Roses are Red ~Give the famous poem a different ring

First the question wasn't asked by me so i take no Credit

bellawritter23: Give the famous poem a different ring..... Roses are red, violets are blue

"Original poem by Sir Edmund Spenser It was upon a Sommers shynie day, When Titan faire his beames did display, In a fresh fountaine, farre from all mens vew, She bath'd her brest, the boyling heat t'allay; She bath'd with roses red, and violets blew, And all the sweetest flowres, that in the forrest grew. Roses are red violets are blue sugar is sweet and so are you.asked by bellawritter23

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

Uriel

In theory roses are supposedly red

And so is our little love bed

As on my flesh your little demons have fed

Until lots of blood has been shed

Can you see the hate that fluctuates whenever I say your name?

Can’t you see that even in the dark you have over burned our flame?

And when the violets turn black as love fades

And death claims my cold heart with its blades

Deny it but you know your love ain’t that sweet

Sometimes it knocks us off our feet

And as you sank your fangs into my skin

And I watched everything burn in a spin

And when the cold settles to rip my heart

Will you be merciful as you tear it apart?

And I tensed under your skin against mine so coarse

I will eternally remember those little words of yours

Roses are red violets are blue

sugar is sweet and so are you

All credit concerning the question goes to bellawritter23, incase u want to share u can answer the question yourself :D 

Enjoy and thanks again to bellawritter23

More by this Author


Comments 8 comments

Mentalist acer profile image

Mentalist acer 5 years ago from A Voice in your Mind!

A beautifuly wilted rose,Uriel.;)


sam3m profile image

sam3m 5 years ago from New York

Or:

roses are red,

violets are purple,

and you are sweet

as maple surple.


Uriel profile image

Uriel 5 years ago from Lebanon Author

Mentalist Acer: thanks for the comment :)

Sam3m : yeh nice play on the words :D I like it :D Have a great day


ek ellis profile image

ek ellis 5 years ago

Awesome, love the way you wrote this super kudos :)


Doug Turner Jr. 5 years ago

Ouch. Tough love. Good poetic take on this exercise.


Uriel profile image

Uriel 5 years ago from Lebanon Author

ek ellis & Doug Turner Jr. thanks a lot for the comments and stopping by :D


epigramman profile image

epigramman 5 years ago

...well you are certainly an 'epic' writer - and you have a lovely poetic disposition for words -and that always makes for an adventurous and satisfying journey for your readers!


Uriel profile image

Uriel 5 years ago from Lebanon Author

epigramman thanks for the comment :D I am really glad you liked it :)i hope all the readers would enjoy reading it as well :) As usual i am really grateful for the support it means a lot :)

Best regards

Uriel

    Sign in or sign up and post using a HubPages Network account.

    0 of 8192 characters used
    Post Comment

    No HTML is allowed in comments, but URLs will be hyperlinked. Comments are not for promoting your articles or other sites.


    Click to Rate This Article
    working