Spirits Sat As Mourners (April Poetry Month Challenge By Frank Atanacio) Poem about Death

The Sentinel

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Spirits Sat as Mourners (Starting Link)

"He knew

As death drew

The lights were dimmer,

As the darkness began to shimmer,

Eyes would glow

As the candles in back

Burnt low

And spirits sat as mourners

Massed together all in a row..."

by Frank Atanacio



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The Sentinel

This image is of Midnight, a black bird that sits outside my window. Midnight sings his best tunes not at dawn but at midnight, hence the name, he always seem to be watching and waiting like a sentinel.
This image is of Midnight, a black bird that sits outside my window. Midnight sings his best tunes not at dawn but at midnight, hence the name, he always seem to be watching and waiting like a sentinel. | Source

In Honor of April's Poetry Month

A Challenge by Frank Atanacio

I've decided not to explain my submission for this challenge

Instead, I hope each reader will make their own interpretation.

I hope you'll enjoy the poem.

The Sentinel

By J. Alexis-Hagues © 30/03/2014

They wait

Filled with hate

The dead hug the shadows

Pure evil lurks beyond the windows

Where he lay

Vengeance will be served today

The howling began

As the devil claims the soul of man

The dark mass mourning as one

But only the sentinel can atone


The Struggle Between Light and Darkness; Will The Sentinel Save the Day?

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tobusiness 2 years ago from Bedfordshire, U.K Author

manatita, I think you're absolutely right. I need to go back to ensure that they've all been copyrighted, especially the poems. Although,

so many of my work have been taken, it doesn't seem to matter much. Thank you for the reminder, much appreciated.


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manatita44 2 years ago from london

Yes. I did enjoy the poem, Jo.

I do not see your name. It may be useful to put your name at the end. What do you think?


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tobusiness 2 years ago from Bedfordshire, U.K Author

Jackie, this one was good fun to do, I hope Frank will do a few more. My best.


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Jackie Lynnley 2 years ago from The Beautiful South

Very good! I was busy and didn't get in on this. Looks like fun. Maybe next time! ^+


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tobusiness 2 years ago from Bedfordshire, U.K Author

Hi Kim, lovely to see you back, I hope you're well.

I saw you were writing on HP again and meant to pop round yesterday but got distracted. Thanks for stopping by and for reading the poem, much appreciated. Take care and my best to you.


ocfireflies 2 years ago

Jo,

Hope you are well. I am slowly, and hopefully surely finding my way back to HP. I am enjoying reading the poem challenges and your contribution is simply stellar. V+ for sure.

Blessings,

Kim


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tobusiness 2 years ago from Bedfordshire, U.K Author

Moms-Secret, thank you for reading my poem, much appreciated. This is dark, but I've lightened it up in my second contribution. I'll be round to read yours soon, I'm hoping to read them all, but I may have missed a few. Take care and have a lovely day.


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tobusiness 2 years ago from Bedfordshire, U.K Author

Hi Phyllis, Glad you liked the poem and the Sentinel. It looks like midnight has found a lady friend, and was standing watch over his nest, he is a beautiful bird, sorry I placed him in that strange place between heaven and hell, then again that really is love. :)

Take care now, always a pleasure to see you.


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Phyllis Doyle 2 years ago from High desert of Nevada.

This is awesome and mysterious, Jo. I love the photo of Midnight, and he does look as if he is standing sentinel. Great stanza to continue the mood.


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Moms-Secret 2 years ago from Central Florida

I very much enjoyed it and its darkness. I went dark for mine as well.


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tobusiness 2 years ago from Bedfordshire, U.K Author

Hi Ann, Thank you for reading and for adding the link.

I can't quiet work out what goes where, I thought of writing a slightly lighter follow up poem, but I'm not sure if I should follow my first poem or someone else's, I'll probably leave it for now but It would be great to read all the poems as one long chain. Take care now.


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annart 2 years ago from SW England

Very dark, Jo! A great response to this challenge. I hope they're all going to be collated into a final poem. Will add this link to mine. Ann


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tobusiness 2 years ago from Bedfordshire, U.K Author

Hi Crafty, it is so very nice to see you! Thanks for reading this, I do appreciated you taking the time, glad you liked it. Take care and my very best to you.


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tobusiness 2 years ago from Bedfordshire, U.K Author

Thank you Audrey, your comment means a lot and its always good to see you. My best as always.


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CraftytotheCore 2 years ago

Great job! I'm very impressed with the level of creativity that went in to this writing.


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AudreyHowitt 2 years ago from California

Beautiful and haunting--everyone has already said it, but I felt I should too!


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tobusiness 2 years ago from Bedfordshire, U.K Author

Hi Kathleen, thank you for stopping by, so glad you liked the poem. My best to you.


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tobusiness 2 years ago from Bedfordshire, U.K Author

Hello Examiner-1, just as I get off to sleep Midnight starts to sing, I love the sound of bird singing, but this little black bird seem to be a bit confused. :)

I used him as the Sentinel in the poem for two reasons, firstly, as a keen bird watcher, you'll know that sentinel birds sits, watch and give a warning in case of danger. Sentinel works in the biblical sense also, standing guard at the watchtower....in my poem a righteous man lay dying, but something happened in the pass and the Trickster wants his pound of flesh. However, the dead mourns not for his death, but for his soul and the sentinel is waiting to warn of the Devil's approach. Glad you liked the poem, Frank did a great job with this challenge. Take care and my best to you.


