...ON THIS MOUNTAIN TOP

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By: Wayne Brown

Can you see me up here on this mountain top

Holding my arms out wide?

Can you hear me shouting to the heavens

As my heart bursts with love and pride?



Do you know that I have reached the pinnacle

Of this long, hard climbing trek?

Do you see that I am successful now

Wearing a suit; a power tie around my neck?



I climbed this mountain, climbed to the top for you

Don’t you know that as you look?

Now I stand waving from the summit in wonder

If you know the effort that it took?



My trek to this great height means nothing at all

If you cannot see me here

My climb will have been in vain if you ignore it

Awakening my greatest fear



Can you see me up here on this mountain top

Or do you even know I climbed?

Can you see me from down where you are

Or are you not in the least inclined?



I thought you wanted me to climb; expected it

Don’t you know that’s why I went?

Now you seem oblivious to my presence here

Could it be that I misread your intent?



Do you realize what I have endured in this climb

Do you see me or just the mountain?

All the rocks, the snow, rain, and bitter cold

Tell me you see me; say you feel my pain



I stand here on this mountain top; heart in hand

Wondering if you see me up here

Wondering if you know how much I tried

Standing here; with all my fear


On this lonely mountain top …alone




© Copyright WBrown2012 All Rights Reserved.


15 February 2012


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anndavis25 4 years ago from Clearwater, Fl.

Two ways to look at it...Lonely at the top or a little closer to God...


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poet83 4 years ago from Windsor, Va.

Very pleasing rhyme scheme!


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jhamann 4 years ago from Reno NV

Did it make the narrator look back on the journey and realize all that he/she learned on the way. Jamie


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ahorseback 4 years ago

Hi Wayne , great write and an impossible topic . Sometimes I think [for me ] that with age comes a more relaxed outlook on relationships ! The pressures of youth and the anxieties of young love no longer dictate my life ! I hope for you the mountain is a shared place!......Ed


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drbj 4 years ago from south Florida

May you and your love always be atop the mountain, Wayne ... together! Beautiful poetry, my friend


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KDee411 4 years ago from Bay Area, California

I don't see you ever being alone. Beautiful poem

Kay


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Wayne Brown 4 years ago from Texas Author

@ann davis...Yes, that is true...but if one's heart lingers far below, maybe the they can only look down. Thanks much! WB

@poet 83...Thanks so much! WB

@jhamann...I wrote t purposely from that perspective...maybe we should not be so quick to climb mountains in the name of love...maybe we need to understand the reasons a bit more. Thanks for some great insight! WB

@ahorseback...I have been there but not today. I have wanted and did try to climb that mountain in my past...that is why I can write the verse. Thanks much. WB

@drbj...I live on the top of the mountain now, Doc and my love lives with me. I wrote this poem on the basis of my past...I could not write it on my happiness of the present. WB

@KDee411...I am very blessed with the love of an extremely beautiful woman. I pull my ability to write this from my past and from my empathy with those who do climb to great heights in the name of love only to find themselves alone. I am so grateful to have that emotion. WB


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Terri Meredith 4 years ago from Pennsylvania

I rarely read poetry here, but I was attracted to the picture and just had to see what you had to say. Truly enjoyed it! voted up


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ImKarn23 4 years ago

Sigh..sometimes we unwittingly adopt an 'all or nothing' attitude. congratulations on reaching the top - even though you have lost sight of what motivated you to climb in the first place - or vice versa. When one puts all their energies into one avenue - other avenues close.

I'm sorry for this person. Hopefully he can find a comfortable place somewhere near the middle of the mountain? voting upandbeau...tweeting2


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Wayne Brown 4 years ago from Texas Author

@Terri Meredith...Now that goes to show you that sometimes the picture is as important as the words. So glad you stopped in and enjoyed the poem...I have many more! WB

@ImKarn23...You picked up on exactly my point...sometimes we throw ourselves away trying to catch the eye of others. Most of the time that will happen if we will just be true to ourselves. Thanks much! WB


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breakfastpop 4 years ago

Looking back often makes you deeply appreciate the present and the view from the top. Beautiful poem, Wayne. Voted up.


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Wayne Brown 4 years ago from Texas Author

@breakfastpop...Sometimes, when people reach those lofty heights for whatever reason, they forget why the set out in the first place or the "why" is already gone. Thanks much! WB


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dahoglund 4 years ago from Wisconsin Rapids

I guess we really have to learn to find ourselves.


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Wayne Brown 4 years ago from Texas Author

@dahoglund...We need to know why we do things and what our expectations are when we get there. I am seen people flip out over a simple gift because they didn't a a "thank you" card in return...they had already created the expectation when they bought the gift thus leaving themselves open to disappointed...self=imposed no less. Thanks DA. WB


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SilentReed 4 years ago from Philippines

They say it is very lonely at the top. One might feel the rush of adrenalin and the sense of power. But at what price was success paid for. In the end all is meaningless unless we have someone to share it with. Thank you also for reminding us to stop and smell the flowers.


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Wayne Brown 4 years ago from Texas Author

@SilentReed...Sometimes things are not as they appear from down below...the view from the top is not like we imagined it especially if you climbed up there for all the wrong reasons. Thanks much. WB


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Just Ask Susan 4 years ago from Ontario, Canada

Hoping that you get to stay at the top of that mountain and enjoy the beauty forever. Wonderful poem!


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Wayne Brown 4 years ago from Texas Author

@Just Ask Susan...might as well stay...nothing to go back down for! LOL! Just kidding...not my life story by any means. Thanks much. WB


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JamesPoppell 4 years ago

Great poem Wayne. It has a beautiful flow to it. Trisha Yearwood is one of my favorites and this video & song is perfect for the poetry you wrote. Vote up.


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The Frog Princess 4 years ago from Florence area of the Great Pee Dee of South Carolina

Wayne, you always put life at its best. You are never alone in life with God at your side or should I say look above as he is always above.

We sometimes have to let go and start over with baby steps to stay on top of lives many ventures.

Great meaning for many of us today in your poem. Thanks for sharing.

Donna

Please tell your beautiful wife I said hello.


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Wayne Brown 4 years ago from Texas Author

@JamesPoppell...Thank you. I too like Trisha's songs and styling not to mention the voice. So glad you enjoyed the poem. WB

@The Frog Princess...I will sure tell her "Hi" for you Donna. Thanks for the good words on the poem. I have never had this personal experience but I tried to put myself in a mindset as if I had and it seemed to work. Sometimes we are too willing to do for others what we won't do for ourselves. WB


kimberlyslyrics 4 years ago

WOW Wayne, repeat WOW Wayne

I can see you and hear you and vision exactly what beautiful words you have shared with us

Thank you so much

Voted way Up!!!!!!!!!!!!!


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Wayne Brown 4 years ago from Texas Author

@kimberlylyrics...Thank you. I was not sure where this one was going at the start. At first I thought romantic but then it turned pitiful. Glad you liked it. WB


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon

great work, Wayne. Interesting perspective


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Wayne Brown 4 years ago from Texas Author

@PDXKaraokeGuy...Thanks so much. I really appreciate the read and the comment. WB


Vincent Moore 4 years ago

A powerfully moving piece, from a powerful scribe. I was moved by your work here Wayne, it brought back some sad events in my mountain climbing days. I reached the top but it was all in vain my friend. Peace and blessings to you.


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Wayne Brown 4 years ago from Texas Author

@Vincent Moore...I started this one out in one direction in my head but it came out in an opposite one on paper. That's the way it goes sometimes when you go with your gut. Thanks much, Ken! WB

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