Prose - How I Think

Give me your shoes
And take mine in return
In them we will place our lives
And together we will learn
You are free
Walk your way
If you choose to get lost
Must I always pay?
I will lend a hand
To those in need
But remember to take care
And not make yourself bleed
I question
The left and the right
It's too much for me
I tire of the fight
Assurance
And dogma
I reject
With shrugging enigma
Ask... What if?
Or... Have you considered?
An olive branch question
Will not go unanswered
Believe your God
Choose your lover
I have no response
I seek to discover
I go this way
Or that
You don't know me
I wear no hat
I speak
With force at times
But only when flavored
By another's crimes
Solipsism
An assumption
Parochialism
Truth invaded by perception
I react
To what I see
You penetrate my world
I observe how you can be
You cannot know
What I am about
Other than relief
I offer no particular route
I speak against war
Hatred and dishonesty
It's not so hard to understand
I speak with idealistic simplicity
You live
Within your will
As long as you do not hurt
I will respect you still
In the love
Of a daughter
I see life
Bringing me the water
This I know
This I believe
I need nothing else
It's not so hard to conceive
Hurting no one
Is my religion
Can you do the same?
Or is killing me your mission?
Do I care what you say?
Yes and no
How can I open my mind
If I assume you do not know?
Unbalance
In a world view
Will be met
With an extremist's hue
Yet I only act
To remind
Though it may not be what I believe
A contrarian is what you may find

I lean back
As the wind fills the sail
Come back from the horizon
And let reason tell the tale
Do you declare
That you can never learn?
I have nothing to offer then
As you ignorantly travel ashes to urn
My chameleon mind
Is not closed
But It cannot be bought
If you try you will be opposed
Tell me your story
And I will hear
I may not agree
But you should never fear
For words may hurt
But you can walk
As a free man
Who is allowed to talk
In the end
Where do I stand?
I do know this
It's not under your command
Never assume
Or use a label
For as soon as you know
You will find yourself reading a fable


COPYRIGHT 2011. ALL RIGHTS RESERVED. MARK LECUONA AKA THE SUBURBAN POET





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BenWritings 5 years ago from Save me from, Tennessee

Another compelling and awesome downward expanse of words


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Midianite 5 years ago from Australia

Voted up. I agree with the content of this poem - very raw and honest.

"Assurance

And dogma

I reject

With shrugging enigma" - Amazing.

This piece flows fell and is easy to read - the use of vocabulary was planned and concise (not to mention complex at times : P ) and as a result added that form of 'credibility' to your work.

Nice piece.

M I D I A N I T E


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The Suburban Poet 5 years ago from Austin, Texas Author

@bEn and Midianite - I truly appreciate you two young dynamic thinkers taking the time to read my stuff. I've gone back and added some more lines and fixed some rhymes that were dyslexially (is that a word?) typed in haste so I could depart and watch my daughter play softball... I may chisel some more on this piece but I felt the need to explain myself because on other forums I have appeared as a conservative and as a liberal. What I found over time was I opposed people purely based on the arrogant delivery of their opinion. Both sides need their heads to be cracked together at times but in the end I am a liberal and a conservative. I give you freedom; I ask that you be an adult and live with your choices. I judge no one.... I don't know that such a simple declaration can be utilized in every situation but you are welcome with me regardless of who you are, what you believe or who you love... just offer the same and be human and reachable....


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Midianite 5 years ago from Australia

@ your comment, no, I don't think it was a word : P

I'm glad you appreciate our presence : )

P.s - I always find it good to go back over my work a week, or perhaps 3 months later - It just allows you to fix up small mistakes/things that could be worded better.

Keep up the awesome work.


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The Suburban Poet 5 years ago from Austin, Texas Author

@Midianite - I agree... I am VERY impatient... I get a thought and pour it out all over the table... I tend to want a final draft on the first pass. It's very arrogant of me (ironic in that I hate true arrogance) but I know that everything can be improved... I guess my feelings are clear to me but at times the typing is faster than the sense of grammar.... I write like I drink I guess... in gulps....


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Midianite 5 years ago from Australia

Wow, you sound exactly like me. Everything you said in that comment I've said at one point or another. I really like your line of thinking : ) - if you get the chance, check out a little more of my work, it'd be appreciated.