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Kathleen Odenthal 2 years ago from Bayonne, New Jersey

haunting and beautiful! kudos for this great piece!


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The Examiner-1 2 years ago

Awesome but interesting, tobusiness. I take this to mean that you wonder why Sentinel (and other birds) sing so late at night. It was different and daring, yet it fit right in with the others. I liked it and I voted it up.

Kevin


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tobusiness 2 years ago from Bedfordshire, U.K Author

Hi MsDora, a pleasure to see you. Thanks for reading my contribution, it was fun doing something different.

Hope you're having a lovely day, my best to you.


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tobusiness 2 years ago from Bedfordshire, U.K Author

Hi Jamie, I certainly enjoyed exploring the dark side, great idea from Frank, everyone who contributed was amazingly good, you did an incredible job. take care and my best to you.


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MsDora 2 years ago from The Caribbean

Dark but delightful. This is second contribution I've read this moring. All very good poetry.


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jhamann 2 years ago from Reno NV

This stanza is so dark and frightening, this poem is going to be fantastic. Jamie


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tobusiness 2 years ago from Bedfordshire, U.K Author

Thanks Eddy, much appreciated.


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Eiddwen 2 years ago from Wales

A great poem; powerful and voted up tobu.

Wish you a great day.

Eddy.


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tobusiness 2 years ago from Bedfordshire, U.K Author

Hi Devika, thank you for reading the poem, I'll try to write a hot one just for you. :) Hope you're having a lovely day, my best to you.


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tobusiness 2 years ago from Bedfordshire, U.K Author

Hi Shyron, sorry about your poem, I think I read it when you first posted it, but when I clicked on the link from my e-mail to make a comment it came up as no longer exist. With HP, there's no rhyme or reason, every time I post a poem my hub score takes a dive, so now , I simply ignore it. I write when it's convenient for me, not HP.


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DDE 2 years ago from Dubrovnik, Croatia

A beautiful poem but some what cold I enjoyed your strong words here.


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Shyron E Shenko 2 years ago

Very good Jo, My verse was taken down, and I don't understand why. I guess your verse was more likeable.


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tobusiness 2 years ago from Bedfordshire, U.K Author

Hi Bill, thank you for brightening my Sunday with this encouraging comment, much appreciated. Hope you and Bev are enjoying the day, take care and my best to you both.


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tobusiness 2 years ago from Bedfordshire, U.K Author

Faith, lovely to see you. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem, Frank makes these challenges so much fun to do. Thank you for the visit, the share and the terrific comment. Hope you're having a lovely Sunday my best to you.


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billybuc 2 years ago from Olympia, WA

There has been a great response to this challenge; yours included. Dark for sure, but there can be beauty in the darkness and you found it. Nicely done, Jo!

blessings always

bill


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tobusiness 2 years ago from Bedfordshire, U.K Author

Hi Flourish, I'm sure you've got something pretty special up your sleeve, but i'm so glad you enjoyed my effort. I like to explore my dark side but always keeping sight of the light. :) Thank you and have a wonderful day.


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Faith Reaper 2 years ago from southern USA

Oooh, really good one here, Jo!!! Superb poetry and I love your idea of using the Sentinel. Awesome imagery and photo too. Up and more, pinning, tweeting and sharing. Enjoy your day, Faith Reaper


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FlourishAnyway 2 years ago from USA

You beat me to the punch, Jo! I love the dark twist. You're quite the master poet, missy! I love the sentinel idea. Way to go!


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tobusiness 2 years ago from Bedfordshire, U.K Author

Frank, glad you liked it! I thought the link problem was down to my ineptness, it's good to know it's not just me. :)

Have a wonderful Sunday.


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Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

wow this is another fantastic one.. I love it tobusiness.. I'm having difficulties printing the links onto my page but should work it out.. folks are telling me they have to copy paste Jodah's version and they'd much rather click.. but will fix that then post yours


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tobusiness 2 years ago from Bedfordshire, U.K Author

Hi Ruby, thank you for reading this. I've tried to leave a link in the commentary box but I can't seem to get it right, so I've given up trying. :). I read your entry late last night, but it was too late to comment but I'll be right over. Glad you liked the poem.


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always exploring 2 years ago from Southern Illinois

This is really good Jo. I love the sentinel idea and the one bird watching. I didn't link Frank's page either. ( I didn't know how. duh..)


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tobusiness 2 years ago from Bedfordshire, U.K Author

Jodah, thank you for checking it out, so glad you liked it. I've played about with the title so much before deciding on the sentinel I can't seem to work out the link from frank's page... duh...:) Have a wonderful Sunday.


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Jodah 2 years ago from Queensland Australia

Love it Jo, dark and haunting, follows the tone and style excellently. The name 'The Sentinel" fits perfectly too.

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