Sarah's Victory

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The Funeral

She walked out of the hospital room, shaking her head. She was trying to hold onto her control. He had just died; she could not allow her feelings free rein yet. She needed to get home and notify their family and friends. There was the funeral to plan and the wake. She could make it through that, she was sure. She had controlled her emotions for years; she knew she could do it.

Sarah headed for the pickup in the parking lot. She was glad he had not been driving it when he had the heart attack, she really preferred to drive it and it was newer. Surprising, he usually had the newer vehicle. She mused on that surprising fact. His vehicle usually got fixed and hers went to the junk yard. She didn’t need a vehicle as much as he did.

She went home and called the family. Then she called the funeral home and told them to set the plans in motion. John had planned for everything so meticulously. All she had to do was let them know where he was. Their three children, all in their mid to late thirties were surprised and saddened. They thought he was going to live forever. He was so strong; nothing was more surprising to them.

His sister and two brothers were on the way with their spouses. They all had such wonderful, stable marriages. They were a model family, every one of them prosperous and seemingly madly in love. Sarah wondered if their family bliss was as false as hers had been. They all had nice homes in affluent communities. They all had very good jobs and had their estates planned out.

The funeral went off without a hitch and Sarah breathed a sigh of relief when the last ones left to go home. She was finally going to be able to relax and let her feelings go. She didn’t know how she had managed but she had.


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Sarah's Torment

She thought about her marriage to John. It had been a rough first few years but she had finally gotten things figured out. The arguments had ceased as she figured out what she needed to do.

She needed to be the perfect wife. That was what John and his family expected and that was what they got. She got her act together and things were a lot smoother when she quit trying to do things her way. She put the last bowl of food on the table as John drove into the driveway. She arrived at the door moments before it opened, with a smile and a kiss waiting. The household finances were pared down to a minimum with gourmet meals on the table.

The house was always spotless, and decorated in the latest style. She worked in the vegetable garden to stretch the money so that he could have the prime meat cuts. Only the healthiest food was permitted in the house and their children thrived.

And of course she was a whore in the bedroom. That was what the perfect wife was; a lady in the parlor, a genius in the kitchen and a whore in the bedroom. She studied pornography as if her life depended on it. She was up for anything that John thought he might be interested in. That was the most important thing to him. He had a wild imagination and used her to fulfill it.

She learned after the first two times, never refuse him, he would make her pay. The first time was when they had just been married for three months. She had the flu and felt terrible. Her muscles hurt so bad that she did not feel like moving. John had reached for her and she had said that she didn’t feel up to it. He threw her out the door into the back yard and told her to go away then. The next day she called him to talk about things and he apologized. She went back.

The second time, they had been married for two years; she had fallen from a ladder painting and bruised her ribs. She asked if they could postpone it for a day or two. He said no, they were going to do it whether she wanted to or not. She tried to leave him the next day, but he had found her and beat her. She was told that she was never going to leave him and if she tried, he would kill her. That is when things clicked into place.

She started to sob as the realization hit her. John was gone from her life. For so many years, she had been the perfect wife. She did not know what she was going to do without him around. No more prostituting herself to her husband. Not being allowed to refuse sex had made her feel like she was being raped every time he touched her. She dreaded the look he got every night. He enjoyed seeing her lust for him and got mad when she didn't; so she learned to put a mask on. The lust mask, she called it.

She put it on every time he touched her. He also enjoyed trying to make her slip, so that he could punish her for it. He would surprise her once in a while when he would suddenly decide it was time. Her face would show the repulsion she felt and he would punch her in the ribs or the stomach, never in the face, that might show. Then she got the cold treatment until she went to him and begged for it. She learned to never let her emotions show through. It was easier that way. Now she wondered if she could ever act natural again, if she could ever let her real feelings show.