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The Suburban Poet 5 years ago from Austin, Texas Author

@Midianite - I have... you have a style that makes me think and I'm old and decrepit! That's not fair... I want to make you think; not the other way around!!! it's easier on me... Ha.... I will check on it more.... hopefully tonight....

Are you in Australia?


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Midianite 5 years ago from Australia

I sure am in Australia (Brisbane in fact - However am soon moving to Northern Territory)

The truth is, you do make me think!

I really enjoy being a part of the hubpages community as all the authors/poets I follow make me think in a different way.


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The Suburban Poet 5 years ago from Austin, Texas Author

Well I'm a bit of an idiot to ask if you are down under when your profile spells it out but I was confused as you were awake at the same time as I and yet you are all the way over there....

I wrote a piece based upon an older man I met over here in Austin from Australia! http://hubpages.com/literature/Song-Lyrics-Cmon-Ov...

I commented on one of your hubs...


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Micky Dee 5 years ago

"I guess my feelings are clear to me but at times the typing is faster than the sense of grammar." Ain't that the truth! God bless you Suburban Poet. People "truth in faith" cannot accept what is passing for politics and dogma. God bless!


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BenWritings 5 years ago from Save me from, Tennessee

lol, remember when I said everything you said sounded like me?

I just think we all are great minds. hell yeahhh


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The Suburban Poet 5 years ago from Austin, Texas Author

@Micky - Thanks man... I am very unhappy with the current state of affairs in public discourse but what can we do but howl at the moon. I just hope maybe we can open more eyes and demand more truth from our leaders. I'm not sitting here waiting for my own stimulus package. I just want honesty. Level with us. We can deal with it. Don't bomb other countries for lies. Let's be the country that is the moral beacon... Don't just say it and then do the opposite... "who are you going to believe: me or your eyes?"


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The Suburban Poet 5 years ago from Austin, Texas Author

@Ben - I remember! Amazing huh? That's why we're hear... kindred spirits....


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vrbmft 5 years ago from Yucaipa, California

For me, your "work" says so much about my own "dance" to be a "whole-y" person as I approach the "table" of relationship which, in the best of worlds, makes us both more than we are as separate, yet still not giving up one iota of who we are. Probably not such a difficult dance as we make it because we are so afraid of losing parts of ourselves and then sometimes too, for whatever insane reason, we find ourselves attracted to toxic folks who will, in fact, eat us alive if we let them!

Thanks for continuing to share with us, calling us to think and to ponder and to be ourselves.

Vern


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Berga 5 years ago from SKIEN

blessed soul....


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gg.zaino 5 years ago from L'America

Suburban- enjoyed your words.

poetry is an art few can do well.

you do well.

thanx- peace - greg


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RealHousewife 5 years ago from St. Louis, MO

You have just proven that guys have a brain too! Haha! This was great poet - up and awesome:)


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Jeremey 5 years ago from Arizona

This was enjoyable, loved the last six lines, heck of a way to 'sum things up'!


Wooded 5 years ago

Really enjoyed this! Thanks


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The Suburban Poet 5 years ago from Austin, Texas Author

@Vern - thanks for keeping up with my posts man. I appreciate you taking the time to not only read them but commenting to the degree you do. My point with this poem is an attempt to explain myself as at times I may seem to be one way when in fact I'm actually another because I tend to challenge extremists on both sides; so it's hard to tell what I really believe.... in the end there are so many questions that I feel it is important not to draw too many hard lines in the sand because as soon as you do a fact or situation arises that complicates what it is you thought you knew so well....


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The Suburban Poet 5 years ago from Austin, Texas Author

@Berga - thank you and I feel blessed... I'm just glad to be here...


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The Suburban Poet 5 years ago from Austin, Texas Author

@gg.zaino - thank you for that. I'm just glad you felt enough to read it. At times it seems difficult to attract attention with mere poetry... it doesn't have the power of a singer or a guitar to lift it off the page.


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The Suburban Poet 5 years ago from Austin, Texas Author

@realhousewife - touche! Ha... thanks for pointing that out... yeah we don't always think with our... errr.... well let's just say at times we think about other things than girls...


