(I do not own this photo.) People waiting in line in purgatory. will there number ever be called?
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"Take a number." They said.
"And wait to be called.
This is the land of the dead.
Welcome all."

There were hundreds, no thousands,
waiting in line.
I was number five thousand
and nintey-nine.

It felt as if Time stood still.
We had hardly moved an inch.
I couldn't see where the line did end,
and for my life back my heart did wrench.

If I had known this is what had awaited me,
I would have never walked through that door.
The afterlife is much more scarier once you know,
than it ever was before.

The anticipation, the nervousness.
Never knowing when your time is up.
How long have I been standing here?
Enough is enough.

I'm already dead,
what more can they do?
So I stepped out of line
and cut in front a hundred or 2.

Still I was no closer than before,
My number still the same.
And the person in front of me,
hadn't even changed.

I had made no difference.
I was stuck in this place.
My mind went frantic
Surely it was Hell I faced.

This was my purgatory,
I soon realized.
And this was my punishment
for wasting away my life.

© Copyright NMJ 2012

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cleaner3 4 years ago from Pueblo, Colorado

Very nice Nikki, This is how I like my poetry.

Deep, Dark, makes you wonder, and then your unconcious self tells your concious self something. So this is what you been doing. missed you!

Poetic Fool 4 years ago

God that would be hell for me! Waiting ... Still, this does make you think. Life is short and we don't know how short! We'd better live it while we can. Thanks for the slap up side the head. Voted up!

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Senoritaa 4 years ago

Mind blowing! Makes you want to value the only heaven, the earth!! Absolutely brilliant Nikki!

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WD Curry 111 4 years ago from Space Coast

I had the same experience at the Florida Department of Motor-vehicles.

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Nikkij504gurl 4 years ago from Louisiana Author

Yes that would definitely be hell. and I sometimes feel like I am stuck waiting now, and I need to get out of this rut and do something with my life. I dont want to waste it away. and I dont want to die before I get to amount to anything. We need to leave our mark on the world while we still can. We have so much to accomplish, and yes life is too short, any day could be your last. You never know. Thank you all for the comments. You are all beautiful! WD Curry your comment made me laugh out loud because thats exactly how this purgatory should be viewed as. A never ending wait at the dmv, only there are no seats just a long line to wait in and a little ticket with a high ass number on it.

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Astra Nomik 4 years ago from Edge of Reality and Known Space

I like this image of waiting in some waiting place. Stuck in an waiting line is hell, in my opinion. But the desolation would be so apparent with that many thousands in front of us.

Waiting for things to move forward and happen for us is agonizing. I can relate to that so much, Nikki. Nice hub and so well written as always. :)

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Nikkij504gurl 4 years ago from Louisiana Author

yea me too. thanks cathy! Hugs!

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damian0000 3 years ago from Belfast

Great hub... very thought-provoking and profound.

I am glad that you stepped out of the line :-)

Time is much more than money... time and health are the most precious things we have...


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Nikkij504gurl 3 years ago from Louisiana Author

Yes they are. Thanks.

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