Love and Longing: My First Tanka Poems

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Just an empty void

Longing for sweet caresses

Summer light fading

And the eyes that shined so bright

Burns as cold as winter's ice



Damaged sad Broken

A Ghost; ceases to exist

No more tomorrows

All dreams reside in the past

Till you come home again my love

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You will think of me

When the pretty birds have flown

When you seek love again

When winter chills your very bones

I will comfort you once more

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As the last snow falls

Like Spring sun on a cold brook

You will come to me

My knight on his dashing steed

Tenderly possessing me



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tobusiness 4 years ago from Bedfordshire, U.K Author

Michelle, thank you for the visit, so glad you liked this. My first and only attempt at a Tanka.

Maybe it's time to try another. All my best.


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AudreyHowitt 4 years ago from California

Beautifully done!


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midget38 4 years ago from Singapore

I love the imagery here...that of an empty shell without one's love. A wonderful tanka, Jo!! Thanks for the write! Sharing!


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BeyondMax 4 years ago from Sydney, Australia

Wow, so expressive, a real gem. Love them and the pictures, they take my breath away!


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tobusiness 4 years ago from Bedfordshire, U.K Author

Integrity, thank you for the vote and the support, much appreciated.

Best wishes

Josephine :)


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tobusiness 4 years ago from Bedfordshire, U.K Author

Unknown, this was my first attempt at writing a Tanka, thank you very much for the encouragement.


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unknown spy 4 years ago from Neverland - where children never grow up.

Oh Jo. That was a wonderful read plus the imagery you use is perfect!


IntegrityYes 4 years ago

I voted up for sure, Joanne.


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tobusiness 4 years ago from Bedfordshire, U.K Author

Critical, much appreciated.


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CriticalMessage 4 years ago from Chicagoland, Illinois

Sweet !


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tobusiness 4 years ago from Bedfordshire, U.K Author

Dghbrh, nice to see you, I'm very happy to know you enjoyed my poems. Best wishes to you.


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tobusiness 4 years ago from Bedfordshire, U.K Author

Welcome Midget, thank you so much for the visit and encouraging words, much appreciated.

Kindest regards.


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dghbrh 4 years ago from ...... a place beyond now and beyond here !!!

such a beautiful poem......well it felt like its happening in front of my eyes. all votes up and sharing as well:-)


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midget38 4 years ago from Singapore

Jo, this is awesome, and the use of imagery here is really powerful. So glad to know you and to be able to read this lovely, well-written Tanka poem. Lovely, and sharing!!


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tobusiness 4 years ago from Bedfordshire, U.K Author

Lesley, many thanks for visit and comment. Wishing you all the best.


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Movie Master 4 years ago from United Kingdom

Fabulous poetry, love this and voted up!

Best wishes Lesley


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tobusiness 4 years ago from Bedfordshire, U.K Author

Blossom, Thank you for liking this, very much appreciated.

Regards


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Mhatter99 4 years ago from San Francisco

Dōitashimashite


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BlossomSB 4 years ago from Victoria, Australia

That was a lovely poem and the photos were great and so evocative.


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tobusiness 4 years ago from Bedfordshire, U.K Author

Kashmir, thank you so very much for the visit and kind comment. Kindest regards.


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kashmir56 4 years ago from Massachusetts

Thoroughly enjoyed your beautiful written poem and enjoyed how easy it flowed .

Well done and vote up !!!


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tobusiness 4 years ago from Bedfordshire, U.K Author

Gottabegod, thank you so much for liking this, and for the generous comment. Very much appreciated.

Best regards.


gottabegod 4 years ago

Very nice & soulful poem! It truly drew out the longing for one's love to soon be together again. Thoroughly enjoyed it!

God bless!


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tobusiness 4 years ago from Bedfordshire, U.K Author

Frank, I 'm thrilled to know that you liked these poems, thank you for stopping by, always appreciated. My best to you.

Jo.


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

this is a very well written love and longing poem.. and what I like most is how you sprinkle in the pictures to keep you thinking about love and longing.. clever my friend :)


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tobusiness 4 years ago from Bedfordshire, U.K Author

Arigato gozai masu, Martin san.

Never to old to learn, much appreciated.

E Doolittle.

Best wishes to you

Jo.


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Mhatter99 4 years ago from San Francisco

"She's got it! By Jove she's got it! The rain in Spain..." :)) Now what made me think you'd be this good??? Now I tell you keep sharing

and thank you

martin


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tobusiness 4 years ago from Bedfordshire, U.K Author

Angelo, you're very kind, thank you for the visit and comment. Best wishes to you.


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Angelo52 4 years ago from Central Florida

Great! Made all kinds of images in my limited mind. Thanks for sharing. Talking of sharing, let me share these.


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tobusiness 4 years ago from Bedfordshire, U.K Author

Hi, Jamie, nice to see you, Mhatter pointed me in the direction of the Tanka,so I gave it a go. Can't wait to see Sam in action.


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tobusiness 4 years ago from Bedfordshire, U.K Author

Billy, thank you for dropping by and for the wonderful comment, very much appreciated. How was the trip?


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billybuc 4 years ago from Olympia, WA

That was beautiful my friend! Lovely flow to the poetry, just like the flow of the poet.


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jhamann 4 years ago from Reno NV

I love this poem, Tanka is new after reading yours I feel like I need to give it a try. Are you doing ok? Oh, Sam ran a kids Triatholon this weekend, I have to write a hub so you guys can see the video. Jamie


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tobusiness 4 years ago from Bedfordshire, U.K Author

Thank you Josh, I needed that.

So glad you liked it, the first comment is always special, especially when it's a good one.

Bless


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josh3418 4 years ago from Pennsylvania

Jo,

This was a beautifully written poem my friend! :)

As the last snow falls

Like Spring sun on a cold brook

You will come to me"

Powerful ending Jo!

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