Donna - A Short Story

Donna


Under the deserted streetlight, dark rivulets of rain cascaded down the windshield, casting shadows on her face that looked like streamers of tears. Maybe they were. He could not be certain, but he also did not care.

Over the static on the radio, Elvis lamented on whether his unknown love missed him tonight. It was still on the charts a year later, and she turned it up as he knew she would. At least it wasn’t ‘Will you still love me tomorrow?’. He despised that song for what it represented to him…manipulation. His unspoken retort was: “Hell, I don’t love you now!”

Lightning flashed silently on the horizon, and the dim streetlight flickered briefly. She lit a cigarette, and handed it to him, lighting another for herself. She dabbed at her eyes dramatically and turned to him, her pretty face almost beautiful in the dim light.

“Why do you treat me like this? Haven’t I been good to you? Haven’t I given myself to you, time and again? Haven’t I done whatever you wanted?”

“Here we go again,” he thought. “Turn on the guilt and ignore the facts!” He chose his words carefully. “It’s not you Donna, or anything you did. It’s me, and I can't be falling in love with a married woman!”

It was a small town, and he had known her for years, but she was just another married woman until two months ago. His cousin Frank had picked up Judy, Donna’s younger sister, at the local café and then they all got in Donna’s car. They parked in the schoolyard parking lot, down by the playground. It was deserted on a Saturday afternoon, and Donna had a case of beer. After half an hour, Frank and Judy were fogging up the windows. After glancing back at all the kissing going on in the back seat, an amused Donna looked at him with a pretty smile. “That looks like fun!”

He grinned back at her and unthinkingly blurted out a response.

“It sure does. Want to try it?”

Seconds later, she was in his arms, her lips urgent and seeking. He threw his usual caution out the window, along with his empty beer can, and his fate was almost sealed. After a few heated moments of frantic kissing, his hand found its way to her ample breast, and she pushed it quickly away.

He pulled away from her, strangely relieved.

“I’m sorry, Donna. For a moment, I forgot that you were a married woman.”

He opened the door and stepped out, closing it behind him. He leaned on the door sill and peered back into the car. In the backseat, Frank and Judy were still pawing at one another, oblivious to the world. He looked at Donna and stammered out an excuse. “I’ll go home now, and I hope you're not mad at me for…well, touching you. I apologize.”

He thought that would be the end of it, until two weeks later. As he walked down a side street, she pulled up beside him and spoke through the open passenger window.

“We need to talk about us.”

“There is no ‘us’ Donna, and I apologized for touching you.”

“That’s what we need to talk about. I’m sorry I pushed you away, but it was only because my sister was in the car. You can do anything you want.”

Sighing, he stepped to the car, and once again, leaned on the door sill, peering in. She was wearing a thin summer dress, and it displayed her curves beautifully. She saw him looking at her, and a faint smile crossed her lips.

“I’m not wearing anything under my dress. I did it just for you. Please get in and we’ll go for a ride. You won’t regret it.”

“Oh yes I will,” he thought as he opened the door, “I’ll probably regret it for the rest of my life.”

After that, he avoided her for a few days, and then his hormones started looking for her again. Each time, he was careful not to let anyone see them together. He was ashamed of himself and desperately did not want to be seen with her. It simply was not done.

Donna, on the other hand, seemed oblivious to the dangers and scandal of their affair. It was almost as if she wanted to be caught and exposed. Almost all of their trysts had occurred in broad daylight. Tonight was an exception. Her husband was out of town.

He was caught in a trap, and he was the trapper. His urges had condemned him to meeting Donna again and again, but this was to be the last time. He had lost weight, and people had remarked that he looked pale and not his usual good color. He must cut it off, and ignore his own urges as well as her threats and pleadings.

Once she had threatened to expose the entire affair when he refused to get in the car. When that didn’t work, she tried tears and wailing. Finally, she threatened to harm herself, and he relented. Now he was determined to end it, no matter what she said or threatened to do.

