Detective Owns His Crime Scene

A detective owns his crime scene,

and that he knew,

you do what you do,

without better pay

and without more authority,

it’s just another day,

that’s what a tough city would demand,

and you just follow

the chain of command,

knowing that duty will call,

when a body happens to fall,

on that small parcel of land,

they call a crime scene,

the place to make a stand,

a detective gets one chance,

everything goes against the grain,

looking for evidence all over the ground,

emotions drain,

then the yellow plastic

police-line-do-not-cross

stripes come down,

you almost feel that loss,

and it strains,

the fire department turns a hose

on the blood-stains,

the crime would stall,

and the lab techs move on

to the next call,

what’s left is a sense of defeat,

as the neighborhood reclaims

that little part of the street.

© 2012 Frank Atanacio

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carolinemd21 4 years ago from Close to Heaven

This is really great Frank. Love the wording. Very clever.


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

aaaww thank you Caroline :)


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mljdgulley354 4 years ago

You have a way of bringing the reader to the spot you are sharing in your writing. Thank you for sharing this great image.


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Alastar Packer 4 years ago from North Carolina

Bet many homicide detectives would sure appreciate and relate to this one. very good Frank. Vote er up.


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Sky9106 4 years ago from A beautiful place on earth.

Just what your title claims and you delivered to the T. A great piece brethren Frank , great to catch such an awesome delivery as I understand ,score it excellent and return it to you .

Give thanks and keep up the great work. I always vote, since I asked about it.

But voting is private for me. So I learned it. Bless.

Give thanks.


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thank you mlj for stopping by and thank you Alastar for your comment.. Epi Ill check out your invitaion and it will be an honor to do so and sky you are always on top bless you bro...:)


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JamesPoppell 4 years ago

This is excellent Frank. Love the wording and the natural flow to it. You have a natural gift for capturing the moment. Vote up.


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thank you James Poppell


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Express10 4 years ago from East Coast

The way you express yourself is always clear and vivid. You have effortlessly written another great hub.


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thanks so much express10


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writer20 4 years ago from Southern Nevada

Hi Frank, I can see these poems turn into a book. Great work, love it. Voted up and interesting, Joyce.


Sueswan 4 years ago

Hi Frank

"a detective gets one chance,

everything goes against the grain,

looking for evidence all over the ground,

emotions drain,"

Very clever and well done.

Voted up and awesome.


Phoebe Pike 4 years ago

You are so clever with your words! Perfection yet again.


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Rosemay50 4 years ago from Hawkes Bay - NewZealand

And the street returns to normal, but there is a little bit of each homecide left inside the detective. His crime scene, his defeat.

A great write as usual Frank. Your poetry fascinates me.

Voting up


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thank you so much writer20, and thank you Sueswan, and Phoebe, who writes too damn well, LOL and im not forgetting you Rosemary 50 nor the baby nor the dog bless you all :)


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reikieffect 4 years ago

Frank you have an insightful way of putting scenes and emotions into words. Loved it!


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thanks again for the visit reik :0 Frank


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grinnin1 4 years ago from st louis,mo

Really well done. Love the emotions you evoke with few words. Great hub, and excellent writing as usual!


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Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton Author

thanks for stopping by grinn :) Frank


Johne255 2 years ago

I loved your post.Much thanks again. adcbefgeddee


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Frank Atanacio 16 months ago from Shelton Author

Thank you? Johns?


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MsDora 16 months ago from The Caribbean

"Just another day" in too many neighborhoods and for too many officers. Even those of us on the outside feel that "sense of defeat." We're all affected.


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The Examiner-1 16 months ago

Hmm...interesting Frank, but true. I read it from beginning to end though it is happening day to day and we do not pay attention to it. I shared and pinned it.

Kevin


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Frank Atanacio 16 months ago from Shelton Author

thank you so much MsDora :)


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Frank Atanacio 16 months ago from Shelton Author

thank you too examiner for reading my crimes


Lee Cloak 16 months ago

An intense situation expressed in a piece of really wonderful poetry, very well done my friend, great to read, voted up, Lee


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Frank Atanacio 16 months ago from Shelton Author

thank you lee cloak


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CrisSp 16 months ago from Sky Is The Limit Adventure

Crime scene in brief. Fascinating subject for poetry.

Thumbs up here!


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Frank Atanacio 16 months ago from Shelton Author

thank you CriSp :)

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