Point-Blank Range


Finally, the case was

taking on a shape,

his last murder was captured

on video tape,

a middle aged Brooklyn woman

had been killed

as she warmed up her car,

the murders were truly bizarre,

he was a tightly wound sociopath

who would shoot out his victim’s eyes

at point blank range,

he was odd, cold, strange,

he ran up and shot her repeatedly

in the head,

it was a shotgun blast,

and death was fast,

caught on tape was his sick ritual,

he’d pray briefly while looking

toward the skies,

then he’d shoot out their eyes,

his murder, sealed,

as the plot didn’t just thicken,

it positively congealed,

no longer was there a figure

with a blank space,

they now have a face,

during these times,

it was tough being a cop,

but that video told the gathering,

that the killings would not stop.

© 2012 Frank Atanacio

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xstatic 4 years ago from Eugene, Oregon

Chilling Frank! Such scary random violence seems to abound. This sounds like a series perhaps. Up?awesome!


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TToombs08 4 years ago from Somewhere between Heaven and Hell without a road map.

Heya, Frank! Are you creating an analogy of crime poems from a cop's point of view? :) Very disturbing nonetheless. Excellent as always. :) VUM!


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Angelme566 4 years ago

Frank always writes social issues..Brilliant thoughts you always have.

Voted and shared .


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DFiduccia 4 years ago from Las Vegas

This is a brilliant transcription of the scene in the words of an unusal poet.

…voted up—DF


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

Thanks so much X-- glad you can visit me at point blank range lol and Angelme always good to see you TTombs Im still waiting to read a dramatic piece from you.. yeah? lol and DF.. thanks for the wonderful comment :)


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writer20 4 years ago from Southern Nevada

Frank my friend, this one is your next book. It's incredibly strange, Joyce.


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PegCole17 4 years ago from Dallas, Texas

Hi Frank,

This was intensely told and chilling in its depth. Hard to imagine there are people so ruthless and cold blooded. I always wonder what caused this kind of person to be like they are.


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thanks so much joyce for your support and thank you pegcole for stopping by my point blank range


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time2rite 4 years ago from Navarre, Fl, USA

Wowsa, Frank, this one is a truly gruesome read: I like it! You have captured a glimpse into a ciminal mind that has left a chill up and down my spine. Voted "Up" and "Awesome"!


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Gypsy Rose Lee 4 years ago from Riga, Latvia

This was terrifying. Everyone's nightmare of a nut job on the loose. You tell it very well. Perhaps a book of True Crime Poems???


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myownlife 4 years ago from london

Why doesn't it stop at once. Why some people don't like to be human?

Please god give them heart, feelings .


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

Time2rite thank you so much :) and Gypsy thanks for the visit and thank you too for your plea and comment :) Frank bless you all


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thelyricwriter 4 years ago from West Virginia

Frank, AWESOME!!! If I was going to be shot, only if, I would rather go point blank. Point blank. j/k No need to feel pain afterward cause that would suck:) Actually, both would. Always a job Frank!


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

LOL to the lyricwriter great comment :)


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Alastar Packer 4 years ago from North Carolina

Son of Sam-ish Frank. Nothing worse than a demented killer who prays to the sky and then shoots out the eyes .. And nobody writes on the life a NYC homicide Det. like you do my friend.


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thanks so much Alastar another great comment posted :)


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Vinaya Ghimire 4 years ago from Nepal

Frank this is wonderful piece of writing.


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TToombs08 4 years ago from Somewhere between Heaven and Hell without a road map.

Frank: Babe, I gave up drama for Lent. :)


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

Thanks for visisitng VG.. and TTombs what?!?! LOL bless you :)


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TToombs08 4 years ago from Somewhere between Heaven and Hell without a road map.

"...TTombs Im still waiting to read a dramatic piece from you.. " :)


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

oh .... lol


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TToombs08 4 years ago from Somewhere between Heaven and Hell without a road map.

lol @ Frank. S'ok, I have weeks like that. :)


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

yeah i bet lol


Sueswan 4 years ago

"it was a shotgun blast,

and death was fast,

caught on tape was his sick ritual,

he’d pray briefly while looking

toward the skies,

then he’d shoot out their eyes"

You do gruesome so well.

Hope you are having a good weekend :)

Voted up and awesome.


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thank you so much Sue hope your weekend is great too bless you :)


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nenytridiana 4 years ago from Probolinggo - Jawa Timur - Indonesia

Point blank range is a range to start anything perfectly. I have many point blank in my country, where the criminals did their crime especially now. Most of the criminals do their crime by economical reasons, but if they do by other reasons such as sociopath, It is really unstoppable. What tragic! Good work Frank!


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thanks for reading Neny :) Frank


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raciniwa 4 years ago from Naga City, Cebu

so gross and morbid...and you're good at that...why wouldn't it stop Frank?


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Frank Atanacio 16 months ago from Shelton Author

he has to be caught first LOL thank you Raci always good to see you :)


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bizarrett81 16 months ago from Maine

I can only imagine how hard it would be to be a cop and have to watch stuff like this. Gruesome but awesome, voted up!


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Frank Atanacio 16 months ago from Shelton Author

thank you Biz for reading my point blank range :)


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tillsontitan 16 months ago from New York

Raw! Unfortunately it is just as timely now as when you wrote it! Sociopath, schizophrenic, manic depressive....what is this world coming to, or is it just that they now feel more freedom to carry out their derangement? Scary, and raw!

Voted up, useful, awesome, and interesting.

Keep 'em coming!


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Frank Atanacio 16 months ago from Shelton Author

thank you so much Til for reading my point blank range

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