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Recovering Finally

Sarah started going back to church, hoping that God would forgive her seeming rejection of Him. John did not go to church and what he did not do, must not be good. She knew what the Bible said. She knew seven times seven times that you should forgive someone but she was still hesitant. She had learned about duplicity from a master.

She sold the house, she had never liked it anyway, and John had picked it out. She bought a nice little bungalow and fixed it the way she liked it. She joined some of the community organizations hoping to fill some time. She was starting to feel more comfortable about showing her true feelings. She was a contributor to the women’s shelter, sponsoring battered women’s groups. They never guessed that she was one.

Sarah was finally recovering from her trauma of over forty years. She knew one thing only, she would never again put herself in the position of a man being in charge of the intimate things that she did with her body. She would go without intimacy forever if that is what it took. She had outlived him and she was in charge again. The final victory was hers.


This is a totally fictitious story. Women are abused daily by their husbands. All abuse is not physical, a lot is emotional and verbal. All abuse is wrong. Being forced to do something against your will is abuse. Being forced to have sex is rape, it does not matter if you are married to the person. Don't put up with it, leave it. You will be much happier.


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Ghost32 4 years ago

Well done, Becky.

A memory triggered by this Hub:

The bit about Sarah outlasting John and then--because of that--being able to become herself is certainly no joke. It doesn't even have to be an abusive relationship, at least not in the traditional sense.

When my Dad died in '97, after things had settled down for a month or two, Mom told me she owed me something on the order of $4,000.

Now, Pam and I weren't exactly flush that year. Except for the mineral rights he passed on to me--which we all thought were worthless at that time--there wasn't much to Dad's estate. But Mom explained.

In 1980, when Dad's father passed on, he left a will that passed his well used Dodge pickup on to me. MY father, though, was apoplectic. He'd pulled Granddad out of a North Dakota hospital, taken him home to Mom, and they hosted the ailing gentleman till he dropped dead on their floor one night about 6 months later. The Dodge (except, again, for those "worthless" mineral rights) was the most valuable thing in Granddad's estate.

At the time, I shrugged, told the old man, "Give me a dollar and I'll sign the truck over to you." Which we did, except I don't remember actually getting the dollar.

Mom, it turned out, thought that was WRONG. But she chose not to confront her husband about it, which was most likely good thinking on her part. He would have been "hurt" at the very least.

So she waited 17 years, until he was dead and gone and had no more say in it...and reimbursed me for my loss, calculating it at "current market value" of a similar 8-year-old Dodge truck.

Just saying.

Voted Up and More.


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Becky Katz 4 years ago from Hereford, AZ Author

Thank you for the feedback and the well done. I have been nervously waiting for someone to read it that would comment. I thought it was written ok, but first time jitters, ya know. Well, not first time but the other one, I knew was funny. This is a little more dramatic and of a more serious nature. I wasn't sure if people would read it through.


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LR45 4 years ago from Wales, UK

A thought provoking piece, Becky. What a strong character Sarah is. Your story may be fictitious, but as you say, it surely holds a grain of truth for many women. Well done.


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Hyphenbird 4 years ago from America-Broken But Still Beautiful

Hello Becky. Congratulations on your fiction adventure. It really is fun to let the imagination soar and creative writing also can teach. Sadly, many people live lives of "quiet desperation" like the woman in your story. So many picture an abuser as a dirty, big bellied beer drinker in a trailer park. But they live everywhere in all social and financial scales. Your Sarah really lives somewhere in a real life. It is sad and I think you presented it well.

I find it very interesting that she never told after his death but helped the women's shelter while they never knew she had been a battered woman.


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50 Caliber 4 years ago from Arizona

Becky, a great tale to be sure, it's so good it reeks of truth, but then I've known many a mean spirited male in my day so it really echoed several and the games I've heard them brag on over a beer. Wasn't never impressed with ones ability ti fight knowing 10 to 1 they were going to win before they plotted it.

voted this up and then some, did you tell me you were writing? If so sorry 'bout being late to the party,

Peace,

dust


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teaches12345 4 years ago

This was a very informative hub on what goes on behind the scenes in an abusive relationship. It is a prison for the one being abused and demeaning. Her positive turn around after his death is one that many abused women follow.


