"My Hardened Heart" A Villanelle Poem

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My Hardened Heart

My heart has become a hardened sore,
no longer an emotional parasite,
eating away at my core.

Resillient, always coming back for more,
never giving up the fight.
My heart has become a hardened sore.

Once rich in love, it now is poor.
Damage has been done without respite,
eating away at my core.

Thrown around like a drunken whore,
a street walker of the night.
My heart has become a hardened sore.

Trampled on and walked upon like a dirty floor,
collecting bruises and dust-mites,
eating away at my core.

You'll never see the pain behind this closed door,
as long as I feel despite.
My heart has become a hardened sore,
eating away at my core.

© Copyright NMJ 2012

A Villanelle

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epigramman 4 years ago

...well my heart is no longer hardened after reading this marvelous piece dear Nicole - in fact my heart has been melted - and yes I love the picture profile - such a great hat - such righteous attitude - lol - but when they come as good as you - why not.

lake erie time 12:00pm and sending you warm wishes


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Vidya Mallar 4 years ago from India

Beautifully presented yet I feel the pain behind the words... Perfect image...


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anusujith 4 years ago from Nilambur, Kerala, India

Villanelle given me a different experience. Thank you for your difference.


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Nikkij504gurl 4 years ago from Louisiana Author

Epi you always put a smile on my face. Thanks!

And thank you Vidya for reading and commenting.

Anusujith...your welcome?


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Cheeky Girl 4 years ago from UK and Nerujenia

Nikki, this ia a marvel of a poem. It has a strange curious appeal to it. The repitions are nice and it has a musical ring to it too!


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Nikkij504gurl 4 years ago from Louisiana Author

Thanks Cassie! did u read the Sestina poem I wrote? its is repetitive as well. I'd like to know your thoughts on it.


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tom hellert 4 years ago from home

Nik,

That made my head hurt... and I felt like yelling Bingo...


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Nikkij504gurl 4 years ago from Louisiana Author

well thats how one is done lol if you have Bingo that means you've won though. so that should be a good thing lol


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Mhatter99 4 years ago from San Francisco

Wow, so good at so many levels


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Rosemay50 4 years ago from Hawkes Bay - NewZealand

Powerful and painful poem.

I have never attempted a Villanelle, you did a great job here :)


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Nikkij504gurl 4 years ago from Louisiana Author

Thanks Rosemay! Did you happen to check out my sestina?


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Docmo 4 years ago from UK

Thanks Nikki for teaching me a new form of poetry. I may try one now. Your poem is gritty and delightfully dark. The villanelle format suits the theme well. voted up of course!


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Nikkij504gurl 4 years ago from Louisiana Author

Thankx Docmo. Cant wait to read yours if you decide to write one :)


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AudreyHowitt 4 years ago from California

Beautifully done Nikki--and a difficult form-


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epigramman 4 years ago

...oh god I can't write poe-tree to save my life (and frankly I don't want to)

but you my dear are a true master/mistress of this genre and I am so pleased to read this marvelous piece of writing - lake erie time ontario canada 12:49pm


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Nikkij504gurl 4 years ago from Louisiana Author

Thanks Audrey it was a bit difficult. Glad you like it. And Thanks epi haha your poetry or peo-tree is a bit unconventional but its always fun and entertaining to read. :)


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Astra Nomik 4 years ago from Edge of Reality and Known Space

This is so strangely melodic and yes, musical too. I love your new poems as they are so experimental lately, and you love trying new things in your writing, Nikki. :)


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Nikkij504gurl 4 years ago from Louisiana Author

you can thank the hubbers that inspired me for that.


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Astra Nomik 4 years ago from Edge of Reality and Known Space

You are sweet, and you are not afraid to try new bold things with poetry. Have a great day, Nikki. :)


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the pink umbrella 4 years ago from the darkened forest deep within me.

funny, this is exactly how im feeling. you hubpages rockstar :)


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h.a.chauhdary 4 years ago from Australia

really loved this one!!


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Nikkij504gurl 4 years ago from Louisiana Author

Rock on! but hopefully in a better state of feeling. Thanks everone!


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tsmog 4 years ago from Escondido, CA

Hello Nikki. How have you been? I like this format for poetry. Hmmm seems you have become an inspiring teacher of a great wealth of both knowledge and understanding.

Go Girl Go

Tim


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Nikkij504gurl 4 years ago from Louisiana Author

I have been great Tim. Thanks. I dont know how much of a teacher I am but I try to speak my opinions and give advice when I can. All I can hope is that people will listen and take my words to heart. If my poetry speaks to them in any way, well I'd say a job well done, or a poem well written.


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Anil and Honey 4 years ago from Kerala

Nice nice nice dear, Very simple and sweet words thanks for sharing.


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acaetnna 4 years ago from Guildford

Great work.


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damian0000 3 years ago from Belfast

Great poem Nikki --- i like the fact that you are always pushing at the boundaries and producing original and thought-provoking work.

There is so much movement in this piece --- i think it's one of the best you have done!

I am loving the couplet # Thrown around like a drunken whore.... Trampled on and walked upon like a dirty floor... #

Your poor heart!! -----

But what a vivid and creative imagination it has fired!!


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Nikkij504gurl 3 years ago from Louisiana Author

Well thank you Damian. Yes that is quite a description I would say. But my heart is a lot better now, Thanks. :)


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tsmog 3 years ago from Escondido, CA

Smile - That, Young lady of words not seeking the voice of a poet, yet inspires a poem of others, a choir maybe? well, does cause this heart to feel a glow. I am happy for your Nikki . . .Do have a great day, one smile at a time . . .

tim


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dghbrh 3 years ago from ...... a place beyond now and beyond here !!!

Simply brilliant.....Thank you for this one. Hats off to you !

Up up up and away.


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sligobay 3 years ago from east of the equator

Great write. I am not experienced with this form but see that you have confined your rhyme sounds to just two. I like the image of a drunken whore thrown on a dirty floor. Core and sore are a real poetic score.


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Nikkij504gurl 3 years ago from Louisiana Author

Thank you tsmog and dghbrh! you have a great day as well, though I'm commenting a little late lol

Sligobay, yep the example of how it is supposed to be written is on the left, with only an A/b rhyming sequence. so you could only have the 2 rhyming sounds when doing a villanelle. Yes people tend to like that part lol I wonder why? haha thanks.


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sligobay 3 years ago from east of the equator

LOL Nikki. I like "plain speak" in the middle of any read.

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