Moments of Clarity under the Rain

You make me to break me, so watch me shatter all over again

And you claim to ease my heart, only to savor my tasteless pain

And so I have decided to walk away from the past, which is forged out of blood

Stains and tears that through this distressful journey have been smudged

I am done with the poisoning symptoms of denial

Yet I wonder about the significance of such a trial,

As I extend my hand past the heavens and clouds hoping to find

Peace of mind and soul, yet it remains the only thing I am denied

Now in my shattered pieces I lay like an obsolete vase

With both arms around my sulking body in this phase

You break me to mold me, in the hopes to shatter me apart

Only this time you can’t claim my deadly dear heart

For I have cast it away where the sun never shines

Where its ancient purity won’t be tainted by all the lies

Defeated yet victorious I walk through the pouring rain

Searching for a remedy to silence the excruciating pain

We are taught from the epic of Gilgamesh that there is victory in defeat

For man is never happy until the moment his heart stops to beat

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Comments 17 comments

jenubouka 4 years ago

"you make me to break me, so watch me shatter all over again."

Beautiful and powerful. This is my favorite to date.

Awesome, vengeful, and a timeless battle among mates.


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BenWritings 4 years ago from Save me from, Tennessee

Amazing, powerful, emotional, and something I easily relate to, of course. You and I share one thing for sure...and that's the passion in what we write, and how we FEEL it with everything in us.

Beautiful work Uriel! You are gifted in this, no doubt

:]


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Uriel 4 years ago from Lebanon Author

jenubouka, i was eating my first meal of the day when the verses occurred to me so i left my food and got a piece of paper to write them down :D Thank you for liking the poem :) and i hope it was a genuine reflection of what i really feel.

Ben: i think it is the passion that you mentioned that makes us who we are. Yet by the end of the day the poet doesn't experience the world around him using his eyes, he is a major magnification of the true world as he experiences the whole world's suffering as well as happiness compiled all together~thank you ben :D


jenubouka 4 years ago

Sounds like you have reach your limit of someone or something...and tired of the way it has made you feel. I think you wrote the feelings perfectly.


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cebutouristspot 4 years ago from Cebu

Nice statement a lot of contrasting stuff. Like "defeat yet victorious" Very nice and brilliantly said.

Kudos for a very nice hub. :D and nice writing style


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makusr 4 years ago from India

Uriel,

Greetings from MAKUSR. This is really good poem and brings forth the anger and the angst well. Voted up!

Lots of Love,

MAKUSR


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Uriel 4 years ago from Lebanon Author

@jenubouka: yes it is someone and something :D

@cebutouristspot: thank you for stopping by and for your comment :D victory in defeat sounds really appealing right now :D

Makusr : Greetings to you as well :) i hope you are having a great day:) thank you for the comment


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Freya Cesare 4 years ago from Borneo Island, Indonesia

I am sitting here and thinking; how I miss watching those movies again.... T^T

Hello, dear. Like usual, you always managed to give me chill. Awesome! ^^


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Nikkij504gurl 4 years ago from Louisiana

wow uriel. this is my fave by you. its shorter than most that you write but it is just as powerful and emotional. and the ending is a beast! "my deadly dear heart" "For man is never happy until the moment his heart stops to beat" they need an "Amazing" button because its much more than awesome! and i see a photo from Uraboku up there. :)


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Uriel 4 years ago from Lebanon Author

@freya sorry for the chill i don't intend to scare people on a regular basis :D:D Huggies

@nikki :D GLAD you liked it :D:D AND YES i have been swooning over luka :D:D


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QudsiaP1 4 years ago

You make me to break me, so watch me shatter all over again

And you claim to ease my heart, only to savor my tasteless pain

Need I say more? Your words reflect the anguish of a soul. You are very talented.


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Uriel 4 years ago from Lebanon Author

QudsiaP1, thank you so much for the support and the comment, i am really glad you like it :D:D


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Nellieanna 4 years ago from TEXAS

You're a poet. That says it all if one understands the calling. I am eager to read more of it. I am amazed it's taken me so long to discover you. Thanks to Ben and your comments on his work, I have!


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Uriel 4 years ago from Lebanon Author

Nellieanna , i am really thankful for your comments and support :D i practically live on Ben's page :D:D:D Thank you again :D


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BenWritings 4 years ago from Save me from, Tennessee

Oh, this is just too cute. :P


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BenWritings 4 years ago from Save me from, Tennessee

I love you both (poetically speaking)


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Uriel 4 years ago from Lebanon Author

and i can't believe it took me 9months to reply to this :D me gusta :p

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