Poems and Poetry: You're Light

You're Like Streetlight

You’re like streetlight

Lighting up my life’s street

You’re a reward for a man

Who hasn’t earned rewards

Every cell in my body scream

For your touch

And when you did my excitement

Was palpable and rising like the

Mercury in a thermometer

And then, as if we were both

Participating in a telepathic

Exercise you took my hand

And led me away so that we

Could put off the fire

Burning inside us.

Comments 2 comments

CloudExplorer profile image

CloudExplorer 4 years ago from New York City

I definitely like this poem much better, because it appears to flow well with the overall style and fluidity of your scientific terms infused into a poetic form. I do the same a great deal with poetry fusing science & even technology into it all. Nice one!

Voted up for awesome, and beautiful, but you may need some imagery to rank it up a bit though, that hubscore number plays a huge role here, but I'm sure you already knew that part.

No imagery makes it appear dull in a way, and reduces its potential on the web as a whole as well as for hubpage ratings & rankings. Plus more people will comment if your poems are tied into an awesome image. Good luck as I said in the other hub & I wish you much success.


QUIZ2012 profile image

QUIZ2012 4 years ago

Very visual. Love it.

    Sign in or sign up and post using a HubPages Network account.

    0 of 8192 characters used
    Post Comment

    No HTML is allowed in comments, but URLs will be hyperlinked. Comments are not for promoting your articles or other sites.


    Click to Rate This Article
    working