Lost in the Abyss~A Poem

Depression can Feel Like Being in a Dark Tunnel

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Depression

Darkness envelopes her wounded soul

Bruises of pain and sadness

follow slowly and steadily behind

Engulfed with feelings of isolation and despair

She slips deeper and deeper into the morbid abyss

Where sinister souls claim their prize

From weary lost minds which hold no sense

She climbs now from her self-induced muck

climbing upward only to spiral back to the tomb of darkness

Escaping the torment only moments at a time

until the plunge becomes like mocking tones

that delve and penetrate deeper into her sanity


Depression

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Definition of Depression

Wikipedia defines depression as a state of low mood and aversion to activity or apathy that can affect a person's thoughts, behavior, feelings and sense of well-being. People with a depressed mood can feel sad, anxious, empty, hopeless, helpless, worthless, guilty, irritable, angry, ashamed or restless.

© 2010 Linda Rogers

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Poetry Girl 6 years ago from Arizona

This is beautifuly tortured..I know what you are saying, few words and complex emotion.


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swosugrad09 6 years ago from Oklahoma

Nicely written! I like the deepness of it.


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Healing Touch 6 years ago from Minnetonka, MN

Wow. It is hard to breath reading this. What a gift you have of putting emotion into words.


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Minnetonka Twin 6 years ago from Minnesota Author

poetrygirl-thx for stopping in and relating to my poem.


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Minnetonka Twin 6 years ago from Minnesota Author

Swosugrad09-ewwww-Someone thinks I'm deep. Seriously, thanks, this was fun to write.


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Minnetonka Twin 6 years ago from Minnesota Author

HT-Deep breaths, in and out, in and out. There there, all is well!


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Rebecca E. 6 years ago from Canada

wow, what awesome writing, it is so beautiful, keep on doing this!


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megsshere 6 years ago from California

Excessively mesmerizing!

I had to rate it 'awesome'..:)


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lorlie6 6 years ago from Bishop, Ca

Beautiful and haunting words, Minnetonka Twin.

Thanks.


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Minnetonka Twin 6 years ago from Minnesota Author

Rebecca-thank you kindly for your lovely comment about my poem. I love poetry, it is so healing to write.


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Minnetonka Twin 6 years ago from Minnesota Author

meggshere-I am honored that you rated my poem awesome. Thank you soooo much!


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Minnetonka Twin 6 years ago from Minnesota Author

lorlie6-Thank you for your comment. It's a dark poem but I love writing these and finding good symboligy.


kimberlyslyrics 6 years ago

very moving

thank you

kimberly


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Freya Cesare 6 years ago from Borneo Island, Indonesia

Deep emotion. Deep pain. Deep thought. Depressed. You have a way with dark poetry. Beautiful dark deep poem.


SilverGenes 6 years ago

This is written so well that the pain and desolation is almost too much to bear. As lorlie put it so well - haunting.


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Minnetonka Twin 6 years ago from Minnesota Author

kimbery-thank you for commenting on my poem. I also like how you wrote your comment in rows. Very creative!


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Minnetonka Twin 6 years ago from Minnesota Author

FC-So nice that you stopped in and commented on my poem. Loved all the D's in your comment. Hope I didn't depress you too much.


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Minnetonka Twin 6 years ago from Minnesota Author

SG-I take that as such a compliment that my poem affected you this way. Some time it's fun to write about pain as I find I write more about happy things. Thanks for coming by.


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tonymac04 6 years ago from South Africa

A very haunting poem, as Laurel said. Very moving.

Love and peace

Tony


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Minnetonka Twin 6 years ago from Minnesota Author

Thank you tonymac04-It's a dark one indeed. Thanks for commenting my friend. God Bless


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nicolace 6 years ago from Teddington, UK

It's dark, deep and thoughtful. very good.


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Minnetonka Twin 6 years ago from Minnesota Author

Thanks for reading it nicolace and thx for stopping by.


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Awful Poet 6 years ago from The Large Magellanic Cloud (LMC) (m-M)_0 = 18.41, or 48 kpc (~157,000

Very fine piece


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Minnetonka Twin 6 years ago from Minnesota Author

Thanks Awful Poet-That means a lot coming from a poet such as yourself. Appreciate you checking this out and commenting.


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BobbiRant 6 years ago from New York

Very emotional. I love poems that move me and where I can just feel the emotions.


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Minnetonka Twin 6 years ago from Minnesota Author

Thanks Bobbi-I am honored it moved you. I love writing poetry because it relaxes me and feels so healing.


