The raw deal by motive force


Brains like Einstein
Mind so sharp like a porcupine
Evolved from the primitive
Exceeding that of relative
Remoteness of a gadget
Electromotive like a magnet
storming display on the worlds stage
worded aggravation spun this thought maze
leaping through portals for a billion days
A subterranean sensational phase


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Trains on Grind time
Spine sparks its inferno sting

like acidic turpentine
Revolved from that Fiery motive
Bleeding by perspective so explosive
Swing like a Javelin
At mock speed traveling
centipede mind-frame
Playing those arcade time games
as the earth skips its heart beat
You face success being burnt by your own heat




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MrsBrownsParlour 3 years ago from Chicagoland, Illinois

Strong, active imagery and really cool video---great job, full of character!


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CloudExplorer 3 years ago from New York City Author

Thanks @MrsBrownsParlour, I had fun with this one a few days back, and finally unleashed it, glad you liked it.


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Kasman 3 years ago from Bartlett, Tennessee

I felt like I heard a song in the background just listening to it. I could almost hear the beats to it and the rhythm. Have you thought about just straight up songwriting? Voting up Mike.


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always exploring 3 years ago from Southern Illinois

You've got that groovy sound in your poetry, a natural. Loved it Cloud..Thank you..


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Gypsy Rose Lee 3 years ago from Riga, Latvia

Fantastic and great trip. Love the video. Passing this on.


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CloudExplorer 3 years ago from New York City Author

@Kasman, Thanks bro yeah I use to rap a great deal and been doing it for about 18+ years now, so yeah my poetry sometimes surfaces upon that genre every once in a while.


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CloudExplorer 3 years ago from New York City Author

@always exploring, than you Ruby, it does feel good to release these poems every now and then, because holding back such thoughts in my head never does me any good, you know. It sure was fun to write it :)


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CloudExplorer 3 years ago from New York City Author

@Gypsy Rose Lee, thanks for the cool comment and for sharing, so glad you like my poem here, I had fun with it.

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