Satan's Sunrise: a Frank Atanacio Challenge

This is my second contribution of a verse for the poem Spirits Sat as Mourners

by Frank Atanacio for his April Poetry Month challenge.

The Verse I am Following on From.


Dominion of Darkness

Too late

Is the hour

For the servants of sin

Have come out among them

For death is his wage

Struggles does he

In that unseen realm

Where spiritual forces of evil dwell

She welcomes him only to reveal

Eternity awaits in unspeakable Hell!

- by Faith Reaper

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Explanation of this verse.

I wanted to continue the theme of the struggle between good and evil, or angels and demons for the soul of the deceased. Shyron introduced April as the soul being fought over, so I am also keeping that in my verse.

Satan's Sunrise

As the darkness slowly ebbed

The demons howled in pain,

April's spirit hovered

Above the coffin where she'd lain.

The preacher summoned angels

As the sun began to rise,

But Satan tightened fast his grip

To hold on to his prize.

Heaven vs Hell,

At the church's ringing bell.

- by John Hansen



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Faith Reaper 2 years ago from southern USA

Whoa, Jodah, your second contribution is outstanding and perfectly follows mine and Sharon's! Your choice of imagery is right on and that video is perfect! Up and more, pinning, tweeting and sharing. Will do all of this when I arrive home as I am on my phone right now and will add your second link to my list too. Did you know The Ecaminer-1 has just published his contribution too! I am glad to see so many wonderful contributions. Blessings, Faith Reaper


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Faith Reaper 2 years ago from southern USA

Meant Examiner, sorry.


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billybuc 2 years ago from Olympia, WA

You really are a very good writer, John. What impresses me most is the range you have, moving smoothly from essay to poem to "how to" and beyond....well, well done!


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writinglover 2 years ago from Lost...In Poetry

Wonderful! I loved it!


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Faith Reaper 2 years ago from southern USA

Shyron's meant. Sorry I am on this phone.


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jhamann 2 years ago from Reno NV

Good job! I love the twist and turns this is taking. Jamie


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Jodah 2 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thank you for all your kind remarks Faith, glad you enjoyed and felt this followed your verse well. Have a good day. I hope to check out the examiners too.


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Jodah 2 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thanks Bill, those comments mean a lot coming from you.


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Jodah 2 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thank you Writinglover, glad you enjoyed it.


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Jodah 2 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thanks Jamie, that's the good thing about many contributors, you don't know what's coming next.


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Faith Reaper 2 years ago from southern USA

Home now, so I have shared everywhere and voted up and will link.

Enjoy your evening,

Faith Reaper


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Jodah 2 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thanks Faith.


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AudreyHowitt 2 years ago from California

Very cool follow on Faith Reaper's piece--


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nighthag 2 years ago from Australia

mmmn the second one of these you say? I will most definitely have to go and hunt the other you wrote out. this was very well done and captured ...

my curiosity is starting to get the better of me :)


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Shyron E Shenko 2 years ago

Wow! This is the really good, John I am so impressed. I love it and will try to follow as soon as time permits.

Voted up, ABI and shared.

Shalom

Shyron


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Jodah 2 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thanks for reading nighthag. Yes the link to the first is at the top right of this hub 'Spirits sat as Mourners'. I thought this genre would appeal to you. Appreciate your kind comment too.


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DDE 2 years ago from Dubrovnik, Croatia

A beautifully approached verse and so much effort thank you


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Jodah 2 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thank you Audrey, glad it flowed ok.


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Jodah 2 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thanks Shyron, I appreciate the vote up and great comment. I look forward to reading another by you.


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Jodah 2 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

I appreciate you reading this Devika and your kind comment. Thanks.


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bravewarrior 2 years ago from Central Florida

You're on a roll, Jodah. I love your poetry. You have such an easy flow to the words. I don't have to read two or three times to get your meaning. What a pleasure!


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Jodah 2 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

My pleasure Shauna that you enjoy reading my poetry. A lot of poets like to set you a task like trying to solve a riddle to decipher their poetry. I prefer to make my message clear for the reader.


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always exploring 2 years ago from Southern Illinois

Oh this is really good! I love it. Hummm i wonder if i could help April on her journey?


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Jodah 2 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thanks Ruby, glad you liked it. I am sure you could certainly help April. Give it a go.


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AliciaC 2 years ago from British Columbia, Canada

I love your addition to the poetry series, Jodah. The story is becoming exciting! The title of your poem is great, too.


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Jodah 2 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thank you for your kind comment Alicia. I love these challenges of Franks. Glad you liked this poem and title.


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MsDora 2 years ago from The Caribbean

Another great image of good versus evil. Beautiful image as far as your the display of talent!


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FlourishAnyway 2 years ago from USA

This is fabulous, John! Such an image of evil. Makes me want to be good all day.


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Jodah 2 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

You are very kind MsDora. Glad you enjoyed this.

Flourish. that's great. I hope you can be good all day. Thank you.


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Dana Tate 2 years ago from LOS ANGELES

I love these series of poems that you wrote on good verses evil.


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Jodah 2 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thank you Dana, your kind comment and support is much appreciated.


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Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

Jodah you took this to a whole new level I love it!!!


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Jodah 2 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thanks Frank, that means a lot. I want to do the best I can for your poem, so I'm glad you approve of this addition.


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always exploring 2 years ago from Southern Illinois

I wrote one in response to ' Satan's Sunrise ' Called, ' April's journey home ' I tried to link yours with mine but it wouldn't link. Thank's again for the inspiration..


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Jodah 2 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thanks Ruby, I'll go check yours and link it to mine hopefully.


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annart 2 years ago from SW England

Another great verse for this challenge, John! I'm trying to keep up with them all but it's difficult, especially trying to see which verse follows which (though some indicate this). Will add your second link now, of course.

Your versatility is outstanding. Ann


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Jodah 2 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thanks Ann. Yes it is getting a little difficult to keep up wit the order of the verses, especially if two people submit theirs at the same time and are following the same one. It will be up to Frank to hopefully say when the challenge is over and sort the verses into a complete poem. I look forward to that.


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The Examiner-1 2 years ago

I thought that I had read your second entry a while ago Jodah but I guess that I did not. It was awesome and had meaning.

Kevin

I am trying for a second entry ( 2 weeks now) but there are problems.


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Jodah 2 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Glad you found it eventually Kevin and enjoyed it. Keep working on your second entry, you'll get there.

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