Haiku: Rain Series

Rain is such a valuable resource in Southern California and certainly welcomed after the hot summer temperatures and dry Santa Ana winds. Yet it often comes on the heels of the October fire season, and there is always the fear of mudslides in hillside areas denuded by raging firestorms. Still, there is the peaceful sound of a gentle rain, its unmistakable smell, and the promise of renewal to our drought-stressed environs. From the first random drops to the glorious burst of light which renders all foliage a vibrant green against the gray sky, I've tried to capture a storm's progression in successive haiku verses. I hope you enjoy them!

A distant rumble

The smell of impending rain

My dog takes cover.


_______

Welcomed drops

Mimic steps of visitors

On my gravel path.

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Bubbles float and pop

Rain and I splash in puddles

Joyfully in sync.

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Endless sheets of rain.

Red clay tile spouts aim downward.

Homeless earthworms.

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Pounding rain

Rhythmic drums of savages,

I am safe inside.

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Refreshed greenery.

Radiance breaks charcoal gloom

Behold! a rainbow.

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Quavering raindrops

Jeweled strand, wooden clothespins

Plop! broken necklace.





copyright 2011

© 2011 Catherine Tally

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WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

I have to try this.

Cool!


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cat on a soapbox 5 years ago from Los Angeles Author

Thanks, Will! I'm a bit shy. It is a fun discipline though.


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WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

No need to be shy.

You are among friends.


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WannaB Writer 5 years ago from Templeton, CA

Well done. Much better than I would have done.


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cat on a soapbox 5 years ago from Los Angeles Author

Thanks so much!


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mslizzee 5 years ago from Buncombe County, NC

The first welcomed drops

Like the steps of visitors

On my gravel path

This is so fabulous. I love words that instantly bring forth memories. I see my old dog scrambling for cover at the first sound of rain on the porch.

Thank you for sharing.


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cat on a soapbox 5 years ago from Los Angeles Author

Thanks,mslizzee!


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maven101 5 years ago from Northern Arizona

I loved every bit of these haiku...Amazing word pictures wrought with incredible skill...I love the discipline, the resolution in the 3rd line, and the clean, concise rendering of the true 5-7-5 haiku form...Bravo...Look forward to more...Larry


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cat on a soapbox 5 years ago from Los Angeles Author

Thank you, Larry. Nature is my inspiration as it fills all of my senses, and I love the discipline of trying to translate those impressions into haiku. You too have inspired me to keep working!


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arb 5 years ago from oregon

Haiku is indeed an art and though not my chosen style, I have developed a fondness for it's simplicity in revealing the unnoticed. Well done cat!


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cat on a soapbox 5 years ago from Los Angeles Author

Thank you, Arb. I really like the way you keep your mind open to different things!


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DDE 3 years ago from Dubrovnik, Croatia

Awesome read well expressed and you have showed your good talent in writing here. The sound of rain makes me want to read even more.


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cat on a soapbox 3 years ago from Los Angeles Author

Hello DDE. Thank you very much for your kind comments. The varied sounds of the rain have always stood out in my mind, and I had hoped to express these sensorial aspects in my haiku. I'm happy that you felt this through my writing. I appreciate your stopping by!

My best,

Cat:)


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AudreyHowitt 2 years ago from California

Love this, esp the last one!


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Senoritaa 2 years ago

Brilliant series, excellent imagery!


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cat on a soapbox 2 years ago from Los Angeles Author

Thank you, Audrey! This was my first series of haiku verses, followed by my wind series. Both works are my personal favorites. I'm glad you liked it. Take care!

Cat:)


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cat on a soapbox 2 years ago from Los Angeles Author

Hello, Senoritaa,

It's so nice to see you here this morning! I appreciate your stopping by to read and thank you for the thoughtful compliment. Glad you enjoyed reading my haiku.

All the best,

Cat:)

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