Deathly Faces (a poetry challenge by Frank Atanacio)

 Ghostly Vicar - This photo was taken at the Eastry church near Sandwich, county of Kent in 1956. The photographer insisted that when he took the photo, the only persons in the church were his wife and the cleaning lady.
Ghostly Vicar - This photo was taken at the Eastry church near Sandwich, county of Kent in 1956. The photographer insisted that when he took the photo, the only persons in the church were his wife and the cleaning lady. | Source

Spirits sat as Mourners (starting link)


"He knew

As death grew,

The lights were dimmer,

As the darkness began to shimmer,

Eyes would glow

As the candles in back

Burnt low

And spirits sat as mourners

Massed together all in a row…"

by Frank Atanacio

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Reasoning behind my verse.

I tried to continue the scene Frank set up as I saw it. My verse portrays spirits/demons gathered at a funeral of a departed one waiting to steal the soul and take it to Hell. The preacher in turn trying to prevent that by reading Holy verse and attempting to dedicate the soul to Heaven.

.......

Deathly faces

No airs and graces,

Unblinking, cold, and grey

As they watched another join the Frey.

While the priest

Read God's holy word,

Challenging the evil beast

To try to steal another soul,

And empty husk upon which demons feast.

by John Hansen

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Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

Jodah this was fantastic!!!!


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annart 2 years ago from SW England

Great addition to the starting link. I'm going to try to follow this! Trouble is, it's a lot to live up to.

Superb! Ann


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Jodah 2 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thanks Frank. glad you approve my effort.

Thank you too Ann, I'm sure you will do a great job. Good luck.


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tobusiness 2 years ago from Bedfordshire, U.K

Jodah, I loved nicely done.


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Jodah 2 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thank you Jo.


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Faith Reaper 2 years ago from southern USA

Oh, wow, superb, Jodah, it truly falls perfectly behind Frank's! Okay, now I get the idea of how it works. What fun!!! Your imagery choices are great too as they do set the tone. Up and more, pinning, tweeting and sharing. Blessings, Faith Reaper


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Jodah 2 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Faith, thanks so much for that amazing comment. Much appreciated. It's a lot darker than what I'm used to writing, but thats the fun of the challenge, and what Frank is particularly good at.


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Jodah 2 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Faith, thanks so much for that amazing comment. Much appreciated. It's a lot darker than what I'm used to writing, but that's the fun of the challenge, and what Frank is particularly good at.


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FlourishAnyway 2 years ago from USA

I love not only the words and images you evoke but also the creative twist of how one writer builds on another. Seamless!


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Jodah 2 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thanks Flourish, I tried to keep Frank's same rhyme scheme and continue the theme as best I could.


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bearnmom 2 years ago from Pittsburgh, Pennsylvania

I read this twice to be sure that it was so short but interesting. I was lured in by the picture of the ghostly monk praying in a pew.


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Anna Haven 2 years ago from Scotland

The paranormal is my favourite genre so really liked this. Very deftly etched to Frank's beginning. Great picture choices too.

Anna


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Jodah 2 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thank you bearmom for your kind comment. Yes it is short because it is a poetic challenge to be built upon. We were all instructed to keep our verses under 10 lines so it allows scope for others to add to it. I really appreciate your kind comments and encourage you to check out the links to the other contributors. Have a great day.


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AliciaC 2 years ago from British Columbia, Canada

This is an interesting poetry challenge! I enjoyed both Frank's poem and your contribution. Your poem is chilling and scary and is a great continuation of Frank's idea!


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Jodah 2 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thanks for reading Anna. I appreciate your kind comment and glad you liked the images too. Look forward to reading your contribution.


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Jodah 2 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thanks for reading Anna. I appreciate your kind comment and glad you liked the images too. Look forward to reading your contribution.


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Jodah 2 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Alicia, thanks for your great comment. Glad I could keep Frank's chilling theme going.


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BlossomSB 2 years ago from Victoria, Australia

Fascinating continuation. I wonder where it will go next.


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Jodah 2 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thank you Blossom, that is the fun of more than one author of a poem. You never know where it will go.