The rain continued to tap on the roof of her nineteen fifty-five Pontiac as they sat under the dim light of the streetlamp. On the radio, Roy Orbison was running scared, between lightning flashes and heavy static. Donna looked all around at the deserted street, and then placed her hand lightly on his leg. She leaned toward him, and he noticed that she had undone the top two buttons on her blouse. She had given up on guilt and was back to seducing. He sighed and nodded his head.

“One more time, Donna, and then it will have to be over.” She smiled knowingly, sat back up, and started the car.

The gravel road led to the bridge over Whitmore creek, where a farmer’s road passed under the bridge alongside the creek. They had used it many times, and only once had anyone passed over the bridge while they were under it. It used to be the main route to Mayfair, but it was almost abandoned now. It was perfect, because once under the bridge, they were almost invisible.

Donna Braden shut off her car and got in the back seat with Jimmy Devlin. The rain was now coming down hard and in sheets, pouring over both sides of the bridge. She kissed him passionately as his hands flew over her body. “I love you so much, Jimmy,’ she breathed into his ear.

He sat up abruptly. “What’s that?”

She put her arm around his neck and pulled him down to her lips. “It’s just a truck, silly. Don’t be so nervous.”

He pushed her away, alarmed. “That’s no tru…”

The wall of water in the creek bed slammed into the back of the Pontiac, lifting it up on its nose, where the rear bumper hit the bridge’s underpinnings. Jimmy’s head slammed into Donna’s violently and they both lost consciousness instantly. Jimmy flew out the window into the flood as the Pontiac flipped over, crushing the top and sealing Donna inside.

The Pontiac was found the next day in the still swollen but receding waters behind a barn. Donna’s body was discovered inside, and it was surmised that her car had been washed off the destroyed bridge. No other body was found nor sought. She was assumed to be alone.

“I reckon she was just in the wrong place at the wrong time,” the farmer remarked to the deputy. “Can’t figure out why she didn’t just use the paved bypass, though.” He grinned at his wife. “Women drivers!”

Two days later, the same deputy took the missing person’s report at the Devlin’s kitchen table. When the date of disappearance was mentioned, the deputy glanced up and then checked another report. “That’s the same day that Mrs. Braden disappeared. Did Jimmy know her? Could he have been with her?”

Mrs. Devlin shook her head. “Sure Jimmy knew her, but he would not have been with Mrs. Braden, for heaven’s sakes. After all, she’s his teacher and he’s only fourteen.”

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Author's note:

Parts of this story are true. The names, of course, have been changed.


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Nan Mynatt 4 years ago

Excellent turn in the story. Poor teacher she should have known better. I marked you up on this one.


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WillStarr 4 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

Thank you, Nan!


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FitnezzJim 4 years ago from Fredericksburg, Virginia

Well, the things teachers taught back in the day. What a twist.


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writer20 4 years ago from Southern Nevada

You write such great stories. Love this one and the twist is terrific.

Voted up and awesome, Joyce


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Happyboomernurse 4 years ago from South Carolina

Great story. Particularly loved the opening sentence and the details related to songs playing on the radio. Had a great sense of time and place as well as wanton, reckless passion.

Voted up and interesting.


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slcockerham 4 years ago from Tallahassee, Florida

Hey Will, Another great story with an unforeseen twist! Gotta love it!


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Dexter Yarbrough 4 years ago from United States

Another excellent story, Will! Bravo!


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bmcoll3278 4 years ago from Longmont, Colorado

Yet another great one Will.


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Becky Katz 4 years ago from Hereford, AZ

Great story, the boy was trying to do right. Too bad it took his parents two days to report a fourteen year old missing.


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WillStarr 4 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

Hi, FitnezzJim,

It isn't just teachers.


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WillStarr 4 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

Hi Joyce and thank you!


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WillStarr 4 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

Thank you Gail!

It was my youth.


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WillStarr 4 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

Thank you, slcockerham!


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WillStarr 4 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

Thank you, Dex!


