In The Garden of Eden: An Acrostic Sonnet

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H appy the sweet cave of your enchanter,

A pple of valour, surfing your desire.

P ain and joy torment your burning fire,

P ulsing out as innocence expire.

Y our sacred sanctum bared, forever missed,

V oicing a concern of lover’s anguish.

A ttempts to console ‘midst tinted red,

L ocked in embrace with tender kisses said.

E lysian is the flow on stain-filled sheets,

N o fear, a smile aglow, my virgin sweet.

T hus touched thy face, a shining bless´ed sight,

I n fullness now a heavenly delight.

N ow filled with love our bodies draped in white,

E loped into the silence of the night.


Manatita, theFlame-Weaver. ©Copyrighted 20th February, 2016.

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How should we approach this subject in the twenty first century?

  • Wait till marriage
  • Walk with self respect through intimacy
  • Don't really know
  • Feel my way through
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Surabhi Kaura 7 months ago from Toronto, Canada

Whoa! This is the first time that I feel like loving an ‘Acrostic’ poetry. I once tried my hands on it and ended up wasting many blank pages of my diary. Lol. Not a wise thing, I know.

Your poem is of tremendous beauty, Manatita. It rhymes and flows so well. So soothing.

“N ow filled with love our bodies draped in white,

E loped into the silence of the night.” – Manatita

Lovely! Love is dripping gently… softy… rhythmically… in silence. Who wouldn’t love holding this moment tight! What a romantic masterpiece! I loved each and every magical word. A tapestry of splendour in the Garden of Eden… Awesome song too!

I believe, when there is a mutual trust, understanding and respect, then there shouldn’t be any carnal barriers whatsoever between the partners. They simply remain drunk, imbibing the grapes and savouring the intoxicated Wine of Love. Of course, there is an appropriate time and age for it. Nonetheless, it is pivotal to run the generation, and also, to keep the flame alive between the two spouses. Lovely artistic images. Bravo!


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manatita44 7 months ago from london Author

I did an egotistic tease recently, and it worked quite well. Here's another. You still struggle with the Acrostic poems because you're a Bard with one and nine tenths wings, and I have two. Ha ha ha. Didn't you do an exam recently? So you need just the Bard exam now. (Aweful, that one, not as good as the other.)

Seriously, the Master loves his students to surpass him, and I'm now running a distant second. Just one thing more I have to teach, but I feel that you already know. Listen to this story:

The great Shankaracharya was unbeatable with using words. His Friend was also awesome and the authority in the land. One day, while travelling together, Mandana happened to look at a book that Sri Shankaracharya was holding. He looked at it for a while, then started crying.

"What's the matter, my Friend?" Said Lord Shankara. "Why are you crying?" Mandana then told him that his work on the same idea, was no match for Shankara's and he feared that if Shankara submitted his work, then Mandana would be beaten into second place.

"Is that all you are worried about?" Said the great Shankara, and threw his book into the sea. I wish to have the renunciation of Lord Shankara.

Beloved my Heart and Soul alone knows how much you mean to me. Guru bless you now, and always. Infinite gratitude for offering me your Friendship.


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Surabhi Kaura 7 months ago from Toronto, Canada

Ha ha ha. I like that - Bard exam as compared to the Bar exam (law exam). Thank you for this story. Oh Gosh! Imagine how hard the Bard exam would be! This poem of yours is exquisite!! I treasure our Friendship too.


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Missy Smith 7 months ago from Florida

Woot! Woot! I loved this Manatita. I'm not sure I could write this type of poem, but you are a natural at it. A lot of you here on Hubpages seem to grasp all the different types of poetry well. I tend to write without a specific focus. Not that I wouldn't want to try new ways, but I think I also like to stay in my own realm of unique. lol... However, this is very well spelled out for us, and I really enjoyed it. :)


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manatita44 7 months ago from london Author

Hi Missy. It is a joy to see you. How I love your sweet simplicity! Thank you for stopping by as always and your sincere comments.

