Nothing About You

Not enough game to see shards in the bran

Misread the map where this trip began

Missed the directions of the master plan

Found nothing about you that's more than

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Cautions wings flew in the race youth ran

Left home to commiserate with a new clan

A star in a foreign film only seen in Cannes

Found nothing about you that's more than

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Shaken not stirred a code wrapped in saran

Minds eye sees a spy who thinks he's a man

Claimed a license to control more than he can

Found nothing about you that's more than

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Miscalculated the target of your visual scan

Overestimated your power to enforce a ban

Engineered to enslave a mindset she outran

Found nothing about you that's more than

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Deviated septum obstructs your attention span

Can't smell the burnt ownership pooled in a pan

Now yesterday's remnants that lay in the trashcan

Found nothing about you that's more than

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Curiad 4 years ago from Lake Charles, LA.

Amy, you amaze me with you power with words!


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Amy Becherer 4 years ago from St. Louis, MO Author

Thank you so much, Curiad (is it Mark?). It's a fun challenge that exercises my brain, which can use all the help I give it.


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suzettenaples 4 years ago from Taos, NM

Powerful poem, Amy. I like this one so much. I really can relate to your poetry. Well done and well written!


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Curiad 4 years ago from Lake Charles, LA.

Yes it's mark:)


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Amy Becherer 4 years ago from St. Louis, MO Author

Thank you very much, Suzette. I need to head over to your hub place and check out your new material. I realized I've missed seeing you.


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Amy Becherer 4 years ago from St. Louis, MO Author

Thanks, Mark. It's good to meet the real person!


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drbj 4 years ago from south Florida

You know, Amy, I could not get the image of James Bond out of my mind as I read your ingenious poetry. Could it be your references to: ...'A star in a foreign film only seen in Cannes ... shaken not stirred mix the code ... Mind's eye sees a spy ... Climed a license to kill ...' Nah, I must be sorely mistaken! ;) But I did enjoy the ride!


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billybuc 4 years ago from Olympia, WA

Amy, Amy, Amy!

What goes on in that mind of yours? I would love to see you during the writing process. Like all talented writers, you are a master of the vocabulary, capable of bringing to life your character and transferring feelings through words. What a gift you have!

As always, this was the literary highlight of my day and I save it till last.

your buddy,

bill


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Amy Becherer 4 years ago from St. Louis, MO Author

You are so bright, dear drbj. If anyone catches the nuances, everytime, it's you. Yes, the person that inspired this particular write fashioned he was similar to Bond...James Bond. I was married to him until I could not continue to be subservient, told I was all fuxxed up and needed to get my head fixed, told I could not go with him unless I put on stilettos and a short skirt, hence, claimed a license to control... The star of a foreign fim refers to how I felt, as I didn't speak his language. I'm glad you enjoyed the ride, drbj. When I walked, he was taken by surprise, because he just didn't get it. When he speaks about our marriage, he talks like he enjoyed it...it doesn't surprise me. That's why I referred to the lack of attention span. It was all and still is about him. Thank you for giving me the opportunity to unload myself of but a few of the details in 19 years of marriage...probably more than you wanted to know, my friend.


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Amy Becherer 4 years ago from St. Louis, MO Author

My Buddy Bill, I'm certain I look like a crazy person when I'm writing. For example, I'll be thinking of a concept, go to my laptop and write a few lines, get up, think some more, come back again, back and forth, sometimes pacing, completely in another dimension where thoughts, words and ideas are crashing into one another, bouncing off each other, meshing, turning, twisting, jiving and settling into what I want to say. It is not sedate, calm or pretty. But, it's so much fun, sometimes, I think I'll explode. I can't imagine my life anymore without it or the people I call friends now. It feels like love.

Thank you for your awesome comment, Bill, and allowing me to expose my craziness. I just hope you still like me!


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Jackie Lynnley 4 years ago from The Beautiful South

You have created a real style I have never seen before you and it is so pleasing to read! Voted up.


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Amy Becherer 4 years ago from St. Louis, MO Author

Jackie, my friend, I am so glad you told me that. You've given me a nudge to get busy and do what I've wanted to in publishing a poetry book. Thank you for your awesome comment.


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Patty Kenyon 4 years ago from Ledyard, Connecticut

Awesome Job and Powerfully Written!!!


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Amy Becherer 4 years ago from St. Louis, MO Author

Patty, thank you from the bottom of my heart, which is singing with your words.


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breakfastpop 4 years ago

The amazing strength and character you possess is shining through in your poetry. Absolutely awesome!


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Amy Becherer 4 years ago from St. Louis, MO Author

I can't tell you how much your comment means to me, Pop. From one writer to another, we both share the same drive to say what we mean and mean what we say. Your powerful writing always says you are about the truth and nothing but. You words to me make me stand taller, inspire me to push onward and give me a reason to keep writing. You are a friend to me. Thank you, Pop.


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The Frog Prince 4 years ago from Arlington, TX

Heavy stuff there Amy. Annie Lennox is a nice touch.

Take a listen to here here:

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=aRdTh_u0rag

You may be able to use this one with a few of your words here and there :)

The Frog


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Amy Becherer 4 years ago from St. Louis, MO Author

Thank you, Frog Prince. I'll give anything Annie Lennox sings a close listen, for sure. I appreciate the help. I always write what I want to say prior to choosing the music. Sometimes, thinking of a fitting musical match takes longer than composing the poetry!


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always exploring 4 years ago from Southern Illinois

Wow Amy, What can i say that i haven't said before. You unlocked that door and my how you soar. This is one of your very best.. Loved it..


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Amy Becherer 4 years ago from St. Louis, MO Author

I'm so glad you like this, Ruby. Seems like the more I feel the message, the stronger the beat. By the way, Ruby, I love the poetic sentiment you express in your comment. Awesome, my friend.


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A.A. Zavala 4 years ago from Texas

Amy's March to the sea. Kicking ass and taking numbers. I like they lyrical flow of your work. You should get your daughter to put music to it.


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Amy Becherer 4 years ago from St. Louis, MO Author

Your comment makes me smile, Augustine! "Amy's March to the sea" is so poetic, I might just ask you for title ideas for my poetry book. My daughter has offered to help me put it together. Thanks, A.A.


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Gypsy Rose Lee 4 years ago from Riga, Latvia

What can I say. Agree with all of the above. Pure creative genius. You seem to make it easy. Your words just flow.


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Amy Becherer 4 years ago from St. Louis, MO Author

Thank you, Gypsy. Your words have me dancing in the clouds now. You keep me motivated.


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CrazedNovelist 4 years ago from Hampton, GA

Interesting Amy....


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Amy Becherer 4 years ago from St. Louis, MO Author

Thank you, Aubrey. I'll take interesting over boring any day!

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