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The Suburban Poet 5 years ago from Austin, Texas Author

@Jeremey - hey I'd lost touch with you a bit. Thanks for commenting...


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The Suburban Poet 5 years ago from Austin, Texas Author

@Wooded - thank you for commenting!


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RealHousewife 5 years ago from St. Louis, MO

Haha! For anyone following - I'm making fun of Poets hub about discovering girls have brains too! You've written so many I just realized others might not know what I'm referencing! You're hilarious!


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The Suburban Poet 5 years ago from Austin, Texas Author

@Real - thanks for alerting our viewers about past episodes... I enjoy mystery but not confusion... as of being hilarious I'm just trying to keep up with Mr. Fletcher....


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Genna East 5 years ago from Massachusetts, USA

I was just in awe of this! Wonderful.

I have to agree with Mid:

"Assurance

And dogma

I reject

With shrugging enigma" - Amazing.


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RealHousewife 5 years ago from St. Louis, MO

Sure poet! I forgot that you have 187 hubs!

You're going to need to get some t shirts made! That would be great!


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The Suburban Poet 5 years ago from Austin, Texas Author

@Genna - well what can I say about a comment like that but thank you... I truly appreciate it...


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The Suburban Poet 5 years ago from Austin, Texas Author

@Real - I need a t-shirt that say's The Suburban Poet... that wouldn't be too pretentious would it... yeah.... probably...


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RealHousewife 5 years ago from St. Louis, MO

Hey - I'd wear it! Don't kid yourself. Then I'd brag about how I know you:-)! I'm that kind of girl!


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The Suburban Poet 5 years ago from Austin, Texas Author

That's funny... so... how many can I put you down for?


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RealHousewife 5 years ago from St. Louis, MO

Hundreds Poet! I'll wear one every day so just get some nice colors eh?


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The Suburban Poet 5 years ago from Austin, Texas Author

With CYMK and a few spot colors thrown in I'm sure we can accomodate your every fashion sense and need to accessorize....


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RealHousewife 5 years ago from St. Louis, MO

See why I adore you poet? You totally crack me up!


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The Suburban Poet 5 years ago from Austin, Texas Author

Well I was so offended and insanely jealous of all the attention that Stan was receiving that I decided to step up the charm and fun and inanity and ridiculousness and funny stuff and bad spelling and and and and.....


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smile51everyday 5 years ago from dream land-mamamiya

thanks for sharing.....


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The Suburban Poet 5 years ago from Austin, Texas Author

@smile51everyday - thanks for reading!


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RealHousewife 5 years ago from St. Louis, MO

Yep it worked too! Further proof that you have not just a tiny little brain but a great big and well working one. You want to be like Stan? What you like to be pummeled with insults? Ha! Just kidding!


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The Suburban Poet 5 years ago from Austin, Texas Author

I just let the breeze blow through like the picture... it clears the bad stuff out. I'll let Stan handle the insults. He's pretty cool about it all. I like to eat popcorn and watch the show....


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RealHousewife 5 years ago from St. Louis, MO

See you are so smart! I do know what you mean though:)! I like to sometimes just follow along and not comment!


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kimh039 5 years ago

Suburban, what you are describing is how difficult it is to maintain neutrality under the force of polarization; whether the polarization is internal or external. I read an awesome book about this idea many years ago, but I can't remember the name. I just searched amazon for neutrality and polarization and the search yielded some interesting results about these concepts in American politics and on the internet; not the book I was looking for, but.... Anyway. Thanks for sharing your thoughts. I enjoyed listening:)


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kimh039 5 years ago

something about middle ground, but I'm not finding that either:(


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The Suburban Poet 5 years ago from Austin, Texas Author

@kimh039 - I appreciate you taking the time to find that book. This may be a very PC poem but I've found that I have enough problems of my own to worry about. I think we should evolve to a point where we are not judging others and are not bothered by differences in others. You would think this would be common knowledge especially in a country that claims to be a Christian nation. I don't say that to be a jerk but because the legend/myth/man/God preached these very things about not judging others...


