Subtle Spector

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She waits for me in the calm

Between songs on the radio

And the sleeping sighs of my child


Less like an unsprung feline

More like a gentle fog

Held back by a weakening veil


I feel the tears, her hand maids

Biding their time

Welling, waiting


I hold love up like a shield

Her polar opposite

No safer distance can one achieve


But my arm grows tired

And patiently like a breath inhaled

She waits for the inevitable


Nervous giggles betray my truth

As positive thoughts become intermittent

My once potent smile fades


There is only quiet when I strain to hear sweet nothings

Joy washes down the drain as easily as my mascara

I am left struggling to remember what I’m thankful for


And fear wafts in

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Tony DeLorger profile image

Tony DeLorger 5 years ago from Adelaide, South Australia

Well written RB. Thanks for sharing.


Randy Behavior profile image

Randy Behavior 5 years ago from Near the Ocean Author

Thanks for coming by and commenting Tony. I appreciate it.


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saddlerider1 5 years ago

I loved these verses

"She waits for me in the calm

Between songs on the radio

And the sleeping sighs of my child"

I am thankful to be reading your poetry, simply brilliant your mascara looks fine from here. Rated Up, bravo.


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Randy Behavior 5 years ago from Near the Ocean Author

Greetings dear Saddlerider! Doug Turner and I were discussing the use of mascara as a metaphor, so I dug this one up. But, yes its a good eyelash day for me. :)


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Hmrjmr1 5 years ago from Georgia, USA

definitely a Thumbs up and Awesome lass. great imagery. All in All magnifico.


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Randy Behavior 5 years ago from Near the Ocean Author

Hi Hmrjmr1! Don't think I've gotten a "magnifico" before :) Thanks much.


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Hmrjmr1 5 years ago from Georgia, USA

Maybe not on Hub pages but I'd bet you have dear :)


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Randy Behavior 5 years ago from Near the Ocean Author

I had to giggle at that. No I am NOT blushing.


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sligobay 5 years ago from east of the equator

"And fear wafts in " is such a fine conclusion to the dread of the 'gentle fog' of the ever-patient and chilling reaper. Thank you.


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Randy Behavior 5 years ago from Near the Ocean Author

Thank you sligobay. She is not death as one might guess from some of the lines. "She" is fear, she is depression, she is darkness.


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bbnix 5 years ago from Southern California

Fear, depression and darkness indeed. Both friend and foe at he same time ... perhaps. She wears down, but is that her breath I feel speeding up.

Excitingly dramatic. I'm a new fan and love your bio. Life is entirely too short for anything else..

Great writing and good luck - well worth a thumbs up. Looking forward to reading more...


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sligobay 5 years ago from east of the equator

Depression and I have a lifetime personal relationship. I can therefore agree with the writer and that explains the handmaidens of tears to me. Whatever the object connected by we readers; your images are wonderfully vivid. Thanks.


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Micky Dee 5 years ago

Very pretty Randy.


Doug Turner Jr. 5 years ago

The arm grows tired holding up the shield of love -- I like that image and metaphor. Oh, and the tears as hand maidens thing too. Your clean, minimalist style is the way to go. Words have so much more value when there's less of them. Very nice.


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Mr.Moonlight 5 years ago from Tampa (SoHo)

"I am left struggling to remember what I’m thankful for"

That just resonates with me. Thank you.


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Nikkij504gurl 5 years ago from Louisiana

the calm before the storm! this was really good. made me think of a couple of different scenarios this could possibly be from.


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Randy Behavior 5 years ago from Near the Ocean Author

I awoke to so many comments this morning. A wonderful start to my birthday. Communicating with other writers is what makes HP so wonderful.

Sligobay, you're welcome and thank you for reading.

Morning Micky, thanks for commenting.

Thank you for your feedback Doug. A critic after reading my The Bath poem said I was too lazy to write a short story so I wrote a poem. He didn't get it; I'm glad you do.

Thanks for coming by Mr.Moonlight. We are all more alike than we are different.

This comes from a rough year Nikki. But hey, 2011 is gonna be awesome!


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Randy Behavior 5 years ago from Near the Ocean Author

Sorry I missed you up there bbnix. I hope you will read more and of course, tell me what you think.


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Nikkij504gurl 5 years ago from Louisiana

i hope so. last year was some of my worse heartbreaks and breakdowns. lets hope this year theres none of those.


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Randy Behavior 5 years ago from Near the Ocean Author

But on the upside, great source material :)


bbnix profile image

bbnix 5 years ago from Southern California

Thanks Randy.

Happy Birthday!!

Also known for George Washington's b-day, but more interestingly, "World thinking day." Hmm, makes sense with what I've been reading from you.

Oh, and I'll make the definitive assertion here that 2011 is going to be spectacular...


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Randy Behavior 5 years ago from Near the Ocean Author

Thanks bbnix ;D I used to get my Birthday off from school until "they" decided to create Presidents Day, boo hiss. Didn't know about World Thinking Day, but LOVE that.


Nikkij504gurl profile image

Nikkij504gurl 5 years ago from Louisiana

always. our best work comes from the worst times. oh and btw happy bdaY!


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Randy Behavior 5 years ago from Near the Ocean Author

I totally agree! Point of View comes from the saddest day of my life to date. Without poetry it would have much harder to process. Keep writing Nikki. (and thanks for the bday wishes)


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Nikkij504gurl 5 years ago from Louisiana

you too and your very welcome!


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McHamlet 5 years ago

Beautifully done, Randy, potent and moving. I really like the use of metaphor here especially in the second verse. I guess most of us have had moments like these and as Nikki mentioned they often inspire us. Glad you were inspired') (and Happy Birthday!)


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Randy Behavior 5 years ago from Near the Ocean Author

Thanks McHamlet. Poetry for me comes from my strongest emotions, but when I'm joyous I guess I'm to busy too write :)


PenMePretty 5 years ago

Emotional/nice!!!


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Randy Behavior 5 years ago from Near the Ocean Author

Thanks for the feedback PMP!


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apache13 5 years ago from Belleville AR.

Fear being a lady? I like the way you put these together will for sure be reading more as I can,good work.the pic drew me to this one.


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Randy Behavior 5 years ago from Near the Ocean Author

Yes I think of fear as female. I guess because she patient and slippery. Thanks for the comment. I love alicepopkorn on flickr, she does amazing photography.


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Twilight Lawns 5 years ago from Norbury-sur-Mer, Surrey, England. U.K.

UP and AWESOME. I can honestly say that that is an amazing piece of writing... I wish I could have claimed it as my own.

Need I say more?

But the parallels between yours and mine are quite alarming... Yours is the better piece. It really is.


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Randy Behavior 5 years ago from Near the Ocean Author

I think at its base, fear is truly universal. Thanks for the compliment. Maybe I should go dig something up from when I was 20... that'd be a more fair comparison. lol.


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Twilight Lawns 5 years ago from Norbury-sur-Mer, Surrey, England. U.K.

It wasn't an empty compliment. I meant it. I never go into competition... unless I know I am going to win. But I really love your stuff, that I have read.

We have the most amazing language in the world, but have you ever thought to yourself, "With all these words to play around with, why do so many people choose such mundane combinations?"


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Randy Behavior 5 years ago from Near the Ocean Author

If it weren't for the mundane combinations, I wouldn't know to treasure yours.


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Twilight Lawns 5 years ago from Norbury-sur-Mer, Surrey, England. U.K.

Big smiley face!!!

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