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WillStarr 4 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

Thank you, bmcoll3278!


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WillStarr 4 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

Hi Becky Katz!

In that era, police would not take a missing person report for days or even weeks, unless it was a known crime. Most were runaways, and they did not want to waste time and resources.


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Old Poolman 4 years ago from Rural Arizona

Wow, this is a different WillStarr but another great story with the twist. I loved it.

Mike


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Mhatter99 4 years ago from San Francisco

maybe it's me, but there is something compellingly haunting to this.


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Rosemay50 4 years ago from Hawkes Bay - NewZealand

A great story. I have no doubt that teachers like this do exist among the females too, finding it easy to manipulate their students. Sad poor kid.

An excellent story and well written as usual.


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WillStarr 4 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

Hi Mike!

Thought I'd try something new.


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WillStarr 4 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

Hi, Mhatter99, and thank you for the very thoughtful comment!


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WillStarr 4 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

Hi Rosemay50,

In the real story, the older woman was not a teacher, and the boy was sixteen.


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teaches12345 4 years ago

Great story with a surprising finish. Enjoyed the read on this one.


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diogenes 4 years ago from UK and Mexico

Hey, ho, Will. There is so much of this: teachers of both sexes having sex with underaged kids. You took this sordid little story - albeit with the exciting conclusion - and dramatised it well in your indomitable style.


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Pamela99 4 years ago from United States

Entertaining story as always. The twist at the ending seems somewhat fitting when you think of a teacher and a 16 year old.


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always exploring 4 years ago from Southern Illinois

I was glued to my chair as usual. Great story..Of course I thought he was a man until the surprise ending. Loved it.


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shiningirisheyes 4 years ago from Upstate, New York

Excellent!!!! Such a twist at the end! Great writing. Intriguing to the last word. Just excellent!!!

Voting up


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MizBejabbers 4 years ago

What a story, Will. In the real story, did they ever find Jimmy?


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WillStarr 4 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

Thank you, teaches12345!


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WillStarr 4 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

Hi Bob,

True, and it has been going on for a long time. In the real story, the older woman was a homemaker, not a teacher.


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WillStarr 4 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

Hi Pamela99, and thank you.


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WillStarr 4 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

Thank you, Ruby!


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WillStarr 4 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

Wow! Thank you, shiningirisheyes!


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WillStarr 4 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

Hi MizBejabbers!

In the real story, 'Jimmy' wisely got out of it early. 'Jimmy' is still around, and so is 'Donna'.


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Ginn Navarre 4 years ago

Time moves on---but somethings never change?

"Is this her fault or mine?/The tempter or the tempted,who sins most?"---William Shakespeare.

Great as always.


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G-Ma Johnson 4 years ago from NW in the land of the Free

What a change and a very interesting one. Was fun not be a Western,,,you are quite good Will...:O) God Bless...G-Ma


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WillStarr 4 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

Hi ginn,

In cases like this, it's the adult who must be responsible.


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WillStarr 4 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

Thank you, G-Ma Johnson!


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bethperry 4 years ago from Tennesee

Very good story, Will. You set it up like a pro. And I liked that you chose the name "Donna"; that was a very popular song by a young singer who died before his time.


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WillStarr 4 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

Hi bethperry,

I almost titled this, 'Oh, Donna" after that very song by Richie Valens. You came very close to the truth on this one!


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xstatic 4 years ago from Eugene, Oregon

Ripped from the headlines kind of story and great! I did not see that ending coming. I loved the way you incorprated those songs into the narrative too. One of the best!


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Amy Becherer 4 years ago from St. Louis, MO

I started thinking about "The World According to Garp" as I read this, Will, which is still one of my all time favorite movies. I suspected it was a teacher/student encounter when you described the behavior of the younger sister and her beau in the backseat of the car. The last ride left me with a feeling of forboding, especially with the car parked on a dark, nearly abandoned road. Great "can't stop reading now" story with a riveting, realistic, clandestine, sinister vs. innocence appeal.