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The Frog Prince 4 years ago from Arlington, TX

Becky - Interesting article. The "intimacy" part caught my attention because what the woman had experienced had very little to do with "intimacy." Her husband was using her to satisfy his lust which is far from intimacy.

How can one do without "intimacy" if it has never been experienced? A sad but true question.

The Frog


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Becky Katz 4 years ago from Hereford, AZ Author

Lr45, I really appreciate your feedback on this. It is only my second fiction piece and I was really nervous. Thank you for coming by to visit.


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Becky Katz 4 years ago from Hereford, AZ Author

Hyphen, I know of many of the other abusers and I know of a few of the very respectable looking and acting ones. They are all scum some just hide it better. I feel so for the ones who are stuck in this position and have helped some to get away from their abusers. I feel that someday Sarah will let it be known but only after she has healed a little more. She is not ready yet. Thank you for the great feedback and for coming by to visit.


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Becky Katz 4 years ago from Hereford, AZ Author

Dusty, so good to see you here. I am so happy that you have come by to read my story. I didn't tell anyone I was writing, I just had this idea in my head and when it was all there, I wrote it and published quick before I lost my nerve. I have written a few things that I think you have missed though. So glad you came by to visit.


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Becky Katz 4 years ago from Hereford, AZ Author

teaches, The behind the scenes is usually much deeper than what is out in front. It takes a long time to heal afterwards. Most of them want to help others as much as they can when they do get out of it. Thank you for coming by to visit.


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Becky Katz 4 years ago from Hereford, AZ Author

TFP, I agree with you totally but I wanted to get the idea across without being blunt or crude. That was the only term I could think of. I guess that was a failure on my part. Thank you for your feedback and for coming by to visit.


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writer20 4 years ago from Southern Nevada

Becky, This is a great story you have written well. Keep writing please. I'm so glad that nasty husband is dead.

Voted up awesome and interesting, Joyce.


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mckbirdbks 4 years ago from Emerald Wells, Just off the crossroads,Texas

Very well written Becky. Good staging, good format, good message.


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Becky Katz 4 years ago from Hereford, AZ Author

writer20, I am so pleased by the response to this. Her husband was really a piece of work. I didn't like him either. He felt he had rights to her body whenever he wanted whether she did or not. All abuse is not physical either and I think the verbal could be worse. It is going after their mind. Thank you for the votes and for coming by to visit.


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WillStarr 4 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

Very good, Becky. You managed to vividly portray an evil without resorting to crudeness. Well done!


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Becky Katz 4 years ago from Hereford, AZ Author

mck, Thank you for the good review. I was so nervous when I published this last night that I went over and asked Ghost to read it and tell me what he thought. I can trust him to tell me and help me if it wasn't good. Waiting for someone to read it was totally nerve wracking. Thank you for coming by to visit.


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Becky Katz 4 years ago from Hereford, AZ Author

Will, from you, this compliment was delightful. So many of us look at your writing as the pinnacle. I really do not understand why you are not published. Thank you for coming by to visit.


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marcoujor 4 years ago from Jeffersonville PA

Dear Becky,

Your modesty is understandable as this has a new feel for you. However, I must agree with all of the beautiful and comments I have just reviewed by some well-respected writers.

This story has passion behind every word, giving a message to the reader of empowerment and survival in the most dire of circumstances. It is authentic, meaningful and well-written. I hope to see more from you in this genre.

Voted UP & UABI. Hugs, mar.


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Becky Katz 4 years ago from Hereford, AZ Author

mar, thank you so much for the beautiful comment. I am so touched and surprised by the comments. I have been struggling, trying to write some fiction. Even my daughter has laughed at my attempts. I will keep trying and we shall see what comes out. Some may be publishable and some won't. I am so happy that you came by to visit.