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Dana Tate 2 years ago from LOS ANGELES

That was food for thought Jodah: Good versus evil fighting for the soul of the newly departed. I liked it. Voted up!


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Jodah 2 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thanks for reading this Dana. I know it's a dark tale, but glad you liked it. I appreciate the vote up.


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DDE 2 years ago from Dubrovnik, Croatia

I liked this kind of poem something so different and so much to think about.


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Jodah 2 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thank you Devika, it is a different type of poem for me to write as well. Glad you liked it though.


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ubanichijioke 2 years ago from Lagos

i love...

i could see them in my mind's eye; the faces and hollowness within the spaces as they wait to take what theirs is not.

well written, Sire.


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Jodah 2 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thank you Alexander. I am glad you could imagine this eerie scene. Appreciate your kind comment.


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bravewarrior 2 years ago from Central Florida

Excellent contribution, Jodah. You kept the flow going.


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Jodah 2 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thank you Shauna, I did my best.


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AudreyHowitt 2 years ago from California

This is one of my absolute favorite genres John--well done!


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jhamann 2 years ago from Reno NV

Great job Jodah! What a creepy video you have shared! Jamie


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Jodah 2 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thanks Audrey, I appreciate your kind comment. It is one of my favourite genres to read or watch as well but strangely I have written very little in this way. Maybe I should do more. I enjoyed this challenge.


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Jodah 2 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thanks Jamie. Glad you enjoyed. I loved your verse as well.


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nighthag 2 years ago from Australia

there is nothing more exciting then letting the darker side of our writing come out, which you have done with beautiful grace and great flair here.

so very very well done!


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Jodah 2 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thanks so much nighthag. I agree it is exhilarating to let the darker side out occasionally. Most of my writing tends towards the positive, inspirational or funny, but once in a while my other side escapes...lol. I hope you check out the other hubber's contributions to this poem.


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The Examiner-1 2 years ago

You did a great job in portraying ghosts. It was an awesome poem. Voted up, shared and Pinned.

Kevin

P.S. - One question, I see that you also did a good job on linking. I linked to Frank's sire but it did not work out right. Can you tell me what I may have done wrong? Thank you.


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Jodah 2 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Hi Kevin, thanks for those kind comments, share and pin.

All I do is right click the whole url in the search window and copy t to a link capsule. make sure you click on 'add link' and 'done' and it should work.


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The Examiner-1 2 years ago

Thanks Jodah. That is what I did with the link - as always.


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Jodah 2 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

I don't know why it wouldn't work then. Frank himself was having trouble linking hubs to hs a few days back. maybe you have the same problem...could be a glitch somewhere. Maybe ask him what he did.


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The Examiner-1 2 years ago

I had a link to his Hub but it did not show the same as it did in yours.


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Jodah 2 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

ok, I tweeked the wording of the link titles and description.


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The Examiner-1 2 years ago

I just compared mine with yours and they are the same. I must have seen it wrong the first time. Sorry about that.


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Jodah 2 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Ok, no problem.


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Moms-Secret 2 years ago from Central Florida

Great Jodah, it went from Frank's voice into yours without a seam. I like the creepy music clip too. Nice.


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Moms-Secret 2 years ago from Central Florida

I wrote off of this one. Fun. I have to go back and read all of the other posts. There are so many. It will take a while, I am sure.

Anyway, There is something I made for you guys on it. It was my way of showing your works without having my work flagged for plagiarism. Feel free to take it :)

http://hubpages.com/literature/Spirits-Sat-as-Mour...


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Jodah 2 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thank you Moms, for your kind comments. I read your stanza and it was amazing, fitted in perfectly also. Thank you so much for the pic with the imbedded text, I have used that already on here. Great work! I am sure you will enjoy all the other verses as well. Have fun.


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Phyllis Doyle 2 years ago from High desert of Nevada.

Very good, Jodah. I love what Moms did with your poem on the image and I am glad to see you added it to your hub. You started us all out by your first response to Frank, and you did so with class. Thank you.

I have commented on a few other contributions as they came by my way, now I am starting at the beginning to catch the flow of the whole challenge.


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Jodah 2 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Great idea Phyllis. I was waiting until all contributions seemed to be finished before attempting to go back through in order. There are some great contributions.

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