Peace of Mind--A Senryu

I am short of peace,

So precious and endearing.

Stillness, where are you?

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My Mind runs to Flint,

While body is in Long Beach.

Concern building up.

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Blood pressure mounting,

Fingers sweating and Feet tapping,

Waiting for news of being.

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Life devoid of you,

Will be empty and barren.

How will I exist?

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Battling a conflict,

In my mind of pros and cons.

Have to combat it.

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Peace is sought after,

But, Peace has gone everyplace,

Except in my mind.

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AudreyHowitt 4 years ago from California

Nice set of haiku about a difficult topic--actually, I think technically--if the haiku touch human concerns they are senryu--but I am not sure about that-well enough rambling on my part


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Ruchira 4 years ago from United States Author

Audrey,

You are correct! Thank you so much for correcting my flaw. I truly appreciate it, my friend.

Thank you for the read and correction :)


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Vinaya Ghimire 4 years ago from Nepal

Beautiful collections. I particularly loved this one.

Life devoid of you,

Will be empty and barren.

How will I exist?


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Cyndi10 4 years ago from Georgia

I liked these, especially "waiting for news of being." Voted up.


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AudreyHowitt 4 years ago from California

Actually, I feel embarrassed, your title does say Senryu---my bad!


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Capedium 4 years ago from Texas.

This is a very beautiful and captivating poem.. I love it..

Voted up and awesome.. Every words and lines fits just perfectly fine.


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Deborah Brooks 4 years ago from Brownsville,TX

Great and wonderfully beautifully set of poems... You do Haiku so well.. I voted way up

Debbie


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writer20 4 years ago from Southern Nevada

Love your Haiku poems, voted up beautiful and awesome, Joyce


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Ruchira 4 years ago from United States Author

Thank you Vinaya...I am pleased that you like it :)

Thank you Cyandl10...A pleasure to meet you :)


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Ruchira 4 years ago from United States Author

Hi Audrey,

Actually, my friend I changed it after you helped correcting me :)

Thank you!! Appreciate it!


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Ruchira 4 years ago from United States Author

Thank you Capedium...Welcome! Pleasure to see you :)

Hi Debbi,

feels so good to hear this admiration coming from a prolific writer like you...thank you!!

Hi Joyce,

I am pleased to read that you liked the above...thank you!!

Your poems help me draw inspiration :)


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shimmering Dawn 4 years ago

Audrey is right about haiku and senryu. But, who cares, a small technicality, but your poem expresses the feeling rather starkly. Well written! Wish you much peace.Shalom!


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makusr 4 years ago from India

Ruchira first haiku, now senryu. You seem to be specializing on things Japanese. Short was never so perfect until Ruchira touched it. I think senryu is a haiku based on human nature or things comical or satirical unlike haiku which is syllable perfect and deals with nature. But tell me Ruchira is man not part of nature. If we tell things of humans are we not dealing with nature.

Always in awe of your talent and endearing presence.

...Manoj


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Ruchira 4 years ago from United States Author

Hi Shimmering Dawn,

Sure, it does not matter but I wanted to play by the rules of the book of literature & thanks to Audrey, I could correct it.

I am glad that you felt the feeling of extreme want of tranquility in this poem.

thanks for stopping by and good to see you! I will be checking out your hubs, shortly.


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Ruchira 4 years ago from United States Author

Hello Manoj,

Yes, I agree our sentiments are a part of nature but, I am going by the book of rules, my friend. You have defined the above clearly.

Thank you once again for your priceless comments...motivates a writer :)


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always exploring 4 years ago from Southern Illinois

Ruchira, I loved your poetry..You brought it all together perfectly..Haiku..Senryu..I'm counting syllables when i wake up.. Lol..Cheers


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raciniwa 4 years ago from Naga City, Cebu

yeah, i agree with you always exploring...whether haiku or senryu if the goal is to touch the human soul...it doesn't matter for me...God doesn't see our foibles but as children of God...


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cat on a soapbox 4 years ago from Los Angeles

thoroughly enjoyable - you've expressed so well what we all have felt at one time or another.


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Just Ask Susan 4 years ago from Ontario, Canada

I really like this one. It reminds of when I lived in California and my heart was way back in Canada. Wonderfully done piece!


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Ruchira 4 years ago from United States Author

Thank you Ruby. I am glad I will keep you busy with the counting of my syllables :)

Thanks Racin, Always a pleasure to hear from you and get your input. Glad you liked the above :)

Thanks catonasoapbox. A pleasure to see you & you an interesting profile name :)

Thanks Susan. Always a pleasure to hear a word of praise from a prolific writer like you. Wishing you joy and peace. btw, hope your foot is doing fine? take care!


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Movie Master 4 years ago from United Kingdom

Absolutely loved these poems Ruchira and voting up.

Thank you, best wishes Lesley


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Ruchira 4 years ago from United States Author

Thank you Lesley.

Always a pleasure to hear from you and your wonderful uplifting comments.


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Lady_E 4 years ago from London, UK

Lovely poem - I hope peace returns. It's one of the things money can't buy.

I love your Haiku's.


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Ruchira 4 years ago from United States Author

Well said indeed, LAdy_E.

Peace can only be attained but not bought.

A pleasure to see you and thanks for stopping by!


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vocalcoach 4 years ago from Nashville Tn.

This is so stunning! Ruchira you are so very gifted. I am in awe of you. I would love to write poetry like this. Voted up and thank you dearly!


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Ruchira 4 years ago from United States Author

Hi Vocalcoach,

Such a wonderful compliment coming from a prolific writer like yourself...I am in AWE now :)

You are such a talented musician and your hubs have taught me a lot..

Thank you for such kind words and thanks for stopping by to appreciate it.

Wishing you peace & light!


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nityanandagaurang 4 years ago

very beautiful poem ruchira.Every word of it is so clear,calling its meaning.Voting it up.


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Ruchira 4 years ago from United States Author

Thank you nityaanandagaurang!

Wishing you peace!


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Ruchi Urvashi 4 years ago from Singapore

Nice poetry, enjoyed reading every word. In past, I used to struggle to be peaceful and happy. Finally, I found it. Mind can be peaceful by listening to spiritual wisdom.


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Ruchira 4 years ago from United States Author

Hi Ruchi,

I am glad you found it :)

Wishing you peace n joy, my friend!

Thanks for stopping by to appreciate it. Meant a lot.


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billybuc 4 years ago from Olympia, WA

I simply could not do this; I love your work and look forward to more of your writings.


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Ruchira 4 years ago from United States Author

Thanks Bill :) Appreciate your kind words!


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alocsin 4 years ago from Orange County, CA

Voting this Up and Beautiful. So is a senryu a different type of haiku or different style of poetry altogether?


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Ruchira 4 years ago from United States Author

Thank you alocsin. Senryu n haiku have the same style but senryu is to do with The subject of human nature. Thus, the above!


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tammyswallow 4 years ago from North Carolina

Wonderful form for poetry. Reminds me of my own thoughts when I have a hundred things to do in a day and I don't know where to start. Excellent!


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rajan jolly 4 years ago from From Mumbai, presently in Jalandhar,INDIA.

Ruchira wonderful Senryus. These thoughts are universal I presume but expressed so beautifully by you.

Glad to know the difference between a haiku and senryu.

Voted up, awesome and beautiful.


IntegrityYes 4 years ago

OOH, Ruchira! HEH-HEH! I voted up for sure.


shiva 3 years ago

good ones ... I so much want to try haiku..but still not completely getting the hang of it...


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swalia 9 months ago

Beautiful lines!

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