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always exploring 4 years ago from Southern Illinois

Becky, Never fear about being a good writer, you are. The story is so familiar, one of my Sisters lived this life. She could never be perfect enough. He died. She is now living the life she always dreamed of. Thank you for sharing. There are still many women just like Sarah, hopefully they will read this story....


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My Minds Eye53 4 years ago from Tennessee

Great story Becky. Sadly a lot of women who out live husbands like this usually turn around and marry another one just like him. Sometimes it is because they think that is the way they deserve to be treated.

Sometimes the church is the reason for this attitude men get. My dad told my mom that he paid the priest 2 dollars for her and he owned her. My dad was not a mean person, this was the way he was raised. Can you imagine a mean person being raised that way?

Voted up hon.


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Becky Katz 4 years ago from Hereford, AZ Author

always, I am so glad that your sister is free of that man. I wish that we all had the courage to leave someone like that. Some look at staying with them and living through it is easier. They do not realize that there are groups that will help them get away from these men. Mental abuse is just as bad as physical and should be gotten away from also. Thank you for visiting.


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Becky Katz 4 years ago from Hereford, AZ Author

My Minds Eye, I know that many women remarry men just like the old ones. I want to get the word out that there is another way and that no one deserves abuse. Maybe someone will get the message that we all deserve to be treated with respect. Thank you for coming by to visit.


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PegCole17 4 years ago from Dallas, Texas

Hi Becky, The depth of emotion you were able to portray in this story was well done. It was a sad reminder that this sort of thing can happen to women trapped in a relationship with someone that controlling and self centered. At long last she is free from this abuse.

Peg


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Becky Katz 4 years ago from Hereford, AZ Author

Peg, I am humbled by your comment. I am so glad that I could portray her emotions in order to show the depth of the hurt she was feeling. Controlling and self centered men are unfortunately on the rise. So many feel that they are more important than anyone else. I really appreciate you visiting.


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bmcoll3278 4 years ago from Longmont, Colorado

Great Job again. I was hooked in from the start and could not stop reading. I also wanted to dig John up and revive him so I could kill him again. My father taught me the value of respecting woman, I have no respect for men who do not. I read your comment on woman marring the same kind of men again. That is so true. Men do it as well with the same kind of women. I broke the cycle 20 years ago. with one simple statement. see it in my hub http://hubpages.com/relationships/How-to-meet-the-...


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Becky Katz 4 years ago from Hereford, AZ Author

bmcoll, Thank you for the wonderful comment.I tried hard to make him unlikable. Apparently, I succeeded. I am delighted that I hooked you from the start. I have never seen an abused person who did not end right back with another abuser. There are plenty to go around also. Thank you for coming by to visit.


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bmcoll3278 4 years ago from Longmont, Colorado

I also added to my hub with a link to this one. Hope you don't mind. It can happen . My wife was married to an abuser. She left him, And a few months later a cute locksmith made a key for her car and asked her out. Now we are going on 16 years. He tried a few treats ,But I am 6'4 215 pounds. and was in good shape then. He liked to hit woman. He was not so hip on trying it with a man my size.


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Becky Katz 4 years ago from Hereford, AZ Author

That is fine. All links are welcome.


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Rosemay50 4 years ago from Hawkes Bay - NewZealand

Becky this was very well written and you got the message across excellently. So many women have to suffer this kind of treatment behind closed doors from brutes like this.

When they do manage to escape the prison one way or another along with the sense of freesom comes a sense of being a fish out of water until they find themselves again.

A great story Becky and I would love to read more in this genre from you.

Up and awesome


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Becky Katz 4 years ago from Hereford, AZ Author

Rosemay, Thank you for the wonderful comment. I will see what I can do about writing more. I had to write several to get one that was publishable. Thank you for coming by to visit.


