Micro-Poem (No.9) Shooting Stars

Memories

This short poem is based on fond memories of my childhood and spending time with my dad. This really is the type of conversation we may have had.

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Shooting Stars

Reclining on the hillside,

I stare up at the sky,

As midnight's hour approaches,

To see a shooting star.


My dad lies back beside me,

As I gaze through squinted eyes

At the vast expanse of universe

Of which we're just a part.


Suddenly I see a flash,

At first it's just a twinkle.

Then slowly moving t'wards the east,

Oh wait there is another!


"Dad, look at all the shooting stars,

Flashing 'cross the sky!"

"Don't be daft", my father says,

"it's just those darn fireflies."

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Fireflies/ Lampyridae

Lampyridae is the scientific name for winged beetles commonly known as fireflies or lightning bugs. They use bio-luminescence to attract mates or prey. Fireflies produce a "cold light", with no infrared or ultraviolet frequencies. This chemically produced light from the lower abdomen may be yellow, green, or pale red. The larvae emit light also and are often called "gloworms"

(source: Wikipedia: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Fireflies)

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Ericdierker 3 years ago from Spring Valley, CA. U.S.A.

I just had to vote up all the way across. That is my dad and I and that is my son's and I. Although they are usually the ones to point out the obvious.

I love firefly's. Mucho Gracias mi amigo


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Jodah 3 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Eric,

Glad to see I touched a chord with you. Father son bonding, nothing better. thanks for the kind comment and voting up.


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FlourishAnyway 3 years ago from USA

I liked the zinger at the end. Funny. I've got a little nephew who often makes observations like that.


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Anna Haven 3 years ago from Scotland

The end made me smile. Nicely done.


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Mahir Maric 3 years ago from Bosnia and Herzegovina

Beautiful story inside the poem. Congratulations


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Jodah 3 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thanks FlourishAnyway, The zinger at the end is the most difficult thing to come up with, but essential to these short poems, like flash fiction stories. Glad you could relate it to your nephew.


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Jodah 3 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thank you Anna, glad you enjoyed this.


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Jodah 3 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Mahir, thanks for reading and the encouraging comment.


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Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton

poor kid, dad should have just said, yeah they are shooting stars LOL good poem here my friend :)


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Jodah 3 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Haha Frank, yeah dad didn't beat about the bush. Thanks pal, glad you liked.


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suzettenaples 3 years ago from Taos, NM

Love this poem. Your endings are great. I never see them coming and they me laugh out loud for real! I also learned something. I didn't know lightening bugs were beetles. That is so interesting. Thanks for an enjoyable read!


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Jodah 3 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

That's great Suzette, I'm glad you learnt something, and pleased to hear that these poems surprise you are make you laugh out loud. I really enjoy the process of writing them. I sometimes have the ending in my head, and then write the rest of the poem to fit. Thans for your kind comment.


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wetnosedogs 3 years ago from Alabama

Enjoyed this delightful poem and the learning aspect on fireflies.


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Jodah 3 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thanks for your wonderful comment wetnosedogs. Glad you enjoyed this little poem.


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billybuc 3 years ago from Olympia, WA

Micro poetry is perfect for people with short attention spans. LOL Loved the twist at the end...well done, John!


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Jodah 3 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Exactly Bill, just like me. One of the reasons I started writing them was that I found myself struggling to keep interested while reading some overly long poetry or stories. I am impressed by flash- fiction stories and decided to try a similar thing with a series of poems. Thanks for your kind comment.


Rayne123 3 years ago

Another beautiful poem with vivid images in ones mind

Beautiful pictures

Blessings


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Jodah 3 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Nice of you to stop by and leave your lovely comment Laurie, thanks.


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Mike Robbers 3 years ago from London

Very beautiful once again Jodah!!


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Jackie Lynnley 3 years ago from The Beautiful South

Thanks for the chuckle and then too the additional info. Well done! ^


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AliciaC 3 years ago from British Columbia, Canada

Thanks for sharing the funny poem, Jodah!


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ocfireflies 3 years ago from North Carolina

Have I told you lately? You rock! Awesome work in record time. I wish I could be so prolific. Also, thank you for educating folks. Duh! Why did I not think of that. Smiles. V+ for sure! : - )

Cheers Mate to Trifectas,

Kim


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jhamann 3 years ago from Reno NV

Excellent Jodah, what a great ending to a great poem.. thank you for sharing. Jamie


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BlossomSB 3 years ago from Victoria, Australia

Beautiful, funny, informative - it has it all!


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drbj 3 years ago from south Florida

Funny, Jodah, but you just shattered another one of my illusions ... or were they delusions?


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Jodah 3 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thank you Mike, glad you enjoyed this poem.

Jackie, always great to get your comments. Yes, thought I'd just add a little extra info.


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Jodah 3 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Alicia, glad it gave you a smile. Thanks for reading.


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Jodah 3 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Hi Kim, thanks for encouraging me to join you and write something about fireflies/lightning bugs. I couldn't believe I came up with this so quick either. I desperately wanted to write something but was having a slight block. Thanks for the idea 'Mate'. Thank you for the wonderful comment and vote up. Do I really rock...lol? Yes, cheers to trifectas. Hope Joy likes it too.


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Jodah 3 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thanks for reading Jamie, the great comment and vote up. Glad you liked the ending.


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Jodah 3 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Good to see you Blossom, thank you for such a generous comment.


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Jodah 3 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Drbj, sorry to be the destroyer of one of your 'lusions..lol. Glad you found it funny anyway.


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markdarmafall 3 years ago from Moundsville,WV

Great hub I really like the ending and the awesome pictures used in the hub. Be blessed

Mark


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Jodah 3 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thanks Mark, much appreciated. Glad you enjoyed. Have a great day.


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sligobay 3 years ago from east of the equator

Wonderful images as you are reclined beside your father stargazing and his Irish claim that you are crazy- just fireflies.


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Eiddwen 3 years ago from Wales

A wonderful hub Jodah. Voting up as always and wishing you a great day.

Eddy.


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Jodah 3 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thanks for visiting Sligobay, yeah good old dad...lol.

Good to get your comments as always Eddy, I always appreciate them. Thanks for voting up.


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Sunny River 3 years ago from A Place Without A Name which resides somewhere between Fantasy and Belief, just north of Reality

Lol! Great ending. I know many fathers (my own included) who would reply like that. :)


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Jodah 3 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Haha, thanks Sunny. That is so true.


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Pamela99 3 years ago from United States

I loved your poem. I don't see fireflies anymore and I miss them as we were fascinated with them when I was a child. I loved the twist at the end of the poem and enjoyed it very much.


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Jodah 3 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thank you for your kind comments Pamela, glad it brought back pleasant memories.


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Nikkij504gurl 3 years ago from Louisiana

We have June bugs here hate those things. never really saw a shooting star or fireflies :(


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Jodah 3 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Hi Nikki, initial hadn't seen fireflies until I moved to my present location either, but quite a few shooting stars. If you have the patience, lie and look up at the sky for long enough on any clear night, you will see one or two eventually. Tell me about June bugs.


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Ninasvoice 2 years ago from England

Very beautiful and witty poem.


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Jodah 2 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thank you for your kind comment Nina.

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