Spring Work

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Spring Work


Full circle to

the earth

a suggestion

of warmth

is all you

get

on your knees

in the moss

while the crows

circle down

for the kill.


At peace is

a momentary lapse

of worldliness

that slides through

undetected while

the warring parties

reload their

guns and a bird

calls his spring song

long before you

even hear it.


Then suddenly

it's gone and only

the echo of the

blast remains,

the gunners lay

bleeding,

the bird flies

away.


There's another war,

somewhere

someone else is

listening.




Death's Door


The metal latch

will lock at last

and chalky sky

change to black.

All cries and shouts

will filter out

with death's roar

an unseen

door

opens, and shuts.




Comments 31 comments

Vinaya Ghimire profile image

Vinaya Ghimire 5 years ago from Nepal

You write about spring and then you explore on death. Your are very erudite.


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snakeslane 5 years ago from Canada Author

Thank you very much Vinaya Ghimire, that means so much to me coming from someone as talented as you!


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Vinaya Ghimire 5 years ago from Nepal

Talented? Wow, this a nice compliment. I'll always remember.


jami l. pereira 5 years ago

I loved the spring poem , very lovely , yet the poem of death is a bit dark , yet short and sweet , such as life. You are very talented and i look forward to reading more from you soon , thanks:)voted up and awesome and beautiful


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snakeslane 5 years ago from Canada Author

@ jami l. pereira: thanks for commenting. Death is dark, and I decided to put the poem here to speak to the war theme in the first one, it seemed to fit and I didn't want to use such a short piece on its own.


jami l. pereira 5 years ago

You did a fabulous job pieceing the twp together they fit very nicely ! well done !:)


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snakeslane 5 years ago from Canada Author

Thanks again jami!


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CMCastro 5 years ago from Baltimore,MD USA

You should narrate this to some eerie music in the background. I can hear the organ in my mind right now. I want to read this to someone who likes to be spooked!


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snakeslane 5 years ago from Canada Author

Yes it is pretty dark, thanks CMCastro.


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epigramman 5 years ago

......dark, profoundly beautiful and deeply soulful.

I love how you can yin and yang your writing - going from light to dark and back again - always the mark of a great writer who can walk that fine line -- you are like a poetic puppeteer and words are on your string.

lake erie time ontario canada 2:56pm - short day today and back to work in a few hours - I'll see you on the weekend - and how do you feel about the changing seasons where you live - and what kind of music do you play on your guitar?

p.s. - I will post this essential work from you on my Facebook page with a direct link back here


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saddlerider1 5 years ago

It always amazes me how we watch the vultures and crows come in from on high for the remaining remains after the kill. The invisible door is let open as our spirits walk through to the other side, while our carcass is food for the brood with sharpen claw and beak. I liked how you played on words here, dark, yet penetrating with understanding. Bravo, well done.


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snakeslane 5 years ago from Canada Author

Thank you so much saddlerider1!


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snakeslane 5 years ago from Canada Author

Sorry epigramman, I missed your comment earlier. I haven't played guitar for many years, it was just a fun thing for awhile awhile back, but I used to just strum some chords, mostly Bob Dylan and a few folk songs, but I didn't keep it up, just enjoy others now. Thanks for your praise. I am overwhelmed.


Derdriu 4 years ago

Snakeslane, What a fine, philosophical, smooth fit is the link between the hunted, the hunter and the hunting! In particular, you do a great job of carrying through on your first, prescient words regarding the "full circle" of doors to and from life. The two poems stand excellently on their own, but in tandem is perfect.

Thank you for sharing, voted up + all.

Respectfully, Derdriu


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snakeslane 4 years ago from Canada Author

Hello Derdriu. Thank you (again) for reading and commenting on these poems. These two may be my favorites of all I've ever written. When this page was published I was quite new to Hub Pages and blissfully unaware of page length guidelines (with regard to poetry). Now, after reading comments in the forums I see there are some Hub Pages authors complaining about 'short' poetry Hubs (under 500 words) and I've not been comfortable using this format since. I've noticed that all of your poems are accompanied by additional text explaining the genre you are using, and the historical and/or ecological context. (You also provide astonishing images to illustrate the poetry and text) I admire how you do this consistently, and have decided that any future poetry pages I do will follow your model. I can see it is a tremendous amount of work, and I am not sure how some of my poems will translate, so I am still contemplating how to do this. Thank you so much for your inspiring words and your great work here on Hub Pages. Sincerely, snakeslane


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phdast7 4 years ago from Atlanta, Georgia

I like both of these a great deal. I guess I prefer, perhaps not dark per se, but intense poems. Speaking of things coming "full circle" ... are you familiar with the film, "Before the Rain?"