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blondey 5 years ago

This is one of the best poems I've ever read, I really admire your openness and honesty and frankness, yes frankness. I learn from this poem not to judge myself or others, take life as it comes, not to "bleed" myself. You have wisdom to offer. Happy to follow!


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The Suburban Poet 5 years ago from Austin, Texas Author

Hey blondey! Thank you so much for saying that. I'm trying to be as honest as I can be. Non-judgment is at the core of this piece as you noted; plus personal responsibility...


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W. B. Isley 5 years ago from Monett, MO

I appreciate the fact that you have transcended the need to find a middle ground and go above all of it to a non-dualistic way of thinking. Very good work. It is a pleasure to follow you.


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The Suburban Poet 5 years ago from Austin, Texas Author

@W.B. Isley - Thank you for following me, commenting and the fan mail. I truly appreciate it. This whole piece can be summarized as follows: "I don't know much and neither do you so don't tell me what you can't prove." Regardless of my own personal opinions I can be seen to be arguing on either side of the fence because I feel the need to challenge dogmatic and arrogant people. It's just something that upsets me in general.


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W. B. Isley 5 years ago from Monett, MO

I understand about challenging dogma and the people that are comfortable being in that little mental box they have created for themselves. It is the job of a Christed individual to do this very thing. I thank you for approaching this job with gusto and enthusiasm from a non-dualistic perspective.

I do have one question though, based on your summary, how do we really prove anything? Can we really be said to prove anything, ultimately. From the philosophical perspective of quantum mechanics, no piece of matter is truly real, it is all energy. Must we then rely on spiritual principles to make points and then let people believe what they want anyway?


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The Suburban Poet 5 years ago from Austin, Texas Author

For me it's a matter of what works. The basic principles of Christ, whether you're a believer or not and I'm not declaring myself in either camp by the way, would seem to indicate that ultimate truth does not matter; what matters is how you behave towards your fellow man. It's somewhat moot what the real story is except I would suppose the Christian story requires a level of genuine faith for salvation. But this is an individual mandate. What you believe in that regard has nothing to do with me or vice versa. You have your life and I have mine. We respect each other; we try to help each other; we honor each other... but the truth of Creation and the Afterlife should not have any bearing on how we interact with one another. At least that's how I see it.

I'm not a scientist or a theologist. It's hard to know when to let go of the search for meaning and I can't say that I have but the conflicts that are inherrent in whose God is God are very disheartening. Declaring oneself to be this or that tends to create typecasting and I wish to be free of labels. I did read once where Einstein said something like this: "Regardless of the truth about God or Heaven in the end the only thing that matters in the here and now is to treat each other with kindness." If you can do this then I would have to hope that God already looks upon you with favor.


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W. B. Isley 5 years ago from Monett, MO

Amen to that! You have stated some very wonderful principles. I am thankful there are folks like you in the world who are willing to stand for what they believe, and let people know what they believe too. Bravo!

I too wish to be free of labels. I, simply, am. I am one of God's creations and so are you. Can't that be enough for us to work together in peace, love, and harmony? Well, with enough folks like you in the world practicing what they believe and letting others know, I do not believe it will take long for the world to start changing in swift and positive ways.


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The Suburban Poet 5 years ago from Austin, Texas Author

@W.B. - Now... don't mistake me for a saint man! It's easy to say these things but in person it's another matter to be all Zen all the time....I don't know why people insist on defining others or forcing an opinion on you. From a pop psychology standpoint it just seems they are trying to justify themselves or prop up an inferiority complex. It's just a matter of not putting people down or being intimidated. Everyone has issues regardless of how much money they make, how good looking they are or whatever. Things are not always as they seem.


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W. B. Isley 5 years ago from Monett, MO

Sorry for the delay. Had to work on my fence.

Why would I mistake you for a saint? Even though we are all spirits with bodies, it completely hinges on free will whether we act like saints (not the catholic ones) or not. To me saints aren't the goody-two-shoes, walking around suffering, types. To me saints are people like us who state our truth simply and firmly, whether anyone else cares or not.

I struggle with an inferiority complex almost daily. I have to keep in mind that, I am a spirit in a body, it simply doesn't matter what anyone else thinks, it matters what I think about me. Am I going to let what others believe influence my opinion of my self? I've had a low opinion of my self for so long that it is hard to get out of that habit. I keep working on it every day.