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Nessabriet18 4 years ago from Philippines

Great work! I'am touched... ;)


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Becky Katz 4 years ago from Hereford, AZ Author

Nessabtriet18, I am so glad I could touch you. This is only my 2nd fiction story so it really makes me feel good to get all of these wonderful comments. Thank you for coming by to visit.


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snakeslane 4 years ago from Canada

Wow Becky, powerful, no holds barred tale you tell. I keep getting this visual from 'Sleeping with the Enemy' that gorgeous house they lived in, and she lived in fear. It is a story that never gets old. Your story dispels the myth that 'well to do' people don't behave this way. Sad that Sarah had to wait for the abuser to die before she was free of him.


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Becky Katz 4 years ago from Hereford, AZ Author

Yes,too sad. I am glad you liked this. Sleeping with the Enemy was a powerful movie. Well to do people do have this problem just as much as poor people, they just have learned to hide it better. Thanks for coming by to visit.


Sunnie Day 4 years ago

Becky this was truly a great story to share. It happens more than people realize sadly, stripping a women of dignity and worth. I hope many women young and old will read this and recognize what a normal relationship is verses a twisted one..Thank you.

Hugs,

Sunnie


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Alastar Packer 4 years ago from North Carolina

Good response here Becky, glad to see it. This may have been fiction but reads like its not. A real marriage is 50-50 with respect for one another. You expressed it well why she didn't leave sooner but still, Sarah should have gotten free of that loser-abuser long before, come what may.


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Becky Katz 4 years ago from Hereford, AZ Author

Sunnie, I am delighted that you like my story. I hope someone will find it helpful to get out of an abusive relationship. Thank you for coming by to visit.


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Becky Katz 4 years ago from Hereford, AZ Author

Alastar, Happy that you like my story. Marriage requires respect from both for it to work. If there is not respect, it will not work. Leaving is very hard for women who are threatened and scared. Sometimes it seems easier to stay. They should always get away. I am happy you came by to visit.


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katyzzz 4 years ago from Sydney, Australia

Good on ya gal, I knew you could do it, powerful stuff of value to far too many women. Fortunately I am not one of those and never have been, that is indeed fortunate, your writing can be a powerful tool for good.


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Becky Katz 4 years ago from Hereford, AZ Author

katyzzz, Sometimes the story just comes to us. This was one that did that. All in one day. Once it was there, it just had to be typed. This one was easy, next one, who knows. Thank you for coming by to visit.


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dahoglund 4 years ago from Wisconsin Rapids

My wife used to work wit an organization for battered women. I was saddened by women who went back to their spouses afterwards.


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Becky Katz 4 years ago from Hereford, AZ Author

dahoglund, I know what you mean. It saddens me too. Thank you for coming by to visit.


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drbj 4 years ago from south Florida

Hi, Becky. This was a realistic and engrossing story. Do not ever doubt your ability again as a writer of fiction. Well done and voted up. I have spoken!


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Becky Katz 4 years ago from Hereford, AZ Author

drbj, Yes, Ma'am. I was doubtful because I have never written fiction. I should do better next time. Maybe!! Thank you for coming by to visit.


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Twilight Lawns 4 years ago from Norbury-sur-Mer, Surrey, England. U.K.

Bleak, Becky, bleak and informative.

I am afraid this attitude is so strongly ingrained with so many men and women. The men think it is their right, and the women think that this is the way it must be.

How very sad, but how horribly true.

Well written. I am quite depressed, because I know there are facilities, sanctuaries and "rescues" out there, but too few women take advantage of them, thinking "This is bound to get better" and unfortunately it doesn't.


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Becky Katz 4 years ago from Hereford, AZ Author

Ian, I am so delighted to see you here. I am sorry it is bleak but the whole subject is bleak. We need to educate these people that this is not how it should be. We need to tell them that they need to get away and stay away from this type of person. Thank you for the well written and I am so happy that you came by to visit.


