Shattered hopes

waiting!
waiting!

Betrayal !



She was promised

for a morning

away from Gloomy

beautiful and shining!


Her ill fate

promise who made

the sun himself

betrayed!


She longed for light

in deep glum

but, it came never

and was never to come!


Heights of fun on her

the message somber

reached her by Darkness

the messenger!


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Comments 18 comments

Ausseye 4 years ago

Hi Shara who hit me for a 6 maybe 3 times: I am bruised and feel her gloom…….my question is why???? Da heart feels but does not see. Perhaps an answer may await…..I live in hope!!!


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shara63 4 years ago from Delhi Author

i'm really sorry for all your bruises..and equally impressed of your conquering power !... .but i want to say, the heart that feels can definitely see (others pain)...love is optimistic by nature, and it keeps the hope alive!

Thanks for commenting, I appreciate it !


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DREAM ON 4 years ago

You captued me with your picture and kept me wondering each line how much more can one endure?Rated up.


Ausseye 4 years ago

Hi 6 up...da winner: Thanks…. but a question remains ?

She was promised

for a morning

away from Gloomy

…..what gloom?? Am asking a question because I am interested!!!


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shara63 4 years ago from Delhi Author

as it normally happens in betrayal ...all promises made but never fulfilled and left to live her solitude !! and its loneliness the gloom!


Ausseye 4 years ago

High 6 a winner: Aahhh I now am left with the theme…..alas a little too old and informed because betrayal is but the better vice when it comes to a sociopath type …. they take you all- the- ugly- way to make you suffer…betrayal too quick for them. Na not been with a socio..pill quite the opposite, a most beautiful soul. My work though takes me down that path…..so my misunderstanding is a bit of life experience. Thanks now am better informed from a poem well done. You response is appreciated and well regarded.


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shara63 4 years ago from Delhi Author

intensity of occurance comes from the way of feeling & gud or better are the perceptions of what one has experinced....may be sociopath type with all ugly ways fling greater damage but than....no moral fault can be considered as gud or better....it is just felt as per capabilities!

Thanks a lot Ausseye for your insightful comment!


Ausseye 4 years ago

Hi Shara63: Yes you are so right no hurt is better, they all hurt like anything. I stand corrected and feel the pain of the one betrayed with no degrees ……am very grateful as you made me realise our ability to get neglectful of suffering by being a bit too exposed to it. Hope the betrayed gets over her gloom and moves on to get a much better deal from an unknown someone where she find a life filled with love and understanding.


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shara63 4 years ago from Delhi Author

Amen!!

realizing & to regret is the best way of submission to God...and so in finding some place near Him and in hearts too!


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Vinaya Ghimire 4 years ago from Nepal

Sad but beautifully written. Choice of expressions are very powerful.

PS: Thanks for reading and commenting on my hub.


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shara63 4 years ago from Delhi Author

thankyou vinaya for parting time to my hub & commenting upon as well!....and you are welcome!


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DREAM ON 4 years ago

I loved the picture you make me wonder.


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shara63 4 years ago from Delhi Author

thanks again, DreamOn!


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DREAM ON 4 years ago

I find myself going back and rereading you words and understanding even more.


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shara63 4 years ago from Delhi Author

hey, cant believe, words can do wonders...not the second only but third look , i'm thrilled !....thankyou !!


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DREAM ON 3 years ago

When I read poems and stories I love I often go back to my thoughts and rekindle the flames that make my heart beat faster.I can read many things but those I love the most will be etched in my mind forever.Have a beautiful day.


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shara63 3 years ago from Delhi Author

thankyou DreamOn..ur words means a lot !


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tobusiness 2 years ago from Bedfordshire, U.K

Betrayal can be soul destroying. Beautifully done.

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