Licking Flames

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She moved quickly away

From the safety exit,

As the flames would spray,

Heading through the burning rooms,

And only fear was on display,

The smoke would choke,

And she was gasping,

She was also having

A difficult time grasping

What was happening around her,

And her breath was hard to catch,

She felt somehow detached

From her burnt and aching body,

And the blazing heat

Seemed to wrap itself around

Her like a sheet,

Smothering the sounds,

Her energy would not last,

Too much happened

To her too fast,

Shadows would talk,

And she forced herself

To slow her walk,

Then she saw two burnt bodies,

The bones blackened,

As their ghosts would pray,

All the blood and bodily fluids,

Had long since boiled away,

Leaving only dust, crust,

Around the remains,

She was too late to save them,

As she turned only to face the licking flames.

© 2013 Frank Atanacio

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Just Ask Susan 3 years ago from Ontario, Canada

What a horrible way to go. Awesome as always Frank, and sharing.


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justateacher 3 years ago from Somewhere Over The Rainbow - Near Oz...

Very descriptive....I agree with Susan...what a horrible way to go...


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Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton Author

Thank you so must JustaskSusan and Justateacher... you guys are just fantastic :)


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xstatic 3 years ago from Eugene, Oregon

Such detail in a short work! You capture the fear and the horror as well.


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LaThing 3 years ago from From a World Within, USA

You captured the scene with your words perfectly, and view was painted very clearly...... Voting up and awesome!


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AudreyHowitt 3 years ago from California

You nailed this one Frank--


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acaetnna 3 years ago from Guildford

Oh my goodness, how scary. Beautifully written however.


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Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton Author

X-man and Lathing thanks for popping by and sharing my licking flames.. good to see you Audrey bless you and thanks for supporting my work Acaetnna..:)


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Faith Reaper 3 years ago from southern USA

Sizzling to say the least here, dear Frank!!!! Awesome and very vivid scene painted by your words.

Voted up and sharing +++

God bless. In His Love, Faith Reaper


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Rosemay50 3 years ago from Hawkes Bay - NewZealand

Very descriptive, I can smell the smoke and feel the heat from here. You have shown the terror and horror stunningly through your words.


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dallaswriter 3 years ago from North Carolina

So real and so tragic.... voted up and awesome!


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Alastar Packer 3 years ago from North Carolina

Brother Frank, this reminds me of seeing a 5th floor bank catch fire, the young secretaries held on as long as they could. but eventually had to drop to their deaths, one at a time. It was a most distressing scene. Turns out the banks fat cats got out frist on the other side of the bank where the fire hadn't reached. What a travesty of justice -so cowardly.


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Mhatter99 3 years ago from San Francisco

Thank you for this. stroll into the face of terror.


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tobusiness 3 years ago from Bedfordshire, U.K

Frank, I just read the most beautiful poem over at Mhatter's, I really should have gone straight to bed, however I saw this and I had to check it out. So instead of soft words and sweet dreams, I'll be seeing burnt bodies and bodily fluids. I think I'll just go back to work. :))

Brilliant; as only you can do it.


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Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton Author

Faith..sizzling? LOL thank you for stopping by .. bless you and thank you too Rosemay and gang :)


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Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton Author

thanks dalls for reading my flames.. and Alastar that is a terrible story.. thank you bro for reading my licking flames..


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Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton Author

Mhatter thank you for the visit and tobusiness.. I am so sorry.. but still thank you for supporting my work bless you :)


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Deborah Brooks 3 years ago from Brownsville,TX

Oh My Frank. .. I can see it happening and feel the heat with every word you wrote.

awesoem write

sharing

debbie


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PegCole17 3 years ago from Dallas, Texas

Your words elicit vivid pictures, Frank. That is an art well perfected. Chilling.


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Gypsy Rose Lee 3 years ago from Riga, Latvia

WOW You create an atmosphere of pure terror so well. One of the most horrible ways to die.


