Thunder river a place alone.......

 Thunder  River a place alone
Thunder River a place alone

No don't fight the
urge it's not
nessasary at all
I think back to childhood
and the thunder
And a calming voice
"It's only the storm .....it will never
hurt you"

And of today and yet again
tomorrow
there is no kind touch when I
need one
nor the calming voice
But I am a man .......I say
grow up
Be strong
And yet
it wasn't the thunder you feared
was it
It was the empty aching
echo that rattled
away in a
far land
some distant valley
of lovers

A distant and mysterious land
that you dreamed of
ached for
the valley of soft blue
eye's and milky
white flesh

And a smile that could
blaze through any soul
perhaps saving me from those weakened
echoes of life
that still thunder away
in the darkness
of a rainy day
soul



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theseus 4 years ago from philippines

Exquisitely-written..you really have a way with words.. Keep on writing.God bless.


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ytsenoh 4 years ago from Louisiana, Idaho, Kauai, Nebraska, South Dakota, Missouri

Very nice this Tuesday morning. As usual, your style flows like that river. Thank you.


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Gypsy Rose Lee 4 years ago from Riga, Latvia

Voted up and awesome. Such sad but lovely words. Made me feel so peaceful. Some days are like that when you don't feel neither here nor there.


finewords 4 years ago

the poem is good. But kindly check grammar and spelling errors.Then it will be more easy to digest


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Fennelseed 4 years ago from Australia

Your words are like honey and you spread them effortlessly onto the page leaving readers like me in awe!!!

"empty aching echo" and "the valley of soft blue eye's and milky white flesh"

Pure poetry at its best, words of longing and the echoes of love "on a rainy day soul" - I succumb to your poetry magic Master.


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rahul0324 4 years ago from Gurgaon, India

"And a smile that could

rattle through any soul

saving me from those weakened

echoes of life"

Beautiful verse... powerful


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ahorseback 4 years ago Author

Theseus, That is a very kind comment , Thank you !...:-}


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ahorseback 4 years ago Author

Yetsenoh, Thank you, and the echoes flow like a river as well! Ahh life!....;-}


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xstatic 4 years ago from Eugene, Oregon

Well done again, ahorseback! Up.


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ahorseback 4 years ago Author

Gypsy Rose, hey smiley!

Finewords, thanks !

Fennelseed my dear!

Rahul...Thank you !

Exstatic ....Im am humbled ,

To all of my friends , I am behind on my responding to all of your kindness, please forgive me , can't figure out where my time goes thank you all....:-}


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GusTheRedneck 4 years ago from USA

Hi ahorseback - How to bring the human out of the place - very well done.

Gus :-)))


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raciniwa 4 years ago from Naga City, Cebu

somehow this poem resounds, my daughter is afraid of thunder...but this one has an ethereal touch to it...great metaphor...


daddysgirl 4 years ago

Lovely dad!


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ahorseback 4 years ago Author

Hi Gus !,

Raciniwa , she will love the thunder one day ! Thank you!

Daddys girl , Love you baby girl!


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xstatic 4 years ago from Eugene, Oregon

Great poem ahorseback! The "darkness of a rainy day soul" is a lonely place.


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ahorseback 4 years ago Author

xstatic , Yes my friend , there is no darker place than alone ! Truely alone .....thank you !

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