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weestro 4 years ago from Virginia

Wow, great story becky, as sad of a tale it is I'm glad she was able to finally live in peace. Voted up!


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Becky Katz 4 years ago from Hereford, AZ Author

weestro, So glad you came by to read my first fiction story. We'll see if I can come up with some more cheerful ones. Thanks for visiting.


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Thelma Alberts 4 years ago from Germany

Very well written. It is a very sad story and I´m glad the man is dead. It´s over for the benefits of Sarah. I hope more women out there, have the courage to fight against the physical and emotional brutality of their husbands.

Voted up and thanks for sharing.


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Becky Katz 4 years ago from Hereford, AZ Author

Thelma, Thank you for your encouragement. I look at it not as being sad but as she is released from being sad. She is free now and can live the way she has always wanted to. I also hope that all women in this situation can get away from it and be free to live their way. Thank you for coming by to visit.


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b. Malin 4 years ago

Excellent, Excellent Hub Becky on such an Important subject...So many Women suffer silently...You're story drove it all home...as well as brought out some great Comments. My Votes to you, UP, Useful and Interesting.


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Becky Katz 4 years ago from Hereford, AZ Author

b. malin, I am so glad that you like my story. It is my first fiction and the wonderful comments that I have gotten make is much more special. Thank you for coming by to visit.


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Randy Godwin 4 years ago from Southern Georgia

Very realistic writing, Becky! I wondered if it was based on on real experience and was surprised by your disclaimer at the end. A good sign for an author to be able to create this effect. Rated up!

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Becky Katz 4 years ago from Hereford, AZ Author

Randy, I am so delighted that you thought this was real. It was imagination but It delights me. I have written many stories about my family and a little tongue in cheek Halloween story, but this is my first real fiction. I am so happy that you came by to visit.


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Randy Godwin 4 years ago from Southern Georgia

Glad to have read some of your work, Becky! And thanks for sharing my "Eulogy For A Witch" tale too! I got a bit carried away word wise with that one! LOL! Keep on writing! :)

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Becky Katz 4 years ago from Hereford, AZ Author

I read three of your stories. None of them are exactly short but they are so engrossing that you don't even notice.I will have to look through and see if you have more.


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Randy Godwin 4 years ago from Southern Georgia

Thanks for your kind encouragement, Becky. I love to write fiction rather than typical info articles, even though those are where the money is. Having sold a few creative pieces--published by others on both KindleBooks and AudioBooks--I may spend more time on the creative aspect of writng. It's sure a lot more fun at any rate! LOL!

Thanks again!

Randy


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Becky Katz 4 years ago from Hereford, AZ Author

I am just learning how to write it but love to read it. I will be looking for more from you.


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Mhatter99 4 years ago from San Francisco

Arlene August 22,2003


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Becky Katz 4 years ago from Hereford, AZ Author

Mhatter, I am not sure what this means. Is it someone this happened to? I appreciate you coming to visit.


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michememe 4 years ago

I grew up in a home of abuse. This is one thing I stated I will never tolerate, and I don't. Anyone hitting anyone man or woman. Abuse is wrong. I left my husband who had a terrible temper, I told him, I would never give him the chance to raise it hand at me. My children would not grow up as I did. Great hub.


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Becky Katz 4 years ago from Hereford, AZ Author

michememe, Good for you. Break the chain of abuse and keep it broken. I am proud of you and so happy for your children. Most people who are in abusive household growing up are either abusers or abused when they are grown. AIt is a proven fact. Thank you for coming by to read and visit.


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katyzzz 4 years ago from Sydney, Australia

A very meaningful story with a clear message to end. thought provoking and exceptional


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Becky Katz 4 years ago from Hereford, AZ Author

katyzzz, Glad you liked this. My first fiction and made me nervous as heck. Thanks for coming by to visit.


girltalksshop 4 years ago

How sad for the fictional character Sarah to endure through such things for so long. I wouldn't have lasted. But, I know those things do happen. Good hub, thanks for the share. Well written and I am sure will reach many as you already have the comments to prove so. : )


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Becky Katz 4 years ago from Hereford, AZ Author

girltalksshop, She had to endure because he wouldn't allow her to go free. She did win in the endand was free of him. Thank you for coming by to visit.


