Meeting Lizbeth - Chapter One Part II

Miss Stonify resembled a Rubens painting.
Miss Stonify resembled a Rubens painting. | Source

Beginning the Adoption Process

Tom spent weeks researching adoption agencies all over the state. He checked their records for successful adoptions, he checked for criminal records and foreign adoptions. He checked licenses and the agencies current status. He even called a few parents who had used different adoption agencies and he called several adoption agencies directly. He asked them what type of children they placed, what their fee structure was and how long it would take to go through the process.

He'd finally settled on the All Star Adoption Agency. Everything checked out on this agency and the reviews were stellar. When he called to set up an appointment he spoke with a Miss Stonify. He could hear her smile on the phone. He was lucky enough to get an appointment for the next day.

Louise went along just to placate him. It really didn't matter to her one way or another. He had promised her a nanny so she wouldn't have to be overly involved. She was a bit happy though that he had chosen a girl. At least she could mold her into a woman worthy of the Sanders name and fortune and wouldn't have to worry about messy little boy things all over the house. She agreed to the appointment tomorrow, though a bit halfheartedly.

Miss Stonify was a single lady. She had raven black hair that she kept in a neat bun pulled tightly at the back of her head with absolutely no pins showing. Her pale skin was in direct contrast to her dark hair giving it a look of porcelain. She was neither thick nor thin, more like a Rubens painting with the glow of her smile shining from her face. She always wore dark clothes to slim down her appearance. For her meeting with the Sanders she chose a navy blue suit with a plain beige blouse and matching navy necklace.

Everyone who met her liked her immediately. It only took seconds to know her smile was genuine and she loved her job. She couldn't have children of her own so she dedicated her life to helping children who couldn't help themselves. Babies in need of homes. Babies whose mothers couldn't or wouldn't care for them.

She screened future parents very carefully. She researched them on the internet, telephoned family members and friends, checked newspaper and magazine articles, all before they even filled out their applications. She had a sixth sense about people and was never wrong in her assessment of them.

The Sanders couple had more than enough money to care for a dozen children. Both had spotless reputations and people had good things to say about them and she knew a lot about Mr. Sanders. She was anxious to meet them face to face.

The Meeting

Tom was as nervous as a cat on a hot tin roof. He couldn't stay still. He urged Louise to hurry so they wouldn't be late. As it turned out, they were fifteen minutes early. It didn't matter though, the ever efficient Miss Stonify was ready for them when they came.

She brought them into her office and introductions were made all around. She could tell right away this couple was an enigma. Mr. Sanders, Tom, was immediately likable. He would make an excellent, loving father. She had no doubt. The woman, Louise, was another story. She had a gut feeling she wouldn't be a mother at all. She had to give serious thought to this one. Could that wonderful man make up for that egotistical woman? Would a baby melt her heart of stone? She could teach a little girl so much but would that make up for the lack of love and warmth? Could Tom, Mr. Sanders, provide enough love for both of them? She believed he could especially under the circumstances.

She explained to them that once they filled out the application an appointment would be set up for a home study by a social worker. The social worker would check not just their home but their personalities and see if they were truly ready to adopt a child.

Tom was perfectly at ease. He knew their home would pass the test completely. He knew he was ready and the social worker would see how badly he wanted this baby. He was a bit apprehensive about Louise who remained so aloof. They left the office to wait to hear from Miss Stonify. The homestudy went perfectly. The next step was waiting.

Several weeks went by and Tom got more and more nervous. Louise went about life as usual, only worried about her clothes and appearance. When Miss Stonify called she said, "Mr. Sanders your little girl is ready. We're looking at a placement date two weeks from today to give you time to get her room in order. Mr. Sanders are you there?" "Oh yes Miss Stonify I'm just so happy I think my heart skipped a few beats."

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Meeting Lizbeth

The little bundle they picked up that Thursday morning was a vision in pink. Her tiny little face was surrounded in blonde ringlets. Anyone would think Tom was her father! Louise had to admit she was kind of cute.