Set in Macedonia and addressing the ethnic, national, and religious conflict in Yugoslavia as it was breaking apart. Very interesting film that also plays with chronology. I use it from time to time in my upper level European History classes.

You might appreciate it. It is intense and dark, as a film about war and ethnic hatred must be. Moving poems.


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snakeslane 4 years ago from Canada Author

Thank you phdast for exploring some of my pages. I was surprised and kind of stunned to read your comment because it was the ongoing conflict in Yugoslavia that I was thinking of when I wrote this poem. So strange that you would mention that! I appreciate the film suggestion too. Thank you very much.


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rcrumple 4 years ago from Kentucky

You demonstrate a dark side previously unknown, filled with images of life and death. Strong and powerful! Great job!


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Mr. Happy 4 years ago from Toronto, Canada

I just want to say that I love the photograph You have posted here. Crows are wonderful creatures - I love them! They are guiding Spirits.

Spring and Death make an interesting combination. I do think they go hand in hand because Spring comes after the Death of Winter. Light comes from Darkness.

All the best!


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jhamann 4 years ago from Reno NV

Great powerful poetry, Thank you for sharing Snakeslane. Jamie


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snakeslane 4 years ago from Canada Author

rcrumple

Mr Happy

Jamie

I am honored that you have taken time to read my poems and comment so positively.


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epigramman 3 years ago

One of my favorites by you my fellow Canadian and esteemed colleague . Upon reading it - it felt and read brand new and then I notice I was here before several months ago . So that is always a good sign - when you read something and you see it in a different light or perhaps the same but it's still like reading it all over again - and this was a pleasure the 2nd time too - love how you can use such poetic economy with your words but create such powerful imagery and this piece was so haunting and in my mind's eye - cinematic too.

sending you warm wishes from a damp rainy night from lake erie time 11:45pm - are you sure it's not April? lol

listening to Led Zeppelin's Presence album - and then some blues or jazz - hope all is well with you

Do you have a favorite Bowie album?


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snakeslane 3 years ago from Canada Author

Hi Epi, Nice to see you return to this page, I am of course enjoying your generous 'critique'. I am a bit stingy with words I must admit. Nice of you to call it something special like 'poetic economy' haha and happy of course that you find something haunting and cinematic, all music to my ears and appreciated. David Bowie, is new to me, I've led a sheltered life (musically), so no favorites, but I knew you were a fan, so I sent you that message about the just released secret album. Thanks for the visit. Most of my Hubs are idled, so I'm glad you can still find things that interest you. Have a good night. It does seem to be unseasonably warm. Hope that helps your commute.


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epigramman 3 years ago

.....don't be so humble about your writing - you're awesome and very unique in your own right. lake erie time 6:31am


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snakeslane 3 years ago from Canada Author

Thank you Epi. "I'm just an old chunk of coal, but I'm gonna be a diamond some day..."


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epigramman 3 years ago

.....hey that's my line .....and that is from one of my all-time favorite songwriters - Billie Joe Shaver - you can find him on You Tube with this song - lake erie time ontario 2;29pm


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snakeslane 3 years ago from Canada Author

Yep, one of my favorites too :) (thanks for attributing).


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Patty Inglish, MS 3 years ago from North America

Your poems in this Hub could be voiceovers in some films I have recently seen. Unforgettable words.


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snakeslane 3 years ago from Canada Author

Patty, I am honored that you have taken time to read my poems and comment so positively.


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PegCole17 3 years ago from Dallas, Texas

These two poems are hauntingly beautiful along with the exquisite picture of the crow. One landed on my roof a few mornings ago and quite loudly barked out a greeting. We have the same 3 crows who have circled the neighborhood for years that I can remember. I've never lived anywhere long enough before to notice the regular inhabitants.


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snakeslane 3 years ago from Canada Author

Hi Ms. Peg. I am so happy to see you here. Yes, the crows are residents we sometimes take for granted, but they make themselves known eventually. The weather here is perfect now for 'Spring Work' and I am busy, busy, busy in the gardens, and loving it, but missing the writing and the camaraderie...Thank you for your wonderful encouraging comments. See you soon I hope.

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