On Burnham Beach, On The Tide She Comes

The Challenge

I wrote this poem in response to a writing challenge set by Ann aka, annart.hubpages.com.

Ann has kindly allowed us the use of an image of her painting, ' Burnham Beach,' Hubpages writers were challenged to create a story/poem that captures the artist work in words.

For the purpose of this challenge only, the writers are permitted to use the photo with appropriate attribution.

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Wish you Were Here

Grey Stratus blanket roofed the sky

Like wings of angels passing by

The celestial beam lit the way

Beyond the waves where Mary lay


She comes each day to catch the tide

That trapped and snared her joy and pride

At water's edge he used to play

On Burnham beach in ocean spray


The stock dove roar from Western knoll

As Mary stalks another soul

Dead Icy hands caress small feet

And one more tragedy repeat


The mighty surge began to rise

As fear and panic polarize

She Lures with gifts of pearly shells

Enticing kids with tricks and spells


Awaken from her miry grave

A hunter waits beyond the wave

A human child the spirit crave

The one she lost and could not save


'twas on this day one year ago

A pain no mother should endure

When folly reap the tidal wrath

She took a dark and endless path


From Burnham beach to ocean wide

Horrified, how the people cried~

They say she's drifttng with the tides

Beneath the salty brine she hides

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annart 16 months ago from SW England

Oh, what a worry! Good to hear they're doing well.

Thanks; she's a gorgeous baby and full of smiles, just like her two sisters!

Ann


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tobusiness 16 months ago from Bedfordshire, U.K Author

Ann, I hope you know that this really means a lot.

My brother and my little baby nephew were both in intensive care with a particular virulent pneumonia. Thankfully, they're both doing well.

Congrats on the latest addition to your family. It's amazing how fast they grow, just enjoy every moment.

Best wishes always.

Jo.


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annart 16 months ago from SW England

Sorry to hear you have illness in the family; I hope things are improving. Thanks for taking the time to reply.

I loved this poem of yours from the start. It's amazing how all the challenges on hubpages bring forth such different interpretations; I guess that's the individuality of us all which makes our brains and emotions react in different ways - amazing!

We're fine thank you, I'm pleased to say. The latest grandchild is growing apace!

All the best to you and yours, Jo.

Ann


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tobusiness 16 months ago from Bedfordshire, U.K Author

Ann, nice to see you. It's good to know that the poem continues to grow on you.:)

The ocean can be peaceful and calming, but there is also a certain ambivalence. It can be beguiling, awe-inspiring and pretty scary. You're right of course, who knows what is really going on beneath the dark blue waves. Thanks for the challenge, it was fun. I'm really glad I accepted and participated. Actually, I wrote a short story based on your painting which I did not post on HP. However, I've been doing some work on it recently and may one day publish it as a novella or in a book of short stories. I'm not able to do much on HP at the moment. Between work, family illness and the rest, time just seems to fly, so I'm applying the brakes for now. I hope you and your family are all well and having a fab summer. Take care and my best always.


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annart 16 months ago from SW England

Have just re-read this, as it crops up now and then which is good. The more I read it, the better it gets. You've captured so well the threat of a despairing spirit in the water. It's chilling. You never know what's hidden in the murky depths of the sea!

I have much catching up on hubs to do. So busy, as all of us are of course. Hope all's well with you, Jo.

Ann


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tobusiness 16 months ago from Bedfordshire, U.K Author

Hi Nell, glad you like the poem. It was written around Halloween so I guess that had some influence. However, It was a great challenge and fun to do. I hope you're enjoying the summer and not working too hard. Take care, my best always.


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Nell Rose 16 months ago from England

Ooh creepy stuff! just the sort of poem I love! dark and scary! loved it! voted up and shared, nell


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tobusiness 2 years ago from Bedfordshire, U.K Author

Genna, lovely to see you! I hope all is well. So glad you enjoyed the poem, I think the inspiration for this one came from reading your halloween poem, so thank you, great to have back, my best always..


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Genna East 2 years ago from Massachusetts, USA

Beautiful pacing and brilliant imagery highlight this poem, Jo! Simply awesome.


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tobusiness 2 years ago from Bedfordshire, U.K Author

LadyFiddler, wow...I may just print this comment and frame it. :)

Thank you for taking a look at this, it was a great challenge, I really enjoyed it.

Take care, my best to you.


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LadyFiddler 2 years ago from Somewhere in the West

This was AWESOME, SPLENDID , MAGNIFICENT AND WONDERFUL. I seriously wished i could have pushed beautiful about ten times, I love every line of it. You did a fantastic job that illustrated the painting so well.

Way to go Alexis :)

Keep up the fantastic work, have a pleasant day.


