Prose - Mediocrity?

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Mediocrity?
Really?
Is that what you see
From our Hubpages family?
You commented rather pointedly
About your superior ability
And eloquent verbosity
Derived from the history
Of the friends of Neal Cassidy
And Burroughs eccentricity
Yet you forgot your humanity
And instead introduced a monstrosity
Of an ego steeped in personal vanity
Insisting on being treated royally
Demanding your subjects bow immediately
As you landed in the sea of tranquility
Planting your flag of superiority
And crushing our words spoken so plainly
But heartfully
Because they are not worthy
To one who is challenged emotionally
Unable to live peacefully
Amongst those who wish to learn gratefully
About a craft you have reserved selfishly
For yourself and those you deem to be equally
As adept as yourself in the vagary
Of references you declare to be wholly
Insightful and thoughtfully
Fresh and newly
Minted by your giant ability
To walk around the cliché so gracefully
While we repeatedly
Use words such as lovely
Or heavenly
Or tearfully
Or holy
So we beg you openly
To understand what is primary
In a place for the novice to publically
Air their emotions unapologetically
And speak candidly
And unconditionally
About how painfully
It is to live freely
In a place so worldly
Where men think judgmentally
Sucking the life from those who live meekly
And wish to exist thankfully
Amongst those who understand brotherly
Love and affectionately
Praise those who tenderly
Open their hearts to humanity
And give mercy
To those without the gifts you egotistically
Bludgeoned us with so artfully
But failing miserably
To impart insightfully
Your wisdom for those who willingly
Would receive daily
Your transcendently
And insightfully
Spoken songs of serenity
But instead you callously
Reminded us unfortunately
That mere man is weakly
Empowered to exist commonly
And instead arrogantly
Cuts the rose greedily
Leaving the thorns sadistically

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Binaya.Ghimire 5 years ago

Full of sarcasm but interesting point.


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The Suburban Poet 5 years ago from Austin, Texas Author

Yes just a bit eh? Ha.... I'm just defending a place that is very important to me that is full of earnest people who wish to write about their feelings. If someone cannot understand this then how evolved are they really?


Binaya.Ghimire 5 years ago

I think some who are deft on language and writing skills are are expecting more from the fellow hubbers.


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The Suburban Poet 5 years ago from Austin, Texas Author

That's understandable to a point; but it's the self-annointed stuff that gets on my nerves... I read some of his stuff and it's really good. Maybe better than I'm able to grasp. I have no context as I don't read the books of poets. I just try to express what happens to me in my life and in others that I observe; and I do it in my own way... it may be all shit... I may make $20 from Google in the end but for me it's fun. If someone asks my opinion of their work I would give it as best I could without crushing their spirit. That's my point...

They say, "Trust the art; not the artist" but sometimes I have a hard time separating character flaws from the work.

You by the way are always very nice to me and very supportive so I hope you don't think I am talking about you in any way because you are a gracious person.


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LABrashear 5 years ago from My Perfect Place, USA

Thank you for posting this. There are so many differing tastes out there. I have only published one hub...and after reading the comment you are referring to, became very self-conscious. I would hate to think there might be someone out there that was about to post something spectacular and didn't because they also had second thoughts. Luckily, there are some very kind people on here that know how to be supportive and not tear down. Kudos!


Binaya.Ghimire 5 years ago

Suburban, thanks for your appreciation. I also try to be supportive as much as I can. I'm not perfect either, if someone's points my flaws, I try to be positive. Because when we take this road, to become a writer, we must know there will be merciless criticism.


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The Suburban Poet 5 years ago from Austin, Texas Author

That's right... for me I understand an opinion about religion, poitics or war is inviting a comment and I've weathered some strong dissent. I've been insulted but I worked through it with the person and we are respectful of each other. That's all I ask. I wonder if Jackie (?) understands that many people on here are from SE Asia and are publishing work in their 2nd or even possibly 3rd language. The translation issues are not to be underestimated....


Binaya.Ghimire 5 years ago

I agree, English is also my second language.


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The Suburban Poet 5 years ago from Austin, Texas Author

LABrashear - I almost missed your message. Don't let ANYONE intimidate you into a shell. You post what you want because that is what we are here for.


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The Suburban Poet 5 years ago from Austin, Texas Author

@Binaya - 2nd language? See... then I'm all the more impressed....


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mckbirdbks 5 years ago from Emerald Wells, Just off the crossroads,Texas

You have raised sarcasm to new heights. I can't tell if you are talking about any one specifically. Perhaps that is best. Your poetry here flowed well and it appears that you had some fun with this one.


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Teylina 5 years ago

LABrashear, I'm glad SP caught and commented on your comment. When I was reading this, all I could think is that lately I haven't written (well, I haven't really been writing for a few weeks, but I've started again) anything good. I think I've just been ranting! Horrors! mckbird caught it like I did--not sure if aimed at one of us or just wanted to say it! Hope the latter, altho' ---- 2d language? I make way too many errors in only one! As usual, you have a way w/words, my friend!


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The Suburban Poet 5 years ago from Austin, Texas Author

mckbirdbks - Ha... this was directed at a hub titled "Mediocrity." The author was a bit harsh as to the collective abilities of the hubbers so I took exception and came up with this as a bit of a retort.