If you hadn't noticed, I'm working on getting past the gray thinking that comes after one leaves the black-and-white thinking. There are things that can be known in the universe that aren't up for interpretation. If you trip well enough you fall, and things like E=mc^2.

Thanks for the conversation, I enjoyed it. Have fun.


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Berga 5 years ago from SKIEN

delighted myself reading, mirroring here again

...together we will learn

You are free

Walk your way

If you choose to get lost....

yeah... and you have to pay again... cause you

forgot that price IS paid...

Believe your God

Choose your lover

:))

this is sooo pleasurable ...

and if i have no lover..HE is..

all in all

you are truly blessed to be a blessing !


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The Suburban Poet 5 years ago from Austin, Texas Author

@W.B. Isley - Thanks again for taking the time to comment. I'm sorry you feel down on yourself at times. We all go through that. I've always had a certain amount of self-confidence but more and more I've been able to be happy with who I am; I'm not competing with anyone. Not for best poem; not for best looking guy; not for the smartest guy etc etc. There is always someone out there who is all that and more so why sweat it? I used to go to parties in Dallas back in the 80's and tell people I was unemployed (even though I wasn't) because back then everybody wanted to talk about how successful they were and I was tired of it. So I would so confidently be myself as the "loser" that it through them off. It was good practice because the next day I woke up and I was the same person and their opinion meant nothing.


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The Suburban Poet 5 years ago from Austin, Texas Author

@Berga - Thank you... it is the way it works best for me. I don't want to put anyone down but I also think we should be adults in life. As I said: I want to help people but I also wish to encourage productive behavior. We all have a responsibility to each other and the planet to hold up our end of the bargain; especially if we are physically and mentally sound. You are very nice to say such things about this poem. Thank you again.


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Freya Cesare 5 years ago from Borneo Island, Indonesia

Chameleon mind. Interesting concept and I think quite hard to be done. I never correlated truth seeker with chameleon mind before. In my understanding truth seeker is someone whose open to every avenue of life to see beyond what it allowed to show to find the truth. And Chameleon mind is someone whose almost always able to fitted himself in variety of thoughts from others and easily resound the same tone. Can someone become truth seeker while always imitating the environment?


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The Suburban Poet 5 years ago from Austin, Texas Author

@Freya - Oh! So you are actually reading what I say? Uh-oh... you're supposed to just say Wow or Cool! But a real question about what I mean.... well... I in this instance it is not the same as a truth seeker. You are correct in that the chameleon blends in with their environment and at times that is what I do to be able to get along in moments when being a truth seeker is not the wisest course of action. In other words; at work or around my mother... Ha...

As you probably know they don't always want to hear the truth at work. But that doesn't mean I'm not a truth-seeker. That merely describes what is in my mind as opposed to how I interact with people.

Years ago a friend gave me a small doll named Gumby. If you do not know Gumby it is a cartoon figure that is able to stretch, mold and bend. She said I was that kind of person because I could adapt to any situation. So to be a truth seeker and a "Gumby" at the same time does seem to be somewhat of a conflict but it's more of a practical way of living while simultaneously not becoming the background or the blend so to speak. I am not so brave that I walk alone all the time. But I know what I think and it is not necessarily where I walk. Is this cowardly? Maybe... is it wise? At times... The problem with being a truth-seeker is that you are still bound by your own ability to perceive what it is you experience or are able to reason without experience. So I cannot presume or assume that I know the truth. The only thing I can say is that my goal is not to cling to dogma in order to justify the errors of my past.

As you see at the end of the piece I talk of fables... that means if you think you know me then you don't. It is because maybe I'm not as honest with you as I am with myself. I may take a position that opposed you and even what I believe just for the fact that I don't like you. Or that I wish to challenge arrogance or even myself.

But I do like you so what you see is what you get with me... ok?


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Freya Cesare 5 years ago from Borneo Island, Indonesia

LOL. Understood, Sir. This ability indeed will be really useful around social life. ^_*


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The Suburban Poet 5 years ago from Austin, Texas Author

@Freya - yeah this truth-seeker stuff doesn't play well at a party.... by the way you don't have to call me sir... call me Mark!


