Domestic Violence: Lizzy’s Tale

Lizzy pressed herself against the wall. He must have caught the earlier bus home today. She could hear his key in the lock and she knew just what he’d do if he caught sight of her. With her little ones growing inside her, she wasn’t as fleet of foot anymore and it was becoming increasingly difficult for her to try and outwit or outrun him. Maybe if she stayed quite still, he wouldn’t see her. Fat chance! He strode in, threw his salesman’s bag on the chair, yawned and stretched. He paused right in the middle of his stretch and came to life.


That was the effect she had on him every time he set eyes on her. A cruel gleam slowly grew, starting from the back of his eyes till it spread through his whole face, lighting it up. She could almost hear the words in his mind, ‘Let the games begin!


He slowly made his way to the fireplace and picked up the poker. Staring at her, willing her not to move but to stay frozen, transfixed like a statue, he advanced slowly, poker in hand.


‘Why do men love violence so?’ she wondered. ‘This slob of a man who sits sprawled in front of the idiot box, gorging on unhealthy take-away food whenever he’s in the house – what right does he have to torment me the way he does, day after day?’

She was usually much better prepared. As soon as it was time for him to come home, she hid behind the curtain and stayed still, very still. Any little movement was enough to get him going. Last week, it had been that awful spray. She hadn’t been as ungainly last week so she had run as fast as her legs could carry her, eyes shut tight so she wouldn’t get blinded. She hid herself behind the first door she could spot and after looking around a bit, he gave up and returned to his favorite couch potato pastime.

Lizzy loved this house. It was hers – he was the interloper. The old wooden beams, the walls you could hug, hoping it would tell you stories from years ago. If you listened carefully, you could hear the whisper of ivy as it brushed against the outer walls. This was where she had her children, where they had grown up, playing and running through the rooms, some of them in a rather dilapidated condition but she knew and loved every brick, every beam.

‘And here I am, pregnant again, unwanted in my own home!’

He hated her, that much was certain and she knew the day he got rid of her would be one of the happiest in his life. Why did the very sight of her make him so mad? Was she really that repugnant? She, who kept his home clean, who never, ever made demands, who went around without a sound, not disturbing him or anyone else. Most of the time, she was not seen, not heard.

The hand holding the poker took aim. Lizzy couldn’t move, she was so terrified. Would her little ones die in her womb, never seeing the light of day? Or the warm glow of the house at night? One foot after the other….slowly, he advanced, holding her gaze so she would stay pinned to the wall with fright. He lifted his arm, oh, so slowly. Then he struck. In that split second, she moved, as though a puppeteer had jerked some strings. She felt the poker come down hard on her behind but she got away. Scampering to safety, into the attic above, she let out her breath, scared but glad to be safe.

‘Tonight… I can feel it’s my night. How many will there be? Four? Five? More? We won’t let him kill our spirit, my little ones. Soon, there will be many more of us for him to tackle. Who knows? Maybe we can drive him mad!’

The man put down the poker and gingerly picked up the lizard’s tail with a paper tissue.

‘The next time, I’ll smash that dratted lizard, I will!’


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dohn121 7 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York

This is quite a story, Shalini! You did an commendable job of narrating this story and your internal dialogue is spot on. Thanks for sharing this one...Is there more?


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Shalini Kagal 7 years ago from India Author

Dohn - thanks for reading! No - I don't think so - not when I can read great storytellers like you :)

It's just that it's pouring cats and dogs, there's a lizard that's sitting just outside the window glaring balefully at me and the dogs hate it. In short, had nothing better to do :D


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Feline Prophet 7 years ago from India

Well! You sure had me there! :)


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Shalini Kagal 7 years ago from India Author

FP - I wonder :) Thanks as always for reading!


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Pete Maida 7 years ago

It is a terrible ordeal. Things like that must be stopped. People are working to see and end to such savage treatment. Not all men love violence and I believe it is a very small portion that would do that kind of harm.


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Tammy Lochmann 7 years ago

Brilliant! I really enjoyed that one.


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fishskinfreak2008 7 years ago from Fremont CA

A SOCIAL EVIL


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Jaspal 7 years ago from New Delhi, India

lololol .... goodness!! And there I was all set to let you know that no man could possibly be so crazy, and to request you to avoid any crazy man-hating group you might have lately joined up!


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breakfastpop 7 years ago

Oh my, you really had me scared to death for a minute. Great suspenseful read...


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Shalini Kagal 7 years ago from India Author

Pete - almost all the men I know are non-violent so I have to agree with you there!

Tammy - thank you, thank you!

fishinfreak - yes, it is.

Jaspal - haha - thanks for reading!

breakfastpop - appreciate your coming by!


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Minilady 7 years ago

Gosh..I was holding my breath! Great writing Shalini! :)


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Storytellersrus 7 years ago from Stepping past clutter

Shalini, I was thinking, "No pregnant woman would stick around for that! What could possibly keep her in that room???" Got me, you stinker pie.


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Shalini Kagal 7 years ago from India Author

Thanks Minilady - missed seeing you around :)

S - sometimes the darker shades of me emerge :D Thanks for reading!