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The Suburban Poet 5 years ago from Austin, Texas Author

@Teylina - As I told mckbird this was specifically directed to another hub so fear not! I wouldn't unilaterally go after another hubber unless I thought they were an extremist (of course that would assume I am qualified to identify extreme commentary).... Thank you for commenting!


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mckbirdbks 5 years ago from Emerald Wells, Just off the crossroads,Texas

Thanks S.P., I went and checked his Hub out. Among the best Slam poets in the country. woowho Your retort was written with more style than his tort. haha


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kathryn1000 5 years ago from London

I noticed some months ago that nast comments were put on a hub that had a few grammatical errors so I wrote a hub called "English ~Grammar for forgetful people" to aid them.As you say it may be a second language or they couldn't go to college etc.a good one.I like it.


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The Suburban Poet 5 years ago from Austin, Texas Author

It's about civility. If you can help someone then send them a private message. Why bash people? To me it is is an indication a lack of emotional development in the person who criticizes. Thanks for commenting....


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snakeslane 5 years ago from Canada

You said it well Suburban Poet, retort or not, the poem speaks well on its own, thanks, you give me courage.


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The Suburban Poet 5 years ago from Austin, Texas Author

@mckbirdbks - Iknow... the great one... maybe he is... but I don't care if you are Hemmingway. Don't be an ass.... it's that simple. I have no time for that and I question the need to contrast oneself in such a vain manner.

@snakeslane - Thank you. Have courage. Write. Don't worry about anyone else. It's your life and your words. I think about simple guitar players who have nice songs and I think of a group like Yes which is incredibly technical and comples; after listening to YES a person might say "what's the use." But there is room for everyone to express themselves.


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Teylina 5 years ago

Did you ever hear Wakeman w/London Philharmonic do "Journey to the Center of the Earth?" - Comparable to your comment re YES--nobody quite like 'em! You are so right that we can't be intimidated by others. It got me on my 1st hub, and then everyone turned out to be so helpful and supportive I got past it, altho I still feel a little intimidated sometimes! KATHRYN: if I didn't comment on that hub, I meant to. I make typo errors that become nightmares when I see them in print, but I'm usually a grammatical fanatic, and it's hard to keep my mouth shut--that was a great hub! We all can be reminded, even if we already "know" it. Again, SP, I loved this hub!


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The Suburban Poet 5 years ago from Austin, Texas Author

@Teylina - "Yes" I've heard it... I've seen YES a couple of times in person but they didn't perform any of Wakeman's work. He was there.... I love them and listened quite a bit on the head phones back in high school. I'm glad you like this hub and as you can probably tell I'm the macho guy who defends those who might not feel worthy. Don't worry about insults. If you can learn something then open your mind but don't let someone intimidate you into going away....


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Teylina 5 years ago

Not. Just backing you up; glad you wrote this--it needed writing. FYI: wasn't comparing YES and Wakeman; just two totally different types--I'm a Yes lover from waaaay back. But have to admit I was taken aback a bit by that particular piece of Wakeman's. Most people haven't listened to it. Surprised or glad you have-once may be enough, but still way above mediocrity! Either of 'em!


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The Suburban Poet 5 years ago from Austin, Texas Author

@Teylina - Wakeman and YES are different but they are also classically grounded. I actually have the piano music for The Six Wives... I used to play it a bit... It's not exactly Yours Is No Disgrace but it's a good example of Wakeman's abilities....


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Steele Fields 5 years ago from drexel hill,pa

I don't know what you guys are talking about but I just wanted to comment on your poem--it must've taken you quite a while to come up with all of those rhymes. It's an interesting piece--rather cathartic I gather. Well, writing is one of the best ways to exorcise those demons and kick some poet's ass while you're at it, lol. A question though: why are so many Aussies on the site? I've noticed it, but until you said it, I thought it was just a coincidence. They're such nice people-- the Aussies have been so very nice to me when reading and commenting on my hubs. I even think you commented awhile back. Well, thanks for that and for the nice job on this:)


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Maralexa 5 years ago from Vancouver, Canada and San Jose del Cabo, Mexico

What a sublime reply to an obnoxious and judgmental declaration. You have written a beautiful parry to a pretentious, self-important, insensitive ass who has an arrogantly high evaluation of his own worth.

You remind me to not only hold my tongue but to guard my thoughts so as not to fall into the same trap. Well Done!


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The Suburban Poet 5 years ago from Austin, Texas Author

@Steele Fields - thank you. I was clearly not pleased with the arrogance that was displayed so I started this as a lark and went with it. I had fun with the retort but I've subsequently acknowledged the culprits work because I didn't come here to make enemies. But I just can't stand chest beating so I beat back. There are a lot of Aussie's and lot's of other SE Asians too. It's interesting and I think it's great that you folks on the other side of the world are up and about!

@Maralexa - Thank you! Ha.... I'm not sure what to think about criticisms. I've read a few bios on Hubpages inviting criticism and in that regard I think helpful advice is always good. But to just come on, post a few items, not get the response you want, declare the site to be mediocre and then to say further that the pieces you posted were just a few throwaways anyway just does not set well with me. I'm sure you'd never come off like that. I don't care if it's Hemmingway. Did I say that already? If you are uncivil then you can be great on your street. I don't need you on mine.

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