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W. B. Isley 5 years ago from Monett, MO

Sir Poet, I have been mulling over your last comment to me for the last four weeks. Thank you for sharing your story about the parties in Dallas. It has helped me to realize that, no matter what happens, I am still the same person, regardless of what happens or does not happen. Thank you for your help.


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The Suburban Poet 5 years ago from Austin, Texas Author

@W.B. - Thanks for commenting again. I'm flattered that you considered my words in your own life. I'm glad it helped. That is exactly right; you go to a party and you are who you are and that person in front of you is just like eveyone else. They have problems and they have blessings. When you wak up then it's still you and your life and what did the conversation from the previous night mean? Only you can decide.

If you feel bad about yourself then hopefully it's a matter of working on the things you need to do to make things right. But it should be on things like honesty, caring, sincerity and yes, hard work if need be. Hard work is a free gift you can give yourself each day and if that's what it takes to improve the situation then do it. But do it for yourself. Who cares what anyone else thinks? You can never be on top each day; each year. You just have to have that plan for your life that is right for you and your family. If you want a balance so you can be a family man then that is who you are. And there is nothing wrong with that. It's an honest way to live. I am no longer impressed with overly ambitious people because the rest of us are tools for their ego. They aren't real to me. I almost enjoy listening to their braggadocious ways at parties because I know I'm their equal; no matter what... they don't consider eveything in life that I consider. And I know that and carry it with me everywhere I go. I feel these things not in a defiant manner but in a peaceful manner that helps me be happy with myself.


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Teylina 5 years ago

Going back to read things I missed when I first got on HP; NOW I KNOW where your writings come from-- but I'd already guessed by now! Beautifully put. Sorry I missed before!


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The Suburban Poet 5 years ago from Austin, Texas Author

@Teylina - Thank you!


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moiragallaga 5 years ago from Lisbon, Portugal

What more can I say? Excellent and profound, you definitely have a way with words.


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The Suburban Poet 4 years ago from Austin, Texas Author

@moira - thank you! I appreciate it. This is just how I feel you know?


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Tiffanie S 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon

This reminds me of what a teleprompter would be like if we lived in a world where everyone wore newsie hats and snapped instead of clapped when we applauded someone and we all said words as they formed in our heads before we thought about grammar and sentence structure.


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The Suburban Poet 4 years ago from Austin, Texas Author

@Tiffanie - Thank you for commenting. So is that good or bad?


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missolive 4 years ago from Texas

Bookmarking and returning - this one is like a good book. Every time I reread it I capture something new. Your words always make me want to look at your thought process and inspiration. Almost like a little kid..."why did you say this? and this?" I'm intrigued by the various possible perspectives of the shoes, walking, and standing. If I apply a full analysis of figurative language it takes it to a whole other level. Thank you again for stirring my senses.

Incidentally, I TOTALLY enjoyed your truth-seeking Gumby comment above! Great example!

Thank you for sharing


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The Suburban Poet 4 years ago from Austin, Texas Author

@missolive - I appreciate you taking the time to read this and take it to heart. Sometimes I want to go back and rework it but it is what it is in terms of how I think. I like to challenge people as I said especially those who are so sure of themselves. That Gumby thing was funny when she gave it to me. It was back in the 80's. I could't believe she took the time to buy it and present it to me. I kept it on my piano for a long time but I don't know where it ended up. I need to buy another one!


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Steele Fields 4 years ago from drexel hill,pa

Great job- you choose unusual and/or unexpected rhyming words, which is so refreshing. It is obvious you put a lot of emotion into this and your heartfelt sentiment is clear. Good to see you again:)


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The Suburban Poet 4 years ago from Austin, Texas Author

@Steele - Thank you. I try to pick words that mean add to the context of the point. It can be difficult but that is the challenge of rhyme....


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CrisSp 4 years ago from Sky Is The Limit Adventure

I share the same sentiments as you. Thank you for sharing. Great hub! I voted awesome, indeed!


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The Suburban Poet 4 years ago from Austin, Texas Author

Thank you CrisSp - Sorry I took so long to respond.

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