen. Out of nowhere Kimber came through the alley taking out the two men killing them instantly. When O'Brien opened his eyes she was crouched next to him giving him coverage. He realized that she was a detective, but she was also a woman too.

“Jenkins,” O'Brien called. “If you need any help sorting this mess out, you can count on me. And since this is your crime scene, everyone here will take direct orders from you or I'll personally kicked their ass. And I too will take whatever order you dish out.”

Jenkins smiled and turned away.

© 2015 Frank Atanacio

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Lee Cloak 22 months ago

Great piece of crime flash Frank, might end up being turned into the next big US television crime drama you never know, really great to read, a very entertaining piece of writing, thanks for sharing, voted up, Lee

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always exploring 22 months ago from Southern Illinois

Not only did I enjoy the story, I felt proud to be a woman. That O'Brien needs a good kick in the pants. ( Where it really hurts. Hee ) Voted up and sharing...

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Frank Atanacio 22 months ago from Shelton Author

thank you Lee Cloak and always exploring for reading my Jenkins

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clivewilliams 22 months ago from Nibiru

lol@always exploring, where in the pants yuh gonna kick him, surely not the thighs......Nice one again franco. Bu=y now you should have already signed a contract with some movie production with these pieces.

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billybuc 22 months ago from Olympia, WA

I love a great story that grabs me quickly and fulfills me quickly. You did both, Frank. Nice job!

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AudreyHowitt 22 months ago from California

O'Brien does need a kick in the pants!!

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Frank Atanacio 22 months ago from Shelton Author

thank you so much Clive, Audrey and Billybuc for stopping by :)

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The Examiner-1 22 months ago

That was great Frank, I loved it. Women should get an equal chance and you told it like is. I ranked it high in my books and gave it a thumbs up+++. I shared and pinned it.


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MsDora 22 months ago from The Caribbean

Like Lee Cloak, I could see this on the screen, and me replaying it to listen to Kimber's speech again. Kimber's my shero.

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Frank Atanacio 22 months ago from Shelton Author

thank you so much Examiner-1 and MsDora for stopping by :)

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tillsontitan 22 months ago from New York

Frank you brought your crime stories to a new level with this one. The intricacies of the department together with the bias female officers face ran through this story with a perfect ending. You always hit the target spot on.

Voted up, useful, awesome, and interesting.

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FlourishAnyway 22 months ago from USA

Frank, I love how you write. Awesome job.

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Chris Antonaros 22 months ago from Athens, Greece

That was a good one! Good lob!

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Faith Reaper 22 months ago from southern USA

Yes, we have to give props to the women ... especially those intelligent ones who can also kick butt and take names : ) ...

Oh, Frank, I almost missed this one!!! Please forgive me, my faithful follower.

I really love how you use dialogue to really tell the story which helps a lot to define a character's strengths and weaknesses. Well, your writing is superb ...period.

You have a gift to grab the reader's attention from the start and hold one's interest throughout the entire read.

Up ++++ tweeting, pinning, G+ and sharing

God bless you and have a beautiful day

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Frank Atanacio 22 months ago from Shelton Author

thank you Til and Flourish for always reading my shorts bless you.. and welcome Chris thanks for stopping by... and lastly my dear sweet virtual Faith.. you always have my back and for that I respect you girl.. and wish nothing but good things for you and your family.. bless you dear sweet Faith.. :)

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Genna East 22 months ago from Massachusetts, USA

“Female cops,” whispered O'Brien. “We'll walk her through this, she'll be okay.” I was a little surprised by O’Brien’s comment, but understood why Kimber kept it to herself. Until….he kept on. “Women make too many mistakes,” he added. I’m glad Laura took him on a brief stroll down memory lane with his missteps. I couldn’t help but smile at his closing comment to Jenkins. Great story, Frank! Voted up and awesome.

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Frank Atanacio 22 months ago from Shelton Author

Genna thank you so much for reading and stopping by :)

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Faith Reaper 22 months ago from southern USA

Oh, that means the world to me, being respected for being myself : ) Thank you for telling me that and talk about being sweet ...YOU.

Of course I will always have your back. Thank you for your lovely wishes for me and my family.

Bless you real good

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Frank Atanacio 22 months ago from Shelton Author

you are the best Faith!!!!!

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Jodah 22 months ago from Queensland Australia

Great stuff Frank. You know I love Laura Kimber, and she certainly gave O'Brien a kick in the pants and made him wake up to himself. She needed to shame him to do it, but good for her.

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Frank Atanacio 22 months ago from Shelton Author

thank you Jodah for help making Laura Kimber my most read hubs...:)

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Nell Rose 22 months ago from England

Yep sometimes guys need telling! lol! great read as always, and something to think about!

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Frank Atanacio 22 months ago from Shelton Author

Thank you Nell Rose :)

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annart 21 months ago from SW England

Superb! Like it when a plan comes together.


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Frank Atanacio 21 months ago from Shelton Author

thanks annart

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Dana Tate 18 months ago from LOS ANGELES

I just love these series of detective Laura Kimber! Is there a sequence I should be reading so I can get a full story?

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Frank Atanacio 18 months ago from Shelton Author

thank you Dana for checking out my Kimber short :)

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manatita44 13 months ago from london

A bit of sexism playing itself out in this one Frank. Good old Kimber. Cool!

Another very interesting one, Bro. 'Claim the crime scene.' Nice! Like Denzil and some of the CSI's. I believe that Denzil likes 'walk the crime scene.' Not sure. Have a great day.

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Frank Atanacio 13 months ago from Shelton Author

thanks manatita.. bless you bro :)

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