Poetry: Unanswered Love

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In this poem I contemplate about life and death, love and hatred, passion and aversion. In one word, I contemplate on dual nature of mankind. This is about me, about you, about this world we are living in. This poem was composed in snippets. I wrote these lines when I was in a bar, in a restaurant, in a coffee parlor, in the kitchen, before I went to sleep, right after I woke up; every time I was hit by an idea, so to speak. Birth of my poetry depends on my whim.

For long time these epigrams were left discarded. When I found them, I arranged in a single title. Some of the parts were published earlier, on hubpages of course, which I withdrew couple of months ago.

Life by Vinaya Ghimire
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A cigarette smouldering

A whiskey glass

Life in ashtray – an ashtray life

Into the smoke I manifest

Life inside the glass


Breath­ing in fire

Breath­ing out ashes

Tears freeze

I cannot wash

The smell of smoke. Reek of whiskey.

I watch emotions unfold

Turn the pages

Of love

Longing

Passion

And see you

Outgrowing

Like the warm sun

In the winter

As the clock ticks


Wind whis­pers

Shaking naked branch­es,

Rat­tling like the frag­ile bones.

Hollowed like a tree. Empty like a shadow

I reflect

What am I to do when my hands tremble

I cry for nothing more than loving you

If you had not gone

I would be by your side

I am lost

But my voice will not reach you


I peel a layer

Of an onion

Layers after layers

Of pain, suffering, anger, affliction

Adoration. Expectation. Attachment

Crowd. Din. Hullabaloo

A fine mess!

Wait

There is no use of the earth

The sky far away

Did you see

Layers of onion unfolding


I rub the stub

Break the glass

And enter into the coffin

Poet’s Note

Twelve years ago, I asked a guy to read my poems. He was an MA in English Literature and a teacher in a school. This was the first time I had allowed anyone to read my works. Two days later he called me. “It’s okay you write in English, but I suggest you to translate all these poems into Nepali language and submit to publications,” he said. “You must be accepted locally before trying to get published in foreign language.” He had a point.

I had composed some poems in my mother tongue, which I thought were better than English compositions. I adapted some of my best poems in Nepali and began submitting to the literary magazines and journals. I did not find any luck.

In 2000, I published my poetry collection titled “You and I.” This anthology of Nepali poems encouraged me to see myself as a writer/poet. I even got an invitation for a literary event. By this time I was again thinking to publish a poetry collection in English. I sent my poems to a publisher in India. My partial submission was well reviewed and they asked me to submit the entire work.

They did not contact me again.

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Harishprasad 2 years ago from India

Vinaya, when I read this poem, it was felt as if I was in a boat and there was a smooth sailing all along. It was all breathtaking and wonderful. Really a lovely piece. You also threw light on your persistent struggle and your outstanding success. Wish you all success in your all future ventures.


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Phyllis Doyle 2 years ago from High desert of Nevada.

Thanks to Vellur, I saw this hub and I am glad I read it. You are a poet, Vinaya, and a good one.


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Vellur 2 years ago from Dubai

Beautifully written, a great poem.


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liesl5858 3 years ago from United Kingdom

I only read this poem of yours Vinaya and I could tell you are a very very good, intelligent writer and a poet of two languages. Well done, voted up.


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Vinaya Ghimire 4 years ago from Nepal Author

Hello alocsin, I had composed some lines in Nepali, my mother tongue. I appreciate your suggestion.

Cheers


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alocsin 4 years ago from Orange County, CA

Was this one of the ones you wrote in Nepali? It would be interesting to see the Nepali version in a sidebar. Not that I speak the language, but those comparisons are fascinating. Voting this Up and Beautiful.


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Vinaya Ghimire 5 years ago from Nepal Author

@pennyofheaven, thanks for your comment.


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pennyofheaven 5 years ago from New Zealand

This is deep! Awesome thanks


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Vinaya Ghimire 5 years ago from Nepal Author

Hello rebekahELLE, it's a warm day in Kathmandu and I believe it is going to be great. Thanks for your compliments and interpretations.


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rebekahELLE 5 years ago from Tampa Bay

Your poetry is a pleasure to read. As Tom has already said, the imagery is so rich and colorful. A reader can easily sit beside you and intermingle with these emotions. The photos are perfect and I especially love the artwork entitled Life, stunning symbolism.


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Vinaya Ghimire 5 years ago from Nepal Author

Hello Tom, I really appreciate your stopping. Thanks for your compliments.