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shiningirisheyes 4 years ago from Upstate, New York

I can not thank you enough for this important story you have provided. You are doing so good shining a light on a terrible occurrence that happens far too often, along all races, all genders, young and old.

I am so proud of you for posting this and I commend you friend. Voting useful, awesome, interesting. and beautiful because she made it out whole through the other side.


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Becky Katz 4 years ago from Hereford, AZ Author

shiningirish eyes, I am so glad that you like this story. I was hoping that it would direct some attention to this important subject. I appreciate you coming by to visit.


femmeflashpoint 4 years ago

Becky,

For fiction, it reeked of fact. I mean that in a very good way, and still a sad way.

It would be wonderful if all mothers set an example of self-reliance, and self-respect to their sons and daughters. It would be perfect if fathers taught their children the same lesson.

Sadly, it repeats from generation to generation, and the hurt keeps rolling down the line.

You did good with this. Really, really good. :)

femme


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Becky Katz 4 years ago from Hereford, AZ Author

Femme, I understand what you mean and appreciate the compliment. Teaching self-respect is harder than it sounds. We can try to try and someone in the school says one unkind thing and blows it for them. Kids are so vulnerable now that bullying is acceptable in school. Our daughter was bullied by her teacher even.

When the child only sees this way of dealing with another person, they often do not realize that there is another way of treating them. Thus it just moves on to the next generation. The victims are the same way, they do not know that they should be treated with respect because they have seen their mothers or fathers treated with no respect. I really appreciate you coming by to visit and leaving such a great comment.


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The-Quietwarrior 4 years ago

Wow Becky...that was awesome..It made you sad and angry at the same time.


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Becky Katz 4 years ago from Hereford, AZ Author

Quiet Warrior, Thank you for reading my story. It is my first true fiction story. Glad you came to visit and left such a nice comment.


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PegCole17 4 years ago from Dallas, Texas

Came back for a visit Becky. I couldn't remember what this one was about until I began reading it again, then I couldn't stop. This is realistically portrayed. It is truly sad that so many put up with abuse.


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Becky Katz 4 years ago from Hereford, AZ Author

Peg, thank you for the return visit. lol!! Are there any you would like me to visit? I am pleased that you could not stop. It is a very important topic and should be out where we can all see it. Perhaps it wouldn't continue if it were.


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red mermaid 4 years ago

A very soul searching and mind invigorating article.... I hope men read this article and have some insight into a womans feelings by almost being blackmailed into complying with their constant request for sex and how it defeats the object because all it does is make a woman want it less.


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Becky Katz 4 years ago from Hereford, AZ Author

red mermaid, we all have different sex drives and sometimes it takes a little compromise to get it right between a couple. The requests really don't figure into this, it is more the demand for it that figures into this story. That and making her suffer if she does not comply. It does make a woman want it less and therefore she should make that clear to her partner. He might try other methods to get her in the mood before he gets demanding. A considerate partner is always a joy, no matter which sex it needs to be.


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Globetrekkermel 4 years ago from CALIFORNIA

Wow Becky, even if you said the story is fictitious, it is not hard to believe this happens in real life and in real marriage.I never witnessed anything like this in real life but I have heard true to life cases similar to your fiction story. I guess I have been so naïve to think that this does not happen to women in marriages.God bless these women ! all Kudos for them. It makes me really cringe how men can really be savages in their sexual exploits.Why women subject themselves to a poisonous relationship like this is a reason to run away as fast you can. Is it the vow of marriage ? It is mental conmditioning? is it a need? It really boggles me.