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epigramman 6 years ago

.....you have a deep heartfelt poetic soul - and one that is so rare and true ..... and your readers benefit from this gift everytime you write!


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brightforyou 6 years ago from Florida

A truly achingly accurate description of the agony of depression. I love your work.


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Minnetonka Twin 6 years ago from Minnesota Author

Epigramman-Thank you for your kind words. I am touched. Have a blessed day.


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Minnetonka Twin 6 years ago from Minnesota Author

brightforyou-Sorry you know how depression feels. I really appreciate your kind compliments on my writing. It is always nice to know people enjoy what you do. Thanks so much.


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billyaustindillon 6 years ago

Powerful writing - I read this after reading through your comments of my escalation of commitment hub and how eerie it seemed in the context. Perfect.


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Minnetonka Twin 6 years ago from Minnesota Author

That is eerie! We must be on the same wave length. May I say again that your escalation of commitment was an incredible piece of work and you should be proud. Have a great day billy.


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Denise Handlon 6 years ago from North Carolina

Maybe I'm morbid or something, but--'Cool' poem! I could feel the despair.


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Minnetonka Twin 6 years ago from Minnesota Author

Denise-That is so funny/cute. I am soo glad you were taken down that road in my poem as i guess this says I did a good job. I don't know what it is, but I do enjoy dark poetry now and again. thx for the comment.


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HattieMattieMae 5 years ago from Limburg, Netherlands

Yes it grabs you in the heart, feeling the despair.

captured it here:

She slips deeper and deeper into the morbid abyss

Where sinister souls claim their prize

From weary lost minds which hold no sense


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Minnetonka Twin 5 years ago from Minnesota Author

Depression is not a fun thing and this really helped me when I was feeling crummy. I love writing poetry to help ease my pains and highlight my joys. Thanks so very much for reading this poem. I think it's one of my best.


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HattieMattieMae 5 years ago from Limburg, Netherlands

Yea depression is part of us at times, coming to terms with it, and understanding the balance of it is just what is in the moment, but does not have to carry on to the next moment.


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Minnetonka Twin 5 years ago from Minnesota Author

Exactly, and I think writing about it helps you move through it quicker and reminds us it ends.


femmeflashpoint 5 years ago

That was about as good of a description of depression as it gets. Right on the mark, and hopefully, for most of us, we won't have to spend much time in the pit.


Sunnie Day 5 years ago

Good Morning Minne,

You captured a saddened heart sinking deeper into despair. Really good.

Have a great day,

Sunnie


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carolina muscle 5 years ago from Charlotte, North Carolina

heartbreaking, but beautiful.


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theseus 5 years ago from philippines

MT,

Wow.Powerful and eerie nonetheless.I was absolutely hooked.

As much as I hope that nobody has to go to such pain, I know that it happens to some of us. I could only hope that they have more than enough strength, faith and support system to help them get through it.

God bless.


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Lucky Cats 5 years ago from The beautiful Napa Valley, California

My Goodness....such an exact description of depression, a feeling of hopelessness....drowning in the despair of intense feelings from which one cannot escape. Makes me think of Sylvia Plath; "The Bell Jar." A recurring and inescapable reality which is all consuming and ever lurking..awaiting a chance to spring. Poignantly beautiful and compelling...beautifully written. Linda; I am always greatly impressed and pleased with your writing; you truly are a talented author! UP Awesome Interesting and Useful. Beautiful in your ability to describe, so clearly, the state of depression.


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Minnetonka Twin 5 years ago from Minnesota Author

Hi Femmeflashpoint-Luckily, I'm currently not in this place but I sure know what it's like to be there. Thanks for stopping :-)


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Minnetonka Twin 5 years ago from Minnesota Author

Hi Sunnie-Don't worry-I'm in a really good place these days but just hit the share button of this poem I wrote a while back. You have a lovely day too :-)


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Minnetonka Twin 5 years ago from Minnesota Author

Thanks Carolina. I think it's one of my better Dark Poems. All is well with me so no worries. LOL :-)


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Minnetonka Twin 5 years ago from Minnesota Author

Hi Theseus-Great to see you :-) I have had my struggles with depression and it's no fun at all. I am grateful that I am feeling great these days. Have a great day.


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Minnetonka Twin 5 years ago from Minnesota Author

You always make me feel soo good Lucky Cats. I so appreciate your comments about my writing. I must admit that I Really enjoy whipping out dark poems from time to time. It just feels good! We all have dark side of us and sometimes it just needs to get out. LOL :-) Great to see you here.

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