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Cardisa 4 years ago from Jamaica

OH MY GOD, Will you just shocked the day-ligts outa me! Donna is one nasty sick woman! I have heard of stories where teachers seduce teen age boys before. You told the story so well Will.


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mckbirdbks 4 years ago from Emerald Wells, Just off the crossroads,Texas

Hello Will, no sheriff, no coral, no wolf – I guess though that you do have a cougar in the story.


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ThoughtSandwiches 4 years ago from Reno, Nevada

Will,

You straight got me at the end there. That was unexpected, indeed. I finished and immediately went for the re-read...the hints were cleverly salted throughout. Excellent. Excellent. Annnnd...one more excellent.

"Roy Orbison was running scared between lightning flashes and static" --I really love the imagery of this line.

Thanks,

Thomas


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The Frog Prince 4 years ago from Arlington, TX

Magnificent piece of writing Will.

TFP


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WillStarr 4 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

Hi xstatic, and thank you!


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WillStarr 4 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

You're starting to figure me out, Amy!


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WillStarr 4 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

Hi, Carolee,

Actually, these women are sort of pathetic, stuck in their teen years and unable to have a meaningful adult relationship with a man. That does not excuse it of course.


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WillStarr 4 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

Hey Mike!

Cougars we have!


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WillStarr 4 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

Thank you, Thomas!


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WillStarr 4 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

Thanks, Jim!


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Tusitala Tom 4 years ago from Sydney, Australia

You've definites got the gift, Will. You've always had this talent of telling a yarn as if it were autobiographical. Like the light aircraft crash which introduced me to your writing a while back. Keep writing Will.

Tom.


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Alastar Packer 4 years ago from North Carolina

Some memorable lines and so with this true story as well. Excellent read Will. Back in the wilder days it was observed that the married women cheated more than the men, at least in that town. Found out early on such behavior was detrimental to living a long and happy life.


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WillStarr 4 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

Thank you, Tom! I shared your latest.


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wingedcentaur 4 years ago from That Great Primordial Smash UP of This and That Which Gave Rise To All Beings and All Things!

Well executed, my friend. That was a masterful piece of misdirection there. Here I thought it was one thing: a standard grown-up affair, with a kind of fatal attraction twist.

It looks like I was half right, Donna was imbalanced --- and now, doubly so.

Nice twist, with a little 'poetic justice' thrown in. Jimmy sure dodged a bullet, didn't he? Geez!

Well done, Will Starr!

Take it easy.


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resspenser 4 years ago from South Carolina

A great story teller can tell any kind of story. You just proved it, Bill!


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WillStarr 4 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

Hi Alastar Packer,

Small towns can sometimes be very dangerous places!


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WillStarr 4 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

Hi, wingedcentaur,

Unfortunately, the Jimmy in our story did not survive his encounter with the lovely Donna!


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WillStarr 4 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

Wow! Thank you, Ronnie!


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CMerritt 4 years ago from Pendleton, Indiana

Even though it is NOT your classic WillStarr Western.......it IS STILL a great read, with a classic twist in the end. Just proves that a WillStarr story is ALWAYS a classic and worth every minute it takes to read.

It seems this kind of "romance" happens more times than we realize. Sad!


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WillStarr 4 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

Thank you, Chris.


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MartieCoetser 4 years ago from South Africa

My goodness, what a shocking end! As always, Will, this story, too, was a pleasure to read. I love your descriptions, such as -

“… fogging up the windows.”

“….and then his hormones started looking for her again.”

Voting up and engrossing :)


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WillStarr 4 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

Thank you, Martie!


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drbj 4 years ago from south Florida

Just as a really good joke has the zinger in the last word in the punchline, so this story has the zinger in the last word you wrote. Fantastic, Will. Loved it. Voted Up. :)


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AudreyHowitt 4 years ago from California

Another great story! They just seem to flow out of you!


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Jackie Lynnley 4 years ago from The Beautiful South

Great twist. Thoroughly enjoyed. Still laughing at the just one more time though.


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WillStarr 4 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

Thank you, drbj!


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WillStarr 4 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

Thank you, Audrey!


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WillStarr 4 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

Thank you, Jackie Lynnley, and thank you too for the follow!


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mcgreg28 4 years ago from Florida, USA

This is actually a delight to read


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WillStarr 4 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

Thank you, mcgreg28!


Beachlife 4 years ago

what a great story!


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WillStarr 4 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

Thank you, Beachlife!


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suziecat7 4 years ago from Asheville, NC

You surprised me again. Really enjoyed it and would never have guessed Jimmy was only 14. Voted up and shared!


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carozy 4 years ago from San Francisco

Your story sucked me in. Good writing! Voted up.


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Laura in Denver 4 years ago from Aurora

Nice story, Thx!


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RodniGalloway 4 years ago from Summerville, SC

wow! great story.


JThomp42 4 years ago

Wow!! Very good read!! Shocking ending.


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WillStarr 4 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

Hi Suziecat! Happy to deceive you!


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WillStarr 4 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

Thank y0u carozy, Laura in Denver, RodniGalloway, and JThomp42!


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WillStarr 4 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

Thank you, naimishika!


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JBoozer 4 years ago

Wow, that had a good O. Henry twist on it. I liked this story. It's excellent. Voted up.


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donabhatt 4 years ago from Hyderabad

Great story.....the ending was so unexpected!!


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sarahmoose 4 years ago from Nottingham, England

Wonderful story, I wasn't expecting the twist at the end!!


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WillStarr 4 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

Thank you, JBoozer!


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WillStarr 4 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

Thanks for reading, donabhatt!


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WillStarr 4 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

Hi, sarahmoose, and thank you. Great avatar!


Dusty 50 4 years ago

Will, great story and another twist to the ending. I don't reckon at 14 it would have taken a couple teachers I had that were knock outs to seduce me LOL. I understand the view of it's perverseness but I suppose the demand of repeats might have got me to view it different.

voted up,

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WillStarr 4 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

Hey Dusty!

The male teen ‘victims’ in these affairs are almost never ‘in love’ with the older woman, although she is almost always ‘in love‘ with them. The boys are simply in it for the sex, and their main worry is getting caught, both out of fear of a husband, fear of their parents, and sometimes, fear of ridicule from their peers if the women is less than attractive.

The females in these cases, whether they are the molester or the molested, are almost always in it for the relationship first, and the sex is secondary to that all-important relationship. Learning that they were simply being used as sex objects is devastating, and I think that’s why society and the law deal with adult male molesters far more harshly than female molesters, and justly so. Manipulative male molesters of gullible teenage girls really anger other adult males, while female molesters of horny teen boys are treated with winks and high-fives.


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Movie Master 4 years ago from United Kingdom

Fantastic twist to the story Will, loved it thank you and voted up.


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WillStarr 4 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

Thank you, Movie Master!


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marcoujor 4 years ago from Jeffersonville PA

Donna's daliance was her downfall...yet this was a big UP & ABI.


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WillStarr 4 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

Hi Maria,

We have to wonder about those who would risk it all for a moment's pleasure.


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Ana Louis 4 years ago from Louisiana

Great story and I was totally surprised in the end. I love it when that happens. I am sorry that Jimmy did not survive. He paid a terrible price for something that was doomed from the beginning.


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WillStarr 4 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

Thank you, Ana.

In the true story that inspired this, Jimmy did survive. So too, did Donna.


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Ana Louis 4 years ago from Louisiana

Thank you for the good news. I love the story and I am now a fan.


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WillStarr 4 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

Thank you again, Ana!


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thougtforce 4 years ago from Sweden

I love the way you describe the surroundings and the time in this story! I was captured right from the beginning and until the end. It is a sad story though, and I had to read the end twice because I didn't want it to end that way:) This story is brilliant, as always Will!


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WillStarr 4 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

Thank you, Tina!

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