Poem - The Braided Mind

Poem - The Braided Mind

The Intellectual
The Emotional
The Spiritual
The braided mind
This is how we live
Upon a three-legged table
So seemingly fragile
Is it any wonder we are so unstable?
Cold hard logic
Stripped of all feeling
Always the scientific
Is it the only thing worth believing?
A pure heart
Always crying
Life is too much
Why is everyone dying?
Inside the spirit moves
A mysterious craving
What is the truth?
Are we worth saving?
Each needs the other
Emotional control
Intellectual feeling
A spiritual whole
A blend of humanity
Eternal bleakness
Seeing but not knowing
Suffering in darkness
The shadow upon us feels no pain
Eclipsing what once was light
A random image that devours
Removing colors from our sight
A purely selfish being
Uncaring in its oblivion
Empathy does not exist
Only self-preservation
How can we live as mortals?
Enslaved by our limitations
We turn from the answer
And indulge our passions
Stripped apart the braid will die
Together they come alive
The community feels the pulse
The individual will not survive
The braid
The island
Mankind
Have we been pardoned?
We cannot live alone
God, Me, You
The braid
Crack the shell
Do not be afraid...

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miss_jkim 6 years ago

This was very good. You "braided" the visual, sensual and emotional all together and the outcome was amazing.

Nicely done.


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The Suburban Poet 6 years ago from Austin, Texas Author

Thank you.... it seems many of us are strong in one area and weak in others... we need the braid... like a rope it is strong when intertwined... an over-emphasis on one to the detriment of the others will cause pain.... we need to understand how we work on the inside.


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Micky Dee 6 years ago

There's a lot of "turning from the answer and indulging our passions". Thank you Sir!


Marina Lester 6 years ago

This is very good, "the shadow upon us feels no pain". But I couldn't help but notice I used the 'braided' idea in a recent poem, I didn't steal it :P You do great work, I'm glad the writing bug found you.


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The Suburban Poet 6 years ago from Austin, Texas Author

Marina,

Thank you.... it came to me a while back. I see how people at work get by on intellect but fail due to emotional immaturity issues... then you add in the spiritual and it hit me: a braid.

Don't worry... I'm sure someone used "braided" before me but if you get discovered and become a rich young poet then you have to at least buy me a bottle of wine and mention my name on tv or something....


Marina Lester 6 years ago

Your poem really is wonderful and I'm 100% with you on emotional immaturity issues, emotions I think take a lot of strength sometimes to confront which is why many are left under developed. I am young and continue to tread my emotional self, I hope one day to have the depth in some thoughts as you.

My braid idea came to me in writing, the intellect and emotion of the writer plus the readers them self all come together in a braid called a poem.

Keep writing as I know you will, and I will keep reading! :) excellent work, thought provoking.


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The Suburban Poet 6 years ago from Austin, Texas Author

Marina,

Thank you again... we learn how to do things in school. We are not taught how to grow emotionally and in fact many are held back or damaged by their parents. That is why counseling is so vital for many people because that is what I would call "emotional school." I wrote a piece called "It's Not Your Fault" that's on here (it's not a poem) dealing with abuse (mental) from a parent. Once people begin their careers they are expected to handle anything with aplomb and it's no wonder many flounder. You have to understand that your mind is complex and you should spend time thinking about life and situations and develop empathy for others and for events (having a vision). It's not so easy to explain in this small comment box.

As for the poem it seems the braid (or rope if you will) is strongest when all three parts are wrapped around one another. Of course I've not given a separate braid to the sensual (sexual) but possibly it could be considered in the emotional braid.

And I'm quite sure you already have the "...depth in some thoughts..." You just have to listen to people and see how it makes you feel and then do your research if need be and it will happen. I didn't think as I do now for so long because all I wanted to do was party....


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pennyofheaven 5 years ago from New Zealand

What an awesome poem! The braid is indeed they way to go!


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The Suburban Poet 5 years ago from Austin, Texas Author

Thank you penny! I thought this poem was back in the drawer so to speak but I'm glad you commented. I really like this one myself...


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Playdivadi 5 years ago from Cincinnati

I loved it... AWESOME


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The Suburban Poet 5 years ago from Austin, Texas Author

@Playdivadi - thank you again for the kind comments!


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Nellieanna 5 years ago from TEXAS

Very good poem- gets my votes, though I have further thoughts on the premise.

Certainly we are inner-connected in all our parts, but perhaps it can be in even more than in a braid. Parts or strands in a braid are closely aligned but still separate. My feeling is that there is another plateau on which they are truly 'blended". I'm suddenly thinking of another metaphor. For a pie crust, the butter is "cut" into the flour so that they perform in close alignment, but remain separate. The purpose is for the butter to melt and create flavorful spaces in the flour, preventing it from bonding its own tough gluten which holds it together in breadmaking with sinewy, stretchy strands. The butter beads give the flour the tender flakiness of a pastry crust. But for a cookie dough the butter is whipped with the flour so that they form a mutual consistency which is tender but smooth and has a new, unitized being. Perhaps when mind, heart and soul are fully unitized, they produce a new and even better being. it's just a thought.


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The Suburban Poet 5 years ago from Austin, Texas Author

@Nellieanna - thank you... if I were a baker then I would have had the brain to think as you; instead I thought in terms of the braid. I knid of likened it to a rope... stronger when twisted with another... but now you have the idea for another hub for yourself!


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Shaisty-Chase-Tea 5 years ago from The Outskirts

i hub an interessting worth... according to you, i'm of a very strange at the moment... writing a jamacan poem in straight jamacan without any inside stuff...

but i say that self worth is bassed off of the most interesting title, as an intro, and the second, as the proof...

my very 'dear' friend who always argues that he can run 'tekken' against anybody but i always get on him for always picking the same generic guy 'Paul' (character in the game), he has the most amazing corn rolls AAAALLl the time, and the last ones i've seen were weaved up and down on both sides into a knit bread going back, but my favorite that i seen i called "corn connected cobwebs"

i say that i am like his braids, told him twice "intricate, complex, and designed to attract"

bless you The Suburban Poet... very fun to see you here, jk, but i'm aslo a suburban poet, out Martin Luther King Ave... jk but not really, have you seen my room?


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Shaisty-Chase-Tea 5 years ago from The Outskirts

i didn't believe in the theory though, i say we ditch a three legged table and buy a chair with two spirit legs in the front and two glandlinkedthought legs in the back... perfecto, you can't tip it cause the head is strong and will catch your back... i'll be bakc, i hope you start to pop up in my feed, cause i like your style, can you visit something a recomend what you think i will like, (I always say this and do the same if is see linked themes and styles) my inspiration is crazy... i recomend Vampire Haiku... ... ... she will speak to anyone that comments!!


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The Suburban Poet 5 years ago from Austin, Texas Author

@Shaisty - He mon... uh I'm glad you liked it... I picked a three-legged table for this because it's a bit precarious as is life... my theory is that we have to develop all of our mind and not just learn to count to ten you know? Since you mentioned Martin Luther King I have a couple about him:

http://hubpages.com/literature/Poem-Im-Sorry-Dr-Ki...

http://hubpages.com/literature/Song-Lyrics-He-Coul...

http://hubpages.com/literature/Poem-Tupac-Said...

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