Just do what you do best. I was blessed by my Spiritual Teacher. It is all His Grace, Really. I am a mere instrument of His. Love and hugs to the kids.

What can I say Surabhi? Yo no se. Talk very soon.


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Frank Atanacio 7 months ago from Shelton

manatita, another good poem using Valentine as a guide.. love your work man..:)


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manatita44 7 months ago from london Author

Ha ha. Yes, a sensuous one, Bro.

Don't always do them. I prefer to lift; to elevate; to inspire ...I sure, though, that they have their merits. Much Gratitude, Frank....much


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emge 7 months ago from Abu Dhabi

Well this another lovely poem. I am your fan


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manatita44 7 months ago from london Author

Yes, I know, Brother Emge, and I do love you for this. Hari Om!


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always exploring 7 months ago from Southern Illinois

Your work is always beautiful and the pictures are heavenly. Peace.


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manatita44 7 months ago from london Author

Thank you, Ruby.

Really appreciate this. A more sensuous one. Have a great evening.


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Jodah 7 months ago from Queensland Australia

A lovely acrostic poem manatita. I have written a few myself and enjoy the challenge. As for the "bard exam" you joked with Surabhi about..that would be one tough exam to pass. Who would be the judge/adjudicator/marker? possibly yourself. Well done.


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manatita44 7 months ago from london Author

Ha ha ha, Jodah. You get the funny side too. Well done! We tease each other. All good. The best judges are you and I and others, on the works of Rumi ...Tagore ...Shakespeare ..Banjo ..did I get it right?

So if our work can survive some 30, 40 years after we've gone, and others make videos of them, then we would be truly awesome. Many of my poems are written for the future. They are written to inspire; elevate; lift; reach the Heart ...

Thank you so much, my Friend.


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MsDora 7 months ago from The Caribbean

Manatita, I attempted a Valentine acrostic, and I'm glad I didn't post it. Yours is much better. Interesting poll, by the way.


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manatita44 7 months ago from london Author

Yes, Dee.

With 21at Century answers. I married a woman who was, when I met her. But I have had relationships with loving Souls who were not. My own feeling is that when the chemistry feels right, virginity is secondary.

Spiritually, it is self-control...inner purity that is paramount, and yes marriage can help this. Anyway, as you know, it is unusual for me to do these kind of hubs. Not sure why I did this one. My love to you as always.


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MarleneB 7 months ago from Northern California, USA

I think this is the first acrostic poem I have read of yours. You are such a fine writer. I love this!


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manatita44 7 months ago from london Author

21st, Dee.

Marlene, I thank you.

I know forms and variations. I do not look for them, neither do I study. I simply write from intuition, nowadays. But I'm unusual, you may not succeed using my style. Ha ha. Thank you so much!


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swalia 7 months ago

Wow! This is quite different. Sensuous and beautiful. Your poetry is a delight to read.


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manatita44 7 months ago from london Author

Shaloo,

My Shame! shame ...Enjoy. I won't do any more. Ha ha. Thank you so much, my Dear. Love you too. Stay well.


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Gypsy Rose Lee 7 months ago from Riga, Latvia

So beautiful and romantically, poetically wonderful


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aviannovice 7 months ago from Stillwater, OK

That was impeccably tender, and it made me smile, as all of your work does. Thanks for being you, as I would want you to be no other.


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manatita44 7 months ago from london Author

So Sweet, Deb, so sweet of you. Yes, this was a kind of 'raise eyebrows' sort of poem. Ha ha. Thank you so much!!


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bravewarrior 6 months ago from Central Florida

Acrostic poems are fun to do, aren't they? I love the image you put in my head of "the first time". I think it's something everyone remembers for a lifetime.


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manatita44 6 months ago from london Author

Ha ha. I actually make it up! My image is very strong and my ability to create is endless. I put it in the world, though. I do not like doing too many of these. Thanks a lot, Shauna.

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