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lyla 7 years ago from India

Shalini..lol..you had me!lol!Great writing!I don't blame that poor guy for hating Lizzy soo much.My eyes too glisten with positive hatred at Lizzy's cousins in my house!:)


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D.A.L. 7 years ago from Lancashire north west England

brilliant as always a pleasure to read.


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Enelle Lamb 7 years ago from Canada's 'California'

Excellent hub, well written and great perspective! Loved it!


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Shalini Kagal 7 years ago from India Author

lyla - same here - I don't like them either and I'm sure they don't like me!!

D.A.L. - thank you so much!

Enelle - appreciate your stopping by!


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dusanotes 7 years ago from Windermere, FL

Your hub is glorious for two reasons. It spotlights a really big problem in the world - men who batter women. There is a place for them and it's not in a home. Second, you used the creative art of fiction to get your point across. Well done, bravo. I love to read and write fiction. Working on a novel currently. Love your hubs, Don White


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Shalini Kagal 7 years ago from India Author

Thank you Don - good of you to come by!


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EleanorL 7 years ago

Great insight.


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Shalini Kagal 7 years ago from India Author

Thank you Eleanor!


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ehern33 7 years ago

Wow, I am impressed with your ability to keep me in suspense. A very strong point made as well that needs to be focused on.


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Shalini Kagal 7 years ago from India Author

Thank you for coming by and reading, ehern33!


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cindyvine 7 years ago from Kyiv, Ukraine

Sahlini, this was so clever! You had me hanging there right until the end! Excellent!


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Shalini Kagal 7 years ago from India Author

Cindy - thank you! I was just about to read your 'challenge poem' when I saw this - off to do that now :)


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quicksand 7 years ago

Whew! What a relief! :)


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Shalini Kagal 7 years ago from India Author

hehe - thanks for coming by, my friend :)


patchouli 7 years ago

great story, well thought out, one I will remember.


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Shalini Kagal 7 years ago from India Author

Thank you patchouli!


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Dim Flaxenwick 7 years ago from Great Britain

You are wicked.!!! I wanted to punch the guys lights out before I got to the end. Brilliant as always.


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Shalini Kagal 7 years ago from India Author

Hi there Dim - thanks so much for reading :)


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Tatjana-Mihaela 7 years ago from Zadar, CROATIA

Wow, this is excellent article. I am on lizard´s side.


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Dolores Monet 7 years ago from East Coast, United States

Shalini - you really had me going. My heart rate was up, and a quiet rage was building up in me against this total stranger. Great twist. But I'll never look at house pests the same way again.


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Shalini Kagal 7 years ago from India Author

Hi Tatjana - I'm sure Lizzy would like that :)

Dolores - thanks for coming by and reading! Not to worry - lizards drop their tails without pain!


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Cleanclover 7 years ago from Piece of land!

Assertive people never get ill-treated. Lizzy has to change herself to stop others manipulating her and if it's hard to live then leave and start a new relationship again instead of wasting your life.


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Shalini Kagal 7 years ago from India Author

I don't think lizards are quite given the chance to be assertive :)


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Countess Batula 6 years ago from Cranbourne

LOL I'm still laughing :P


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Shalini Kagal 6 years ago from India Author

Thank you, Countess :)


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Amanda Severn 6 years ago from UK

I sort of guessed where this was going about halfway through, though I didn't guess the lizard bit until the end as we don't have too many of those here. Great story, brilliantly told. I love it when you write fiction.


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Shalini Kagal 6 years ago from India Author

Thank you Amanda - you're too kind :)


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Himitsu Shugisha 6 years ago

This is brilliantly done. I look forward to reading more of your work.


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DellaG 6 years ago from United Kingdom

Wow that was GRREAT Shugisha ! well exacuted ( no not the lizzard ) !

i'd love to read more

DellaG http://hubpages.com/literature/Rainy-Days-and-Sund


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Shalini Kagal 6 years ago from India Author

Hi Himitsu - thank you. I look forward to reading more of yours too.

Thank you Della - does Shalini sound like Shugisha? :)


nessie 6 years ago

The twist in the tale. I liked the ending.


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Shalini Kagal 6 years ago from India Author

Thanks for reading.


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Info Help 6 years ago from Chicago

great hub, it was very suspenseful while driving home an excellent point! Keep up the good writing :)


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Shalini Kagal 6 years ago from India Author

Thank you Info Help for coming by and reading :)


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Madison22 6 years ago from NYC

WOW! Excellent, enjoyed it very much!


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Shalini Kagal 6 years ago from India Author

Thank you Madison22.


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bladesofgrass 6 years ago from The Fields of Iowa

Wow...that was quite unexpected, but beautifully written I might add! All this created by one little lizard outside your window? Nicely done. Can't wait to read more from you. :)


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Shalini Kagal 6 years ago from India Author

Hi bladesfgrass - thanks for reading and for the fanmail!


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eventsyoudesign 6 years ago from Nashville, Tennessee

Wow! You really had me going. Love it, love it, love it!


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Shalini Kagal 6 years ago from India Author

Thank you for reading - I loved writing it :)

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