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tobusiness 2 years ago from Bedfordshire, U.K Author

Hi Kim, good to see you. Yes, the challenge was fun to do. Unfortunately, as hard as I try I can't seem to resist them, which doesn't leave much time for anything else. Thank you for taking a look at the poem and also for the wonderfully supportive comment and vote, it means a lot. Take care and my very best always.


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ocfireflies 2 years ago from North Carolina

Jo,

I must be behind in the challenges for I am seeing this one for the first time, and how wonderfully you responded. You are a gifted writer in every way. Your poem captures the sorrow and does so with majesty and grace. voted awesome/shared

Kim


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tobusiness 2 years ago from Bedfordshire, U.K Author

Hi Suzette, I'm please to know that you enjoyed the poem.

The painting is inspirational, our Ann is most certainly a multifaceted women.

Always a pleasure to see you, thanks for the visit and great comment, much appreciated. Best wishes always.


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suzettenaples 2 years ago from Taos, NM

Jo: Absolutely a wonderful and enchanting poem. I love this poem! You really caught the essence of this challenge. It is so sad and I like the rhyme and rhythm of this poem. Great insight to a sad situation. I so enjoyed reading this. Isn't Ann's painting wonderful?


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tobusiness 2 years ago from Bedfordshire, U.K Author

Devika, thank you for stopping by and for the kind comment, it's always good to see you. I'm so glad you like the poem. Hope you're having a lovely day, take care and my best to you.


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tobusiness 2 years ago from Bedfordshire, U.K Author

Hi Graham, it's great to see you. Hope I didn't ruin your sleep. Thank you so much for the visit and wonderful comment, much appreciated. Have a lovely day, my best to you.


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tobusiness 2 years ago from Bedfordshire, U.K Author

Hi travmaj, very nice to see you. I'm so please to know that you enjoyed the poem. I can see that you also have a darker side. ;) Thank you for the visit and brilliant comment, much appreciated. My best to you.


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DDE 2 years ago from Dubrovnik, Croatia

Incredible! I like the photos and you have such unique expressions. You certainly got my attention.


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old albion 2 years ago from Lancashire. England.

Hi Jo. Tip Top. I read your hub at 4.30am.. I looked over my shoulder twice! Well done.

voted up and all.

Graham.


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travmaj 2 years ago from australia

Totally engrossed in this poem and admire the way you interpreted the painting and challenge.


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tobusiness 2 years ago from Bedfordshire, U.K Author

MsDora, I do appreciate the support and it's good to know that you enjoyed the poem.

Take care and my best always.


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MsDora 2 years ago from The Caribbean

Beautiful poetry, and unique, sound interpretation of the photograph. Good job!


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tobusiness 2 years ago from Bedfordshire, U.K Author

Harishprasad, thanks for the visit and the great comment. I'll be over to take a look at your submission. Have a wonderful day, my best to you.


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tobusiness 2 years ago from Bedfordshire, U.K Author

John, coming from you, this means a lot! Thank you for the visit, vote and wonderful comment. I guess the time of the year can also influence how we look at certain things. Have a lovely day, my best to you.


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tobusiness 2 years ago from Bedfordshire, U.K Author

Ann, not at all. But it's only natural that you would have a some what different perspective on this beautiful and affecting piece. I found the response to the painting very interesting, I'd like to see more of your work, if possible.


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Harishprasad 2 years ago from India

Jo, can there be more thrilling, exciting and thundering thing like this wordy storm ? A very imaginative and vibrating poem though imbued with stark sadness. Loved this fantastic poem, a great response indeed. Photos are also well-matched. Voted up and shared.


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Jodah 2 years ago from Queensland Australia

This is an amazing response to Ann's challenge Jo. If I had written a poem for the challenge I could only hope that it turned out something like this. This is brilliant. What a great idea combining it with an eerie Halloween theme....voted up everywhere bar funny.


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annart 2 years ago from SW England

Jo, I hope you don't think I was in any way criticising about the spookiness. Your take on this is wonderful. It was just that the majority of all the responses has been on the sad side! Yours is, of course, relevant to Hallowe'en too.

I'd love you to do a light-hearted take as well. There's no limit to anyone's contributions!

Thanks for doing this and for doing it so well.

Have a great week!

Ann


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tobusiness 2 years ago from Bedfordshire, U.K Author

Good morning Flourish, I'm so glad you like the poem.

Ann's painting have motivated a great response for this challenge. Each one different, all interesting to read.

Thank you for stopping by an for the brilliant comment, much appreciated. I hope you're having a great day, my best to you.


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tobusiness 2 years ago from Bedfordshire, U.K Author

Hi R.Q., you're the perfect gent. I appreciate the visit and comment and thanks for adding this to your page, very kind of you.

Let's face it, anything that can generate some more traffic is most welcome.

Take care and my best to you.


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tobusiness 2 years ago from Bedfordshire, U.K Author

Good morning Jackie, thank you for taking a look and for the great comment.

Ann's painting have inspired some excellent writing. The more I look at it, the more I see.

