Ravaged Brambles

Photo by  i,max on Flickr
Photo by i,max on Flickr


We had a black berry bush at the end of the lane

He and the children took what they could reach

The bush enjoyed the visitors

And the array of berry stained smiles

Her fruit was nothing to herself

Until it nourished another

A relationship formed beneficial

To both bush and bee

Winged ones would feast on what

The earthbound could not even see

Berries and thorns entwined

Guaranteed those of greed would bleed

Time and again all came to disappointment when

She had nothing left to give

One night a black bear came

Tore her from the hill

Raked every sweetness from her

Left, a pile of ravaged brambles

She died back, broken, black and rotting

Or so it seemed till spring

Rising strong from those same roots

A lush and lovely bush

Heavy with sweet fruit,

Once more ripe for the picking


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dohn121 7 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York

OMG. I loved this poem. I think that this is the first time you used personification in you poetry, Randy. Very clever!

BTW, congrats on 300 fans!!!


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Hmrjmr1 7 years ago from Georgia, USA

Nice Poem RB Like the style!


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Randy Behavior 7 years ago from Near the Ocean Author

Thanks Dohn, but I think Cherry Pie and Lollipop count. Its always food with me. Perhaps I was an apple tree in my past life. :) And thanks for the congrats; I hit 50,000 views too but I guess that doesn't count as a milestone.

Thank you Hmrjmr1, I'm glad you liked this one.


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shamelabboush 7 years ago

Very symbolic and I like the simile.


Miss Take 7 years ago

lovely poem nice one


Am I dead, yet? 7 years ago

Randy--again marvelous. What I love most about your poetry is the transitions you make. Meager items--berries of all things signify wealth and renewal. I agree with Dohn's statement.

Ovations dearest Randy!


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Randy Behavior 7 years ago from Near the Ocean Author

Hi Shamel! I'm glad you liked this one.

Thank You Miss Take!


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Randy Behavior 7 years ago from Near the Ocean Author

Hi AIDY!!!! I didn't know that berries signify wealth and renewal. That is a lucky accident I guess. Super hugs to you.


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I*n*v*i*c*t*u*s 7 years ago

Simply beautiful, Randy! So symbolic and beautifully woven!

Happy to see a 99 score, too! let us see a 100, shall we? :)


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Randy Behavior 7 years ago from Near the Ocean Author

Thanks so much Invictus! I wouldn't have noticed the 99 if you hadn't brought it to my attention; don't think I've ever been over 97 before.


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alekhouse 7 years ago from Louisville, Kentucky

This is beautiful, Randy, Love the symbolism.


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Randy Behavior 7 years ago from Near the Ocean Author

Thank you alekhouse. I'm glad you enjoyed this one.


logic,commonsense 7 years ago

This is just another great piece from you! Love them all!

Don't know what inspires you to come up with these, but please keep going!


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Randy Behavior 7 years ago from Near the Ocean Author

Thanks for stopping by Logic. My life inspires me. Its all personal experience.


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Micky Dee 6 years ago

Very nice. I had a crop of black berry bushes. The best dessert in my opinion is black berry cobbler -maybe ala mode!


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Randy Behavior 6 years ago from Near the Ocean Author

Thanks for stopping by Micky Dee. I never met a berry I didn't like, and yes cobbler is a good way to use them for sure.


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Tom Rubenoff 6 years ago from United States

The death and resurrection of the black raspberry.

When I was a kid they grew along the steep banks of the creek that cut through our yard. They were generous, feeding the children with fingers careful of their thorns. My mom made jam. The berries were so sweet. When I taste them today I remember the sweetness the berries had despite anything.

Thank you for this strong and stirring imagery.


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Randy Behavior 6 years ago from Near the Ocean Author

You are quite welcome Tom.


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James McV Sailor 6 years ago from Northern California

Very nice Randy! I've always looked forward to the Spring.... there's potential in the air!

JM


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Randy Behavior 6 years ago from Near the Ocean Author

Glad you liked it James. Think are starting to bloom around here on my edge of things.


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MFB III 6 years ago from United States

all that is sweetest in us never dies, it is carried on in the lives we touch, in the children we bear or teach, and in the writings we leave Behind. Even when something more then we can bear sweeps us into oblivion, we have already planted seeds with the acts of kindness we completed before we became fodder for fate. Superb write Randy~~~MFB III~~P.S.~~Questions are almost done.


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Randy Behavior 6 years ago from Near the Ocean Author

Thank you for your kinds comments, all MFB. I was wondering the other day what would happen to my poetry if I were hit by a bus. Who would have the rights to them, everyone?


Doug Turner Jr. 5 years ago

Vintage Randy. A vibrant, interesting surface tale with an orgy of metaphors throbbing beneath the surface.


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Randy Behavior 5 years ago from Near the Ocean Author

Google didn't like you using "orgy," I had to un-spam you. :D


Doug Turner Jr. 5 years ago

Yeah, as if google doesn't know all about orgies...


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Randy Behavior 5 years ago from Near the Ocean Author

Lol, they labeled you spam again! You're such a potty mouth.

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