When they brought her home her room was waiting. Everything pink and pretty with beautiful white furniture. Tom had bought out the nursery equipment in the store so all the necessities would be on hand. Toys were lined up on shelves around the room and a big white rocking chair stood next to the crib. They called her Lizbeth after Tom's great grandmother. Lizbeth Sanders, all of Tom's dreams wrapped up in one little baby.

As soon as they were settled Louise asked where the nanny was? Tom had taken care of that detail as well and Nanny Madeline was to start tomorrow. Her room, right next to the nursery was just as well stocked as the nursery. Anything and everything she needed was right there for her along with her own bathroom and kitchenette.

The Present

As Tom closed the door to Lizbeth's room he couldn't believe they had brought her home ten years ago. He couldn't remember life without her. How often he thought of the adoption process and how lucky they were to have beautiful Lizbeth. As she grew she continued to look like Tom which astonished everyone. Their bond was almost palpable. Their nightly ritual, Tom singing to her as he rocked her to sleep, was the highlight of his day as well as hers.

Louise tolerated Lizbeth and tried to show her how to be a little lady. Thank goodness for Nanny Madeline. Louise didn't know what she would do without her.

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I think there will be one more part to Chapter One. All comments and suggestions are welcome. I really appreciate any guidance or constructive criticism you can give me.

If you'd like to read Chapter One Part I I've provided this link for you.

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billybuc 23 months ago from Olympia, WA

I waited to read this until I got my customers satisfied so I could give it the time it deserved. Well done, Mary. I always look to see if a story or chapter flows smoothly, and this does. Then I get into the technical aspects, and not one red flag is flying. Carry on my talented writer friend.


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tillsontitan 23 months ago from New York Author

I was looking forward to your comment to see if I was on track. I am beginning to see how characters take on a life of their own. They won't let me be, I can't even watch TV without an idea popping into my head.

Thank you so much for your comment, after reading it I am more excited than ever to continue.


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marcoujor 23 months ago from Jeffersonville PA

Dear Mary,

You passion is evident...the flow and pace are perfect for me and I yearn to keep reading (an excellent sign!) ...

You have started a virtual page turner...and you have my interest "hook, line and sinker"!

Voted UP and UABI and sharing. Love and hugs, Maria


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tillsontitan 23 months ago from New York Author

Dear dear Maria. Thank you so much for the kind words. It means so much to me to have your interest dear friend. This is all new to me but the thoughts and words keep flowing. For the first time I really think I gave a book in me! Love and hugs back to you dear one.


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mary615 23 months ago from Florida

Beautiful, well told story. I must go to Chapter 1 now and read that one. I am surprised you didn't give us a link to that one. I see it (I think) as a related Hub. I'm off....


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tillsontitan 23 months ago from New York Author

Thank you Mary. I added a link to Chapter One Part I. Hope you enjoy.


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Phyllis Doyle 22 months ago from High desert of Nevada.

Your story is moving along nicely, Mary. The visual image of the nursery you painted with words is darling, so is the baby. Tom is a wonderful father - it is too bad Louise is not a loving mother, but then the story would not be as interesting, I think. I am sensing that there is more to learn about the lady at the adoption agency, Miss Sofity - that she may come back into the story somewhere.

Ok, I will play the critic in a loving and pleasant way, yes? Your title has the name Lisabeth and the character's name is Lisbeth, without the 'a'.

In 2nd para the lady's name is Stonify:

"When he called to set up an appointment he spoke with a Miss Stonify."

In 4th para and continud on, the lady's name is Sofity:

"Miss Sofity was a single lady. "

also in 4th para the word shining has an extra 'n':

"She was neither thick nor thin, more like a Rubens painting with the glow of her smile shining from her face."

So sorry, I hate being the critic, but your story is very good and needs just those little things fixed to make it even better.

Do you type your article in a word doc and edit it before putting it on HP? I find that it helps a lot to edit in the word doc then again in the HubPage edit mode. I still overlook some mistakes or typos here and there and have to go back in the article and fix them. Not as often, though since I started using a word doc program. (I love Google Docs. It really keeps me in line.)