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Becky Katz 4 years ago from Hereford, AZ Author

Globetrekkermel, This is a fictitious story and it is not just women who are abused. Men are also abused, but most of the time we do not hear of it at all. Men just have a problem telling the world that they are being abused by a woman. Children are also abused on a daily basis by parents, grandparents and people who are in authority over them. I guess I need to write something in those veins also to bring it to the attention of more. I really appreciate the kudos and visit. Thank you for coming by.


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Faith Reaper 3 years ago from southern USA

What an amazing write of fiction, but all too close to reality too, sadly for many! I am linking this excellent write here, to one of reality. You have pointed out here that this type of abuse hits all and is not subject to only those in low income or uneducated, but all, as we have seen in the news of late!

Voted up ++++ and sharing

God bless you. In His Love, Faith Reaper


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Becky Katz 3 years ago from Hereford, AZ Author

Hi Faith, so nice to see you here. This is an important subject to bring to the attention of all. You are totally welcome to link any of my hubs. You are an exceptional writer and I am honored to have you link. Thank you for coming by to visit and for the up votes and sharing.


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Lisawilliamsj 3 years ago

This was a very well written story. I actually felt my emotions building as I read it! The video was a perfect touch. Well done! Thanks for posting!


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Becky Katz 3 years ago from Hereford, AZ Author

Hi Lisa, This was my first attempt at fiction and one of these days I will rewrite it. I feel I can do better but I am still learning how to write fiction. I still cringe at my dialogue, so not much of that yet. I am continuing to work on it. I appreciate the well done and the visit.


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Teresa Coppens 3 years ago from Ontario, Canada

Becky, such a very well written story. Her sorrow at the part of her life stolen, the relief and yet trepidation on how to start over as her own person ----- all those feelings were there. Fantastic job!


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Becky Katz 3 years ago from Hereford, AZ Author

Teresa, Thank you. I really appreciate the comments and the visit.


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Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton

Becky wow this read like non-fiction.. damn it was good :)


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Becky Katz 3 years ago from Hereford, AZ Author

Frank, thank you for looking at my first fiction story. I had never written one until this. I really appreciate the compliment. Thank you for coming to visit.


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suzettenaples 3 years ago from Taos, NM

Sad but so true in many cases. I have known women who have lived lives like this and it is not easy. It is horrible and so abusive. Your story is so well done and well written and really gives a voice to any woman going through this. Also, very engaging story right up to the end.


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Becky Katz 3 years ago from Hereford, AZ Author

suzette, Thank you for your praise on this. I am learning about writing fiction here and this is one of my first efforts. I appreciate you coming to visit.


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Laura in Denver 3 years ago from Aurora

Weird twist in this story. Good luck on writing more fiction.


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Becky Katz 3 years ago from Hereford, AZ Author

Laura, I have done a little more on the fiction subject. I am still trying to get dialogue down. I truly appreciate the visit.


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klidstone1970 2 years ago from Niagara Region, Canada

This is such a powerful story, Becky! Her relief can be felt...how therapeutic for her to help others. Great job.


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Becky Katz 2 years ago from Hereford, AZ Author

klidstone, thank you, I appreciate this. This was my first pure fiction story, and I had a terrible case of nerves over it. Thank you for coming by to visit.


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cam8510 2 years ago from Columbus, Georgia until the end of November 2016.

Becky, You read so much of the fiction writing of others, it's no surprise to see you do it so well. This story is both tragic and uplifting as Sarah learns to live life naturally, without a mask. It's a lesson a lot of us need to learn, whether or not we live in an abusive situation. Thanks for sharing. Up and sharing (or at least attempting to if the share button works).


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Becky Katz 2 years ago from Hereford, AZ Author

Chris, glad you enjoyed this and thank you for the nice comment and the attempted share. I am still trying to get conversation to work for me, but I do not talk a lot and it shows when I write. I appreciate the visit.

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