"Senses"

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If I could see you,
would it make you real?
If I could hear you,
would I believe?
If I could smell you,
would it be sweet?
If I could taste you,
would I like it?
If I could touch you,
would you be able to feel me?

Would you notice me,
see me?
Would you listen,
hear me?
Would you sense me,
smell me?
If you could taste me,
I know you'd like it.
If you could touch me,
I know I'd feel you...
even if its only in my
dreams.

© Copyright NMJ 2011

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Mentalist acer 5 years ago from A Voice in your Mind!

Sensory perceived Nikki!;)


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bbnix 5 years ago from Southern California

My senses seem to be on high alert here!

To see you (:), hear you (!), smell you (~), taste you (yikes), touch you (=/), would undoubtedly explode mortal men's minds...


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Nikkij504gurl 5 years ago from Louisiana Author

well good thing the person in this poem isnt mortal, he's only a figment of my imagination, a guy in my dreams, metaphorically, thats what this poem is referring to, and for some people a dream is better and more real than any reality, is it possible to fall in love with a dream? or to ever truly feel them?

acer thanks for percieving my senses! lol


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bbnix 5 years ago from Southern California

You need both, and often, and I see this happening to myself, dreams do become reality, and I suppose, reality can become dreams...

Sadly, I dream of lost love ones and I love them as if they were with me...as if real...perhaps even more..


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Nellieanna 5 years ago from TEXAS

Nikki - That's a precious poem. So personal, relating senses from person to person, whether or not the persons are "real". Just delicious. I'm so pleased that you wrote your senses poem!


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Nikkij504gurl 5 years ago from Louisiana Author

and thats good too bb. but im more or less just referring to a lover in a dream, and how you would long for him or in your case her to be real and for some of us they are real, in our real lover, but for others, the dream is all they have.

nelli!!! Im so glad you liked it! and you got it right on point! thanks so much!


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bbnix 5 years ago from Southern California

I do know what you mean Nikki. I suppose, to long for someone I dream of, or think of, to be real, would destroy me...almost did..

In my real world, I make dreams come true, but that one..I just don't know. Perhaps, as proficient as I am as a dreamer and a builder of dreams, I'm just now learning about people, and to tell you the truth, they are an incredible enigma to me... I can barely handle the reality of them...

But I do know the hubs here and the incredible people I'm now meeting, much like yourself, ARE a dream come true...


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Nikkij504gurl 5 years ago from Louisiana Author

thank u bb. dreams are what we make them, afterall, they are our dreams, and some dreams do come true. if its possible, and I believe anything is possible. most people to me well, i dont like people in general...im not a people person, but My hubber friends are and always have been amazing, and peoples abilities are amazing, a lot of us fail to use them to their utmost power, or use them for the wrong things.


JadedLove 5 years ago

I bet he would even if he was blind. So much passion in dreams waking nightmares of cold water blooming. Thank you Nikki for your heart so lovely on paper. Up and beautiful


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Nikkij504gurl 5 years ago from Louisiana Author

thank u JL. your comments as always are one of a kind!


JadedLove 5 years ago

maybe just confusing.lol


MrDSpade2 5 years ago

Dreams are sometimes a visual in the future, yet to come, beautiful read, Nikki.


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Nikkij504gurl 5 years ago from Louisiana Author

thanks MrD. perhaps some times they are, but I dont think all of them lol. i dreamt about the power rangers last night lol


MrDSpade2 5 years ago

LOL, something told me to come back and see what your response was, yeah very funny indeed and what went on in that dream, you got me wondering.


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Nikkij504gurl 5 years ago from Louisiana Author

well from what i remember it wasnt the power rangers like the show, but we were power rangers (yes I was one too kimberly the pink one lol) and we were being tested by the bad guy or whatever, he was after us bad, like a big army of bad guys was around the corner stomping after us and i think we were at some cabin or something and the rest had went ahead to see what we faced and they came back and was getting in the car and trying to leave, i think the car was boobytrapped so they had to fix that first and mario lopez was one of them lol i remember cuz he was hot lol but he was being a coward and wanting to run away and i was like no we need to fight cuz hes just gonna keep coming after us and he was bringing us home and i was like what if he booby trapped our homes and just coming up with more reasons why we shouldnt run and mario was like are you mad? and talking to the other guys saying I think shes mad, and i dont really remember anything else...lol. i have weird random dreams, when i actually dream. I rarely do.


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bbnix 5 years ago from Southern California

Nikki in a cute pink jumpsuit with a big army of bad guys "stomping" after her and a bunch of goof ball making lame ass excuse guys and thinking she's mad is cue for Mr. Spade and I to kick some dark ass. I don't do tights though - maybe a cape and a fedora...


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Nikkij504gurl 5 years ago from Louisiana Author

lol yea in my dream though we werent in costumes but i knew we were power rangers... haha go for it! and a cape and fedora sounds much more intriguing.


MrDSpade2 5 years ago

I just can't stop laughing and you and bbnix, Nikki, quite an detailed describtion of some funny shit, yeah i don't do the tights either and really don't see myself as a superhero type maybe a laid back bad guy with a cool suit, LMFAO!!!


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Nikkij504gurl 5 years ago from Louisiana Author

lol sometimes the bad guys do some saving too.


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bbnix 5 years ago from Southern California

Oh, now your talking like you really know us...


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A.A. Zavala 5 years ago from Texas

Nothing better than having all your senses fire off all over someone. Must be an awesome trigger.


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Nikkij504gurl 5 years ago from Louisiana Author

especially if you can do it in your dreams! thanks for stopping by A.A


Doug Turner Jr. 5 years ago

All I can do is read you -- and it's good fun.


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Nikkij504gurl 5 years ago from Louisiana Author

thanks doug! keep reading!


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SkiFACE 5 years ago from The Underworld, A.R.D. (A Robbers Dream)

Yeah those sensual dreams are somethingelse, i love to smell them, i mean i love reading ur work, Nikki, lol...


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Nikkij504gurl 5 years ago from Louisiana Author

hmm thanks skiface lol. If I could smell and taste and feel my dreams that would be all I need to escape the everyday reality.


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Astra Nomik 5 years ago from Edge of Reality and Known Space

I like the deft sensual touch of the images. Wonderful poem. Wow. Rating up. :)


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Nikkij504gurl 5 years ago from Louisiana Author

thanks astra. You are the best.


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aware 5 years ago from West Palm Beach Florida.

Another nice one. good job. after reading two of your poems this morning . i find myself in the need of a cold shower. lol . have a great week .and ty for the read.

ray


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Nikkij504gurl 5 years ago from Louisiana Author

hahaha. Well at least I got a RISE out of someone lol.


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bbnix 5 years ago from Southern California

"rise"...hell...my feet (and other parts.. ha ha ha ...holy shit..son of a b**ch...;)..not to mention my heart :)...) don't even touch the ground any more...


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bellawritter23 5 years ago from California

Senses how I love them I wrote one two a while back ago about them this one was very great though sunshine!!!

smiles :)

bella


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Nikkij504gurl 5 years ago from Louisiana Author

thank you hun!


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blaise25 5 years ago from close to you...

Ah just amazing. I hope that person has read this.


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Nikkij504gurl 5 years ago from Louisiana Author

well its not really to any one in particular, its more about just that overall dreamy feeling you get sometimes and just what if somehow all that was real, or felt so real at least. could it be made real? just a thought. wishful thinking that dreams can come true. that dreams can feel.


kimberlyslyrics 5 years ago

really great hub

bravo

Kimberly


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Nikkij504gurl 5 years ago from Louisiana Author

thank u. kimberly. :)

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