I love this story and anxiously await for the next part. You are really becoming a very good story teller, Mary. It was not long ago you wrote something like, "I don't know if I can write a creative story." Now look at you! Well done.


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tillsontitan 22 months ago from New York Author

Thank you thank you Phyllis! You're my Jiminiy Cricket. I will make the corrections. I have been typing right into HP from my handwritten notes so its easy to overlook. That darn Miss Stonify I knew her name was wrong but for the life of me couldn't see it!

More's to come and I hope I can keep it interesting.


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Phyllis Doyle 22 months ago from High desert of Nevada.

I am your Jiminy Cricket? No one has ever said such a lovely thing to me like that. Does that mean we are still friends? LOL You are as welcome as daffodils in spring.


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tillsontitan 22 months ago from New York Author

OMG yes we are still friends! Who else is honest with you but your friends ;) Now you're calling me daffodils...hm isn't that like a mutual admiration society?


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fpherj48 22 months ago from Beautiful Upstate New York

I'm lovin this sweet Daddy....reminds me of my own, Til. You got a tear from me. When I grow up I want to write just like my friend Mary Craig!!UP+++ wonderful story want more!


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Frank Atanacio 22 months ago from Shelton

What a blessed father...hmm and Tillsontitan you're about a good storyteller as we've got on hubpages these days.... keep it up and you'll become a craftswoman in short stories.. so far engaging characters.. and a clever plot....


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bravewarrior 22 months ago from Central Florida

Mary, I love this story. I'm wondering about Lizbeth looking like Tom. Is he somehow the natural father and doesn't know it?


Ghaelach 22 months ago

Evening Mary.

It's most likely all been said, so I won't go rambling on.

Enjoying your story. I like the way you've split the first chapter into four parts. It might have been rather long for HP, if the four parts had only been chapter one.

Waiting for the next installment.

Ghaelach


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MartieCoetser 22 months ago from South Africa

Beautiful so far, Mary. Your background setting is perfect and also your introduction of characters. Looking forward to the next chapter :)


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always exploring 22 months ago from Southern Illinois

I'm wondering the same as Shauna. Is there a connection? Oh, I know I ' gotta wait to know. I love this story. Your writing flows smoothly. I'm also pondering if there will be a connection with Miss Stonify? Hee...


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fpherj48 22 months ago from Beautiful Upstate New York

Sha!! brilliant minds think alike. Same thought went through my mind about the child's resemblance to the father. Til's not gonna give up that info! Keep reading girlfriend! LOL


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bravewarrior 22 months ago from Central Florida

Paula, brilliant minds? Or devious minds? I think we know each other well enough to know the answer..... :-)


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fpherj48 22 months ago from Beautiful Upstate New York

Sha........Shhhhhhhhhh! Our secrets must be guarded! Ya think it's too late for that? Yah, me too. They're all on to us GF.


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tillsontitan 22 months ago from New York Author

Paula he reminds me of my Dad too. So glad you're enjoying.

Thanks Frank. I've got ideas...loved your comment.

Ah Sha, the mystery of her looks. What do you think?

Thank you Ghaelach. I don't know how much I'll put on HP but I'm on my way!

I'm so excited Martie, I can't believe everyone likes it so much.

Always exploring you are picking up little tidbits, we shall see.

Ok Paula and Sha you may or may not be headed in the right direction. Devious most definitely! Love ya.


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fpherj48 22 months ago from Beautiful Upstate New York

Sorry Til....The Effer Dictionary states that devious means brilliant. I'll buy you a copy for Easter.


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mckbirdbks 22 months ago from Emerald Wells, Just off the crossroads,Texas

Hello Mary. What a broad foundation you are building. They brought the 'little bundle home' and ten years went by in a flash. That in some ways sadly resembles real life but I would hate to see you box yourself into a writing corner in the first chapter. I am trying to see where you are going, - perhaps I should just patiently wait.


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tillsontitan 22 months ago from New York Author

But of course Effer I would expect no less.

Mike I hope I'm not boxed in either, I do have places to go and people to meet.


