Musings Rough and Rude: a Sonnet

This hill on which I write:

a charm in heaven’s crown,

Tho' a mountain’s fill of might,

my feeble musings drown.

This place of blood-red gold

those words of choicest gem

If only I’d take hold

and put together them!

I’d rush upwards, except

the crown would never fit.

No angel would accept

my captivating wit.

These musings, rough and rude

Denied, decried— pursued.


© 2009 Jane Grey

The crown of the hill.
The crown of the hill.

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tnderhrt23 7 years ago

I love this poem! Great rhythm and flow...my favorite lines are...

"This place of blood-red gold

those words of choicest gem

If only I’d take hold

and put together them!"

I look forward to reading more!


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Jane Grey 7 years ago from Oregon Author

Thank you very much! I appreciate hearing what your favorite lines were. It helps to know what really connects with people.


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Rose West 7 years ago from Michigan

This is a beautiful poem! I love your choice of words: I think they make a lovely crown.


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Jane Grey 7 years ago from Oregon Author

I appreciate your comments, Rose! You are a capable and lovely poet yourself, and I have learned much from you.


Hannah 7 years ago

And still we pursue those imperfect vessels

Words in miriads we stack up the lot

Pouring in our hopes and dreams

Pure water in a cracked pot.


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Jane Grey 7 years ago from Oregon Author

Beautiful, Hannah. The crown fits your head better than mine.


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jodynotj 6 years ago from Omaha, Nebraska

I really enjoyed this piece. I lived in Colorado most of my life and even without your picture the poem had a feel of my old home. Thanks for writing.


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Jane Grey 6 years ago from Oregon Author

Thank you, jodynotj! I certainly was certainly surrounded by the beauty of Colorado when I was writing it, and that's always an inspiration for me.

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