Valleypoet 3 years ago

A frightening scenario, tragically all too common..well crafted Frank:-))


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Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton Author

Thank you so much Our Ms Brooks Pegcole and Gypsy Rose Lee for your comments and thank you too Valleypoet bless you all:)


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tirelesstraveler 3 years ago from California

Could almost feel the flames jumping at me. A neighbors house burned a couple of months ago. The fire started when a flame from the stove catching a potholder. Neighbor, had been ill, couldn't move fast enough to stem the fire, she escaped, but the damage was significant.

Your description was chilling.


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Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton Author

so sorry to hear about your neighbor :( thanks for reading my licking flames :) tireless


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BlossomSB 3 years ago from Victoria, Australia

As I read this, the sun is hazy and I can smell the smoke here in Melbourne, far away from those dreadful bushfires in Gippsland. The threat from fire and the fear of it is very real here this summer. You expressed it well.


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Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton Author

thank you blossoms :)


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mckbirdbks 3 years ago from Emerald Wells, Just off the crossroads,Texas

This a darkly written tale, assaulting many senses.


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Ruchira 3 years ago from United States

Gosh...this gave me the shivers.

Well done, frank :)


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Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton Author

thanks for reading Mckbirdbks and Ruch bless you both :)


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Moms-Secret 3 years ago from Central Florida

I couldn't think of a better description of fire than licking flames as it consumes all the moisture around it in that very way. Awesome. Like us, fire licks and drinks in water until its overwhelmed in it and drowns.


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Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton Author

thank you sweetie :)


Vincent Moore 3 years ago

You described such agony, futile, lost, knowing she was doomed as the flames licked nearby, consuming everything in its reach. Indeed an awful way to go, I pray the toxic fumes takes her before the flame. Well written my poet, I felt the heat licking nearby.


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Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton Author

thanks Vincent for visiting :)


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dghbrh 3 years ago from ...... a place beyond now and beyond here !!!

You always do amaze me by your unusual way of poetry. A very heart ranching and flaming picture you have painted in this one. Enjoyed it and voting and sharing too.


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Genna East 3 years ago from Massachusetts, USA

Very realistic, Frank...dark and consuming like the flames and the smoke. Very well written!


Sueswan 3 years ago

Hi Frank

A frightening but awesome write!!

Take care :)

Voted up and sharing


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Cyndi10 3 years ago from Georgia

Amazing writing, horrible event. And it turns out, very prophetic given recent events.


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epigramman 3 years ago

Not a nice way to go, Frank, to be licked by flamees, but your writing always puts the fire under my creative butt - lake erie time 7:34am


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Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton Author

LOL thanks for reading Epi LOL.. Cyndi thank you always good to see you.. Sueswan and Genna East thanks so much for the comments and good to see you to Dghbrh :) bless you all


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Denise Handlon 3 years ago from North Carolina

Hi Frank, where do you get your ideas from? It's like this little spark that grows into the large flame that consumes your readers. This is just one example-it's an amazing poem. I think what I'm so in awe of is the way you so cleverly tell a story, the details that evoke the emotions from the images you present with each carefully chosen word. Two thumbs up and an Awesome. :)


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Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton Author

aaawwww thank you Denise God bless you


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acaetnna 3 years ago from Guildford

Amazing and totally creative too.


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Eiddwen 3 years ago from Wales

You really have found your niche here Frank.

Amazing as always and I vote up and share all aroud.

Eddy.


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Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton Author

thank you Acae and Eddy for stopping by :)


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LadyFiddler 3 years ago from Somewhere in the West

WAW this was rel flaming lol very nice Franky Lymmon .

Keep up the fine work I enjoyed it


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Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton Author

thanks again lady...")


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Vinaya Ghimire 3 years ago from Nepal

Another phenomenal work for a master writer and poet.


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Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton Author

thanks Vin :)


Lee Cloak 20 months ago

Masterful, brilliant, very very enjoyable, thanks Lee


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Frank Atanacio 20 months ago from Shelton Author

thanks again Lee :)

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