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Phyllis Doyle 22 months ago from High desert of Nevada.

Yes, you do have places to go and people to meet

But, please remember to get enough sleep

To write your best and continue to keep

The story going strong and deep

I am anxiously waiting to read more

Of what you have for the family in store

I love your storytelling style and lore


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tillsontitan 22 months ago from New York Author

What a beautiful poem and sentiment Phyllis. Thank you so much!


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Genna East 22 months ago from Massachusetts, USA

I hope the story continues, Mary. Your style is wonderful and inviting..you have us all wondering -- and waiting for -- what will happen next in the chapters of the life of Lizbeth. :-) Voted up and sharing. :-)


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tillsontitan 22 months ago from New York Author

Thank you for the votes and shares Genna. Lizbeth's life is touched by many people. I hope they will keep you coming back.


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tillsontitan 22 months ago from New York Author

Thank you for the votes and shares Genna. Lizbeth's life is touched by many people. I hope they will keep you coming back.


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Faith Reaper 22 months ago from southern USA

I am so glad I realized I read Chapter One, Part II first and noticed this Part I now! I love this story of Lizbeth. I feel like a time traveler, being I have already read the next chapter to this one, and now I have seen a bit into the future. I will try to read these in the appropriate order.

You are certainly a wonderful storyteller.

Up ++++ tweeting, pinning and sharing

I hope you are enjoying a lovely weekend. Stay warm!


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pstraubie48 22 months ago from sunny Florida

And of course there is more, right? I am waiting, patiently, well, almost patiently..

Great read.

Angels are once again on the way to you ps


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annart 22 months ago from SW England

I'm still hooked! Can't wait to see what pans out. Got my ideas but we'll see.....

Well done, Mary.

Ann


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Sunshine625 22 months ago from Orlando, FL

What an awesome dad! I'm loving all the pretty in pink too...


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tobusiness 22 months ago from Bedfordshire, U.K

Another enjoyable chapter, Louise is developing into a fascinating character, can't wait to find out what really makes her tick. Beautifully done.


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tillsontitan 22 months ago from New York Author

Thank you Faith. I hope I can keep the interest up. So many ideas! Thanks for the votes and shares. I was at my daughter's for the weekend so it was lovely, now we wait for the snow!

Thanks so much Patricia. I really do appreciate the angels they are needed.

Thanks Linda.

Tobusiness Louise is quite a character with many facets yet unseen. Thank you.


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aviannovice 22 months ago from Stillwater, OK

This sounds like it is going to be a great story. Lead on.


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tillsontitan 22 months ago from New York Author

Thanks Deb. Hope you feel that way as you read on!


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btrbell 22 months ago from Mesa, AZ

Up++ Great story, so far. My dad was also a lot like Tom. He loved his 3 girls. But my mom was not like Louise, luckily!


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tillsontitan 22 months ago from New York Author

Me too Randi, my Dad was so devoted to his family. Like you, my Mom was too!


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PegCole17 22 months ago from Dallas, Texas

You're building the characters to perfection and creating an amount of tension that will keep the readers interested. Phyllis is a doll to help point out small corrections in the text. Jimini Cricket, indeed! She's what we all hope for when we beta test our readers.

Check the caption under the photo. If I'm not mistaken, it may need to be edited on the name. I'm already getting a bad feeling about Louise. Looking forward to reading the next part.


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tillsontitan 22 months ago from New York Author

Peg I had more trouble with that darn woman's name. Seems I typed it different every time I typed it. I corrected it over and over but missed the photo. Thanks so much and yes, I do appreciate having the small corrections pointed out.

Louise will hopefully be an interesting character.

Have a good day.


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rebeccamealey 21 months ago from Northeastern Georgia, USA

This sounds like a good story in the making. Best of luck with it, Mary!


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tillsontitan 21 months ago from New York Author

Thanks Rebecca. Its been well received so far and fun to write.


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Nell Rose 20 months ago from England

Loving the story so far! can't wait to see where its going!


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tillsontitan 20 months ago from New York Author

Welcome to Lizbeth's life and family.

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