Slow Down Now - a poetry collection

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Now

Slow down

this body

and time

But keep giving me

those flashes

of past moments

that always make

me realize,

Now will be

good

in awhile.

Here and There

Here and there

a laughing soul

shattering the

glass.

A pebble splashing

water's mirror

calm.

Splashing my

indifference.

Signs

Walking

along

slowly.

Footprints

barely

showing.

Like

a drifting

shadow

I return

to the

scene

of joyful

hours.

Looking around

for

signs

of our

crossing

this way

and

seeing

even

my

own

ghostly

footprints

washed

away.

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RTalloni profile image

RTalloni 4 years ago from the short journey

Thoughtful, poignant work here.

Thank you for sharing your work. May our indifference to time indeed be splashed!


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mckbirdbks 4 years ago from Emerald Wells, Just off the crossroads,Texas

Your pen produces such wonderful images and feelings.


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jhamann 4 years ago from Reno NV

Snakeslane, thank you for this. I love how the poem itself is like a slow walk that ends at a beautyful halting moment. Jamie


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snakeslane 4 years ago from Canada Author

Hello RTalloni, Thank you! It is so easy to take things for granted. I have to keep reminding myself to stop and smell the roses.


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snakeslane 4 years ago from Canada Author

mckbbks, Thank you. My pen seems to have a mind of its own. When I can find it. :)


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snakeslane 4 years ago from Canada Author

Hey Jamie, I still remember writing this poem. It was 40 years ago, almost to the day.


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xstatic 4 years ago from Eugene, Oregon

Beautiful poetry snakeslane! And you wrote it that long ago! It has lasting pleasure.


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snakeslane 4 years ago from Canada Author

Thank you xstatic. I did write a lot more earlier on in my life. I questioned every step of the way. Some of the poems disappeared from view for quite awhile, and I'm slowly sorting through them. It's great to get feedback.


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Mhatter99 4 years ago from San Francisco

Nice work. congratulations. by nature and form very sensitive.


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snakeslane 4 years ago from Canada Author

Thank you Mhatter, good to see you.


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PegCole17 4 years ago from Dallas, Texas

I absolutely loved your watercolor drawing and all three of your poems. Yes, sometimes it is good to remind ourselves that "Now will be good in a while."


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snakeslane 4 years ago from Canada Author

Hello Peg, Thank you my friend. I like to think now will be good now :)

So happy you like the little watercolor.


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always exploring 4 years ago from Southern Illinois

Fun poetry of then and now. Loved your watercolor..Cheers


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snakeslane 4 years ago from Canada Author

Hi always, thank you! I have to visit your new poetry Hub, you are a poetry Goddess!


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rcrumple 4 years ago from Kentucky

I started to read this the other night when I was in a hurry. It held such promise, I held off until I could devote it proper time. It reminds me that all of the times in our past are gone, such as we are, in the footprints washed away. A reminder that immortality is not ours, but only a moment in time to enjoy. Great Work! I'm glad I came back!


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snakeslane 4 years ago from Canada Author

Hello rcrumple, I really appreciate you taking time to read these poems. For me the message is You can't go back. But memories are very hypnotizing. Best to stay in the 'Now'. Future is now. The rest? I have no idea.


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BlossomSB 4 years ago from Victoria, Australia

Really lovely, and those splashes have rings that keep on going out further and further.


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snakeslane 4 years ago from Canada Author

Hi Blossom, that is so true! Thank you for the read :)


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marcoujor 4 years ago from Jeffersonville PA

These reflective ponderings make my mind do some wandering.


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snakeslane 4 years ago from Canada Author

Hello Mar, I do appreciate you wandering over here!


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PegCole17 4 years ago from Dallas, Texas

Back to say again that one line is a great one.

"Now will be great in awhile"


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snakeslane 4 years ago from Canada Author

Hey Ms Peg, always nice to see you. It is ironic that we very often don't appreciate 'the moment' until it is far in the past. Thank you for the read!


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AudreyHowitt 4 years ago from California

How is it that I have not read more of your work--it is just wonderful!!


Sunnie Day 4 years ago

Loved your poem and painting so much. Playful but yet deep. Thank you my friend.

Sunnie


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snakeslane 4 years ago from Canada Author

Hey Audrey, thank you for the "wonderful". And thank you for taking the time.


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snakeslane 4 years ago from Canada Author

Sunnie, thank You so much.


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btrbell 4 years ago from Mesa, AZ

great poems! we all could use these reminders. Thank you!


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snakeslane 4 years ago from Canada Author

Thank you btrbell, I need to take my own advice! ;^)).


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Cogerson 4 years ago from Virginia

Very well done....it was like reading dueling poems...which I liked very much...and a nice ending to boot...voted up and useful.


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snakeslane 4 years ago from Canada Author

Cogerson, Thank you for your interesting observation, and the vote, much appreciated.


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Pearldiver 4 years ago from Tomorrow - In Words & NZ Time.

I enjoyed reading your work here, I find it best to be late, so I don't need a reservation to wait for all your readers to read... it just doesn't seem fair for my hamsters (power source) to peddle in idle just to ensure I get to stay on the net waiting for the page to load! I liked the perspective of your skipping stone... perhaps because I trained my younger brother to skip in a similar manner when I threw him into the water, as kids!