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Tom Rubenoff 5 years ago from United States

The poem is rich in imagery and your narrative interesting and engaging - a pleasure to read.


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Vinaya Ghimire 5 years ago from Nepal Author

Hello Sueswan, it feels so good to know someone really admires your word. Thanks for following my works.


Sueswan 5 years ago

Hi Vinaya

"Wind whis­pers

Shaking naked branch­es,

Rat­tling like the frag­ile bones.

Hollowed like a tree. Empty like a shadow

I reflect

What am I to do when my hands tremble

I cry for nothing more than loving you"

Your words grabbed at my heart. I felt your pain, and emptiness.

You are a very talented writer/poet.

Voted up, up and away!


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Vinaya Ghimire 5 years ago from Nepal Author

Dear Denise,

Thanks for your appreciation and thanks for reading and leaving a wonderful comment on my poetry.


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Denise Handlon 5 years ago from North Carolina

Vinaya-I say to you, 'well deserved' for the publication of your poetry, 'You and I'. I am honored to know that you are sharing your work here with us. It touches the places deep within the soul and your photos are outstanding. voted up and across. Many blessings.


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Vinaya Ghimire 5 years ago from Nepal Author

Hello Eiddwen, thanks for stopping by. Thanks for you lovely comment.


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Eiddwen 5 years ago from Wales

So wonderful and caring and you do have the gift of getting the moment through to us; a sign of a great poet!

Take care and enjoy your day.

Eiddwen.


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Vinaya Ghimire 5 years ago from Nepal Author

Rosemary, thanks for your appreciation. This means a lot to me.


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Rosemay50 5 years ago from Hawkes Bay - NewZealand

Vinaya this is an excellent poem, your words just flow from the sreen into the heart of others. Many can relate to these sentiments of life.

That you can write poetry in two languages is admirable.

Don't give up keep submitting your poetry, you will one receive the rewards.


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Vinaya Ghimire 5 years ago from Nepal Author

Saddle Rider, thanks for your encouraging words. I had never gained much exposure before joining hubpages.

Thank you very much for relating my emotions and feelings.


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saddlerider1 5 years ago

Vinaya the use of these words were cutting, on the edge, daily thoughts, feelings of reflective thoughts of past and present, as a poet I felt you, I know these words and they have been close to my soul for years.

It takes a stirring inside for us to release and pen them, yet when we do there is relief. Thank you for sharing your heart and soul with us in this excellent work. I am simply in awe of your feelings. Keep writing, keep sending in your work, you will get the much recognition you deserve through perseverance.


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Vinaya Ghimire 5 years ago from Nepal Author

Dear Ubani,

I'll have a wonderful day today, because you have left me a wonderful comment.

Thank you very much.

11: AM, Kathmandu, listening to Indian Sufi songs.


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ubanichijioke 5 years ago from Lagos

Without doubt, you re a great poet as shown by your wonderful poems. I only pray to be taught by you. Thanks for this thoughtful and thought-provoking poem. Awesome!


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Vinaya Ghimire 5 years ago from Nepal Author

@always exploring, I feel so excited that you can picture me in this poem. Thank you very much.

@Happyboomernurse, "Sometimes the more we peel away, the more depth of pain we discover" very wonderful line. Don't be surprised when you read this in my poem one day. LOl

@jenubouka, your inputs are enlightening. Thanks for seeing what I wanted you to see.

@thelyricwriter, I'm glad that you can relate this poem. Thanks for your appreciation.


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thelyricwriter 5 years ago from West Virginia

Vinaya, what a wonderful job you have done here. Great pics, everyone is right. These words are all so familiar as I can relate to this poetry in detail. Simply beautiful my friend.


jenubouka 5 years ago

Greatness of words is beyond the language spoken but the harmony of the poet or writer itself. And no matter which language your words are spoken, it is your melody of emotion that rings through Vinaya


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Happyboomernurse 5 years ago from South Carolina

"Layers after layers

Of pain, suffering, anger, affliction

Adoration. Expectation. Attachment

Crowd. Din. Hullabaloo

A fine mess!"

Yes, that is life- complicated and messy. Sometimes the more we peel away, the more depth of pain we discover.

Well said.

Voted up, useful, awesome and interesting.


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always exploring 5 years ago from Southern Illinois

I too think your poetry is wonderful and unique, like the glass and the ashtray. I could visualize you sitting in a bar writing that line. Thank you...


