Prose - I Saw Myself Through Your Eyes

In a dream
I see myself
As you see me
When I awaken
And lose all sanity
As I always do
I ask you
To tell me
What I am about
But I only hear you
When my eyes are closed
Will it ever matter?

In your pain
While I ignore you
You see so clearly
As I sleep
I feel
Finally
What you feel
And it hurts
In my sorrow
I beg for the dream
To stop being so unkind
Will it ever end?

In the same game
I remain as I am
Like yesterday
I walk in the crowd
And remember
Clearly
How you came to me
In the night
And became the dream
That lifted the veil
Revealing what I already knew
Will I ever change?

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Nan 5 years ago

Beautifully written, I would like to see your book of poetry. You seem to be able to write poetry like writing a sentence.


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The Suburban Poet 5 years ago from Austin, Texas Author

@Nan - there is no book... yet... what you see on Hubpages is quite a bit of my work, though I have some I am holding back for the days I have writer's block... thank you very much for the comment....


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Apostle Jack 5 years ago from Atlanta Ga

You said it well.I can see my life through the eyes of God.


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The Suburban Poet 5 years ago from Austin, Texas Author

@Apostle Jack - thanks for commenting... hopefully what is seen is what you wish to project....


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breakfastpop 5 years ago

Beautiful writing. Voted up and awesome.


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The Suburban Poet 5 years ago from Austin, Texas Author

@breakfastpop - thank you!


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Erin LeFey 5 years ago from Maryland

Very well written, its wonderful when we can see ourselves and realize that our actions really do matter and have an effect on others lives. When we take responsibility for them, hopefully its not too late.


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Dee aka Nonna 5 years ago

Well done. You always say things in a way that make me stop and think. Thank you!


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Freya Cesare 5 years ago from Borneo Island, Indonesia

Very beautiful! You have simple but full of emotion way in expressing your thought. Somehow, I feel like you are really sensitive heart. Well done! ^_^


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The Suburban Poet 5 years ago from Austin, Texas Author

@Erin - thank you. It's very difficult to confront the self that others see. We don't want to admit our shortcomings or how we hurt another. Sometimes you have to float into another person's mind to see what you need to see...

@Dee - thank you again... I try to say things in a way that makes a person pause... maybe I'm really just doing it so I get it because I need to get it...

@Freya - thank you for saying such nice things. NO! I'm not sensitive! I'm a rough tough cowboy!!! Ok... maybe a little sensitive..... :)


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ExpandYourMind 5 years ago from Midwest USA

Beautiful. And, the pic is such a good complement to your writing.


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The Suburban Poet 5 years ago from Austin, Texas Author

@ExpandYourMind - thank you! I wanted to get some eyes on there and I found the picture...


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uddinhammad62 5 years ago from karachi

owsome man owsome i like it


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The Suburban Poet 5 years ago from Austin, Texas Author

@uddinhammad62 - thank you very much for the kind remarks... are you sure it isn't the picture you're talking about? ha....


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vrbmft 5 years ago from Yucaipa, California

I am "working" a 12 step program and beginning to embrace the fourth step, doing a moral inventory which is not so much about judgment as it is about honesty and ownership and as I read outloud the verses it gives me a picture of what I am about to do for myself, seeing myself as I really am.


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The Suburban Poet 5 years ago from Austin, Texas Author

@Vern - It's very gratifying to me personally that you take the time to read my stuff aloud and actually take it to heart. It is a simple message but difficult to execute for some reason. We have our self-image as contrasted to our true selves. I hope whatever you do will work in your life.... thank you...


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acaetnna 5 years ago from Guildford

It doesn't take much to see a true reflection of ourselves ... then we realise how our actions can affect others. Your words are beautiful and what a wonderful choice of picture to accompany your poem. Awesome.


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The Suburban Poet 5 years ago from Austin, Texas Author

@acaetnna - thank you... speaking for myself I know I don't view how my actions affect others near enough... sometimes that wall of selfishness makes you blind... when I found that picture I thought "now those are some eyes!"


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chspublish 5 years ago from Ireland

Such heart in this poem and beautifully written also in the patterned layout of it.


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The Suburban Poet 5 years ago from Austin, Texas Author

@chspublish - thank you!


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starflakes 5 years ago from Florida

esquisite ;so touching your work is wow


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The Suburban Poet 5 years ago from Austin, Texas Author

@starflakes - thank you... I get into such a zone when I write then later when prompted by a comment such as yours I reread it and wonder "where did that come from?"


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starflakes 5 years ago from Florida

I can relate to that enjoy the day


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The Suburban Poet 5 years ago from Austin, Texas Author

As I reread it again I am reminded that the full impact is felt if each line is read somewhat slowly with a pause at the end because each line is intended to stand on it's own even though they set up each subsequent line...


April 5 years ago

This is so beautiful and amazing to me.. My husband passed away in October of 2009 and I see him in my dreams alot lately. This is so amazing =) absolutely beautiful work.


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The Suburban Poet 5 years ago from Austin, Texas Author

@April - thank you for the kind remark and I'm sorry to hear about your husband's passing. I hope the dreams are comforting to you... we have an alternative life when we go to bed it seems.... sometimes it's good; sometimes it's bad.... I hope things pick up for you.

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