Nice work and I see some enjoyable reading up ahead... take care snakeslane.. ps: I found your 'heart' written throughout this little collection btw... it seems that it is applied generously to your writing! Keep it up... PD


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snakeslane 4 years ago from Canada Author

PearlDiver, Ah yes, these were written very long ago. I used to do a lot of scribbling, not so much now. Have very recently written a few poems since joining Hub Pages, but mostly been churning out this old stuff. About half of them have been Zeed and unpublished, kind of discouraging. Thank you for encouraging words. I want to write more, but I've set the bar high, and not sure if I can do it. I'm interested in learning new forms of poetry, and finding that a challenge. I get lost in the stressed and unstressed syllables. It really is confusing, but I shall keep working on it until I get it. Thankyou for reading and leaving a comment!


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Pearldiver 4 years ago from Tomorrow - In Words & NZ Time.

Dear snakeslane... you may delete my comment if you feel it is inappropriate... however, it is from I know and intuitively sense from within your words..

Good writers automatically set a high bar.. that's one of the things that help define their work and life ethic... don't celebrate it, until you know that no bar (higher or otherwise) can restrain your talent to be who you really are within, in a writing context. If that means that you don't accept having your work sidelined (zeed), as I don't, then you must counter that negative action, with a positive and unassailable attack of the issue!

Perhaps you feel that is too hard, or you need more courage, or confidence to do so... however, if you consider that YOU know better, in regards to the value of Your work and you have your own high bar in place.... well then you don't Allow anyone less qualified as You... to dictate the value of you work!!! All the poets here are getting 'shafted' in my opinion... so with that mind... silence the critics this way:- With your success.. not your acceptance of a lower authority!

To do that, consider rolling a group of poems into a collection and then effectively, you are back to publishing your work on your terms, which in itself should demonstrate that work's value. If you check out what I have done (collection-wise).. it will give you an idea on the format. (these albums have a far higher appeal than a singular poem, hidden by an unqualified moderator)..

Believe in your ability.. which means.. be brave and don't second guess yourself.. you know if its good or not... This is what I have done... and I have never learned poetry... I just refuse to second guess my intuition, or to compromise the bar that I set... then I put my work to a tear test - if it doesn't move me emotionally, or make me feel like I could (or do) cry after reading it out loud... then it needs editing until it does. And snakeslane... I don't even know what stressed and unstressed syllables are... :) - write from the heart! eg: have a conversation with the heart... Ask it what thinks.. and then listen... and it will tell you.. but it will Always tell you... remember that and also.. that you must always be willing to hear it! You have the potential to great writer.. but you are doubting yourself... maybe just because anyone can be a great writer.. and hahaha... only one can be the best! KiaKaha.. (Be brave.. be your best!) ... PD


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snakeslane 4 years ago from Canada Author

Hey PD,

" consider rolling a group of poems into a collection and then effectively, you are back to publishing your work on your terms, which in itself should demonstrate that work's value. If you check out what I have done (collection-wise).. it will give you an idea on the format. (these albums have a far higher appeal than a singular poem, hidden by an unqualified moderator"

Yes, I agree, this is a good idea, and one I have been considering doing. Meanwhile I left things unpublished because I was working on submissions for a online poetry contest, (been looking at contests lately), and possibly submitting elsewhere for publication, just other options whatever they may be. While considering these options have hesitated to re-publish. Yada, yada, yada. Going round and round in circles lol. The trying out new forms is purely experimental, and fun in a challenging sort of way

Meanwhile I have seen what you are doing with your collections, and also your comments in forums and I agree it is one way to keep the work out there with all the changes happening on Hub Pages.

I will comment as I read things, but there is a tide of events occuring within the community that is sweeping me along and I am not always able to give the work the attention that it deserves, (yours and others) not to mention my own.

It is winter here in Canada, a darker time, and just the opposite of your season happening now in New Zealand, which is spring and summer, and renewal. Interesting.

I am very thankful to have found Hub Pages to meet fellow writers after all the years of creating these poems in a kind of exile, it really is exciting.


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epigramman 3 years ago

Good evening my sensational Snakeslane, the literary Canadian marvel that you are, and yes I always try to look for and appreciate 'all of the small things in life' - those little indelible moments which mean so much - I enjoy our little hub chatter back and forward and do you remember an intriguing CITY-TV presentation from the late 70's or early 80's starring Leonard Cohen called I am a hotel (I have a copy on - lol - VHS)

Off to work within the hour and my drive in the ride I collect my thoughts and clear my head and listen to the news and the drive back is my rock and roll or music run home - we are having late March weather here with rain not snow and mostly confusing Mother Nature too I suppose with my cats thinking it is spring, already.

Indelible moment this morning - before going to bed after night shift watching the daybreak which looked like a pastel rainbow over the horizon of the lake - sending you big hugs from your 3 fellow Canadians - I flesh, 2 furried


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snakeslane 3 years ago from Canada Author

Hi Epi, never seen 'I am a Hotel', how interesting. Night shift has its moments, your lake sounds beautiful. Thanks for the visit. Literary Canadian marvel? Not really, but nice of you to say so!


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epigramman 3 years ago

Literary Canadian marvel? Yes, Lenny told me that about you in a bar in his video I am a hotel as my memory serves me correctly - you might be able to find I am a hotel through Google or You Tube - it's beautifully done. 4:54pm lake erie time and still daylight - off for a walk


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snakeslane 3 years ago from Canada Author

Hi Epi, just heard that David Bowie has released a new album: http://t.co/ujAcAFgW. I will look for 'I am a Hotel', thanks!

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