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Vinaya Ghimire 5 years ago from Nepal Author

@radhapriestess, so kind of you to encourage me in this way. Eleven years ago, I self published a poetry collection in my country, and I'm still waiting for my country people to find me. LOL

@acaetnna, thanks for feeling what I felt.

@b. Malin, I choose pictures in the same way as I choose words while writing. And I always think when my writing fails to deliver, my pictures must hold the visitors' attention. Thanks for your compliments.

@marcoujor, your compliments warms me in this chilly morning in Kathmandu. Thanks for your kindness.


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marcoujor 5 years ago from Jeffersonville PA

Life in ashtray - an ashtray life,

Into the smoke I manifest,

Life inside the glass.

It was a really fine thing, Vinaya, that you shared your writing with more than this first man. I don't think he knew his business.

I find your work unpeeling like an onion. I never know exactly what to expect and sometimes I even cry. Thatsa good thing... voted UP & ABI, oh do keep writing in English, mar.


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b. Malin 5 years ago

What a Heartfelt and moving piece of Poetry Vinaya. It was a very Emotional read, your Thoughts run very deep. I also thought the pictures that you chose were an Excellent choice, they too convey the message.


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acaetnna 5 years ago from Guildford

Very moving, through your words I feel your pain. God bless you.


radhapriestess 5 years ago

Many writers do self-publish and do well like Neil Donald Walsh in Conversations with God. He started as a self published, word of mouth author. Next a small publisher heard of his writing. He got published. Then a larger publisher got interested when he sold many copies. You do have talent.


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Vinaya Ghimire 5 years ago from Nepal Author

@Frank

@kellyPittman

Thanks for your wonderful comments

@Frannie Dee, that para was actually a poem that I wrote on kitchen table while I was chopping onions. I will try to work with this idea in other poems. Thanks for reminding me.

@Hypenbird, wow we seem to think the same way. Don't be surprised if you find these lines in other works I post on hubpages.

@makusr, I have never showcased my photographs other than on hubpages. Your appreciation so much encourages me. Thanks for you nice comment.

@Flora, I have a compulsion to write in second language because my first language is not global as your first language. Thanks for your comment.


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FloraBreenRobison 5 years ago

Beautiful as always, Vinaya. I've never tried writing poetry or prose in my second language (French).


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makusr 5 years ago from India

Vinaya, You are a brilliant photographer. These photos look like as if they have been taken out from National Geographic. You are a DAMN GOOD PHOTOGRAPHER!

Now the poem. You are ingenuous and creative. You are an emotional one. It comes out beautifully in your poem. Thanks.

With warm wishes,

MAKUSR


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Hyphenbird 5 years ago from America-Broken But Still Beautiful

Vinaya, you are a true artist with words and also the visual medium. This "Breath­ing in fire Breath­ing out ashes" makes me dizzy with the beauty it evokes.


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Frannie Dee 5 years ago from Chicago Northwest Suburb

Vinaya I love this. The onion verse is my favorite and so brilliant, it grabbed me. Have you ever thought of beginning with that verse? I would, but of course it's fine the way you have it.


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KellyPittman 5 years ago from Walker, LA

Your poem is remarkaable. I look forward to reading more of your work.


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Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

Wow VG your words reflect and cage at the same time.. I like the power of this poem and the picture of the old woman fills my heart Great Hub my friend :)


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Vinaya Ghimire 5 years ago from Nepal Author

Dear snakeslane, I feel delighted that you can relate this poem. I think, feeling of nothingness is universal thing.


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snakeslane 5 years ago from Canada

I can really relate to these reflective words Vanaya Ghimire. They feel so familiar. Your photos are awesome too. Regards, snakeslane


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Vinaya Ghimire 5 years ago from Nepal Author

@tillsontitan

@Debby Bruck

@Cyndi10

Wow, this was pretty fast. I was still arranging the capsule,and here I get your wonderful comments. Thank you very much for your generosity.


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Cyndi10 5 years ago from Georgia

"I cry for nothing more than loving you" Awesome line. Very moving. The photos are wonderful.


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Debby Bruck 5 years ago

Congratulations to you, Vinaya. The long hard road to acknowledgement and acceptance. Wishing you good luck with furthering your poetry publications at home and abroad. Many will enjoy your words. Blessings, Debby [voted up and away!]


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tillsontitan 5 years ago from New York

You have a scope of understanding a sorrow in love and your pictures are thought provoking. Very interesting! Voted up and interesting.

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