I love the ocean in all its moods, It draws us in, but it also have the power to scare the hell out of us. Yes...

I think the Pinterest image gives another dimension to the poem. Have a lovely day, my best always.


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FlourishAnyway 2 years ago from USA

Wow, this is superb. Who knew that you could garner such raw emotion and storytelling from a single image? I will have to backtrack and catch the other hubs.


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Romeos Quill 2 years ago from Lincolnshire, England

A vengeful sea spirit lying in wait for an unsuspecting victim? A macabre one here Jo but you've written a fine poem and happy to link yours to my challenge response and send some more traffic your way.

Best Wishes;

R.Q.


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Jackie Lynnley 2 years ago from The Beautiful South

Just love it Jo and the pinterest photo...I can see why you chose that; like an elongated or continued picture of Anns! Great eye...great poet. ^+


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tobusiness 2 years ago from Bedfordshire, U.K Author

Hi Whonu, so lovely to see you! Thanks for taking a look, I'm glad you enjoy reading the poem. Take care now, my best to you.


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tobusiness 2 years ago from Bedfordshire, U.K Author

Ann, I think the darkness and spookiness have more to do with a deep innate ambivalence toward the ocean and also the time of the year. Yes, I found the mood of the painting , as you've said, peaceful and contemplative on the surface, but I can't help but wonder what's really going on down below. :) I love how the light breaks through the clouds with child gazing pensively into the horizon, simply beautiful.

Your work is indeed inspirational. How I envy your talent!

I must admit, I was tempted to write two poems, one light and the other dark, now I wish I had, maybe I still can.

Thanks for taking a look, much appreciated. This was an interesting and enjoyable exercise, great response so far. Take care and my best to you.


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whonunuwho 2 years ago from United States

Such a tragedy and your accounting is well done my friend. whonu


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annart 2 years ago from SW England

Well, Jo, you've produced a fine piece here! Spooky!

I'm amazed at the sadness and spookiness that this image has awoken; I've always seen it as peaceful and contemplative. Of course, I know the origins of the image so that makes me biased!

This is wonderfully written and grabs us from the start.

Sorry it took me a while to get to you but I've been away. Putting your link on my hub now.

Enjoy your week, Jo!

Ann


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tobusiness 2 years ago from Bedfordshire, U.K Author

Ruby, very much appreciated. Thank you for the visit, comment and the share. I'm so glad you enjoyed my contribution, it was fun doing. My best as always.


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tobusiness 2 years ago from Bedfordshire, U.K Author

Faith, it will be worth the wait. Looking forward to reading your contribution.

Thanks again for the wonderful comment, visit and votes.


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tobusiness 2 years ago from Bedfordshire, U.K Author

Bill, you and the others have set the bar pretty high. So glad you enjoyed the poem.

My best to you always.


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always exploring 2 years ago from Southern Illinois

Jo, this is wonderful. You met this challenge full-speed-ahead! I loved it. Sharing all over...


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Faith Reaper 2 years ago from southern USA

Bless you, Jo, I have not contributed one yet : ) Hugs and peace

I am just now catching up to those I have missed myself, as there are so many to read, which is awesome!


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tobusiness 2 years ago from Bedfordshire, U.K Author

Hi Faith, you're far too generous, but I love you for all that. ;)

Thank you for the reminder. I don't know how I forgot Romeo's, his was the only automatic link that kept popping up when I linked the others, the rest I took from Ann's page. I'm so glad you like the poem. Take care and my best to you.


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tobusiness 2 years ago from Bedfordshire, U.K Author

Thank you Jamie, I hope Ann won't be disappointed to find that I've turned her day at the beach into a nightmare. :)

All is well this side of the pond. My best to you all.

PS.. Faith have just reminded me that I've missed some of the submissions, including yours. I'll try to add what I can find, but my PC is running pretty slow at the moment.


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tobusiness 2 years ago from Bedfordshire, U.K Author

Thanks Frank, much appreciated, so glad you enjoyed it. See, I do have a dark side.

My best...


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billybuc 2 years ago from Olympia, WA

I was hooked by the first stanza even before I knew it was a fright poem. Well done, Jo, and fine addition to Ann's challenge. I am in very good company for sure, but then I already knew that. :)

blessings on this rainy day

bill


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Faith Reaper 2 years ago from southern USA

Jo, this is writing at its finest! Your poem is poignant and dramatic. You certainly have written a poem to capture in words Ann's painting. Challenge met and then some!

Voted up +++ tweeting, pinning, G+ and sharing

PS ... Jamie and Romeos Quill have also participated in Ann's challenge with excellent poetry as well.

Blessings


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jhamann 2 years ago from Reno NV

Great poem Jo! I think this meets the challenge head on. Also it is very fitting for Halloween. I hope you are well. Jamie


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Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

wow, jo this was simply